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Vacant Soul

~ Stood in time, this lost and lonely peer stripped of life where darkness comes to call o' tempest dream of endless disappear let not be me who bends this 'pleted fall Dearest pain, my skin reflects in death candles drip, lone aching now to crave melted forms in shadow's final breath earthen mounds, o' this my tortured grave Vacant soul, tormented is thy weave come to mourn, o' ye of dire stare cast thy fill in gravel to relieve final wish, this hour of despair Pull this soil with spade of coated blood deeper still for thou hast cast the sign chiseled dates and names, farewells a' flood memories 'long crooked festered line Still, these winds in hallowed echoes flow endless chants, where haunted arches breach thick of vine and foothold dangers show gasp for air, deflated lungs now preach O' these fears lie anguished, ever deep press the lid of wood and rotted feel when the past has nothing left to reap of this peer, thy darkness shall reveal ~

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Date: 2/3/2020 12:50:00 PM
I love the dark & you've taken me there so beautifully. Haunting & graceful. Pls do more.
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Chris Green
Date: 2/3/2020 12:55:00 PM
Thanks so much Jean. I don't normally enter the dark worlds like this but do on occasion. I appreciate your kindness
Date: 1/25/2020 9:58:00 PM
I can do no better service to you and this piercing write than echo John Hamilton's comments below. I agree with them completely---if not more. Thanks, Gershon
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Chris Green
Date: 1/27/2020 8:02:00 AM
Thank you my friend for all of your kindness.
Date: 1/24/2020 10:19:00 AM
Very well written. Despair, a soul feeling vacant and welcoming death. Striking, powerful and thought provoking. Excellent poem Chris :)
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Chris Green
Date: 1/24/2020 10:36:00 AM
Thank you my friend. I am thrilled you liked this little stroll on the dark side.
Date: 1/24/2020 9:48:00 AM
I really enjoyed this trip into darkness, archaic language gives it a strange appeal, you've surpassed yourself with this dark offering, loved it. I could feel Vincent Price narrating this one!
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Chris Green
Date: 1/24/2020 10:35:00 AM
Thanks my friend. Glad you liked it. Just had a dark spurt yesterday. : )
Date: 1/24/2020 8:58:00 AM
So delightfully dark and spooky, the lost and dreadful man wrapped in the dark! Love it!
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Chris Green
Date: 1/24/2020 9:19:00 AM
Thanks Kim for reading and commenting. I am happy you liked this
Date: 1/23/2020 8:00:00 PM
This one in it's darkness has such a compelling force to it to that draws the reader into your vivid imagery... you weild an excellent pen even in deep, dark writes! Well done Chris!
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Chris Green
Date: 1/24/2020 9:19:00 AM
Thank you so very much Sandy for always leaving such nice thoughts for me to find. I appreciate you my friend very much.
Date: 1/23/2020 6:02:00 PM
You captured the futility of a vacant soul so well, Chris. The hopeless feels palpable as well as the finality of death. Well written and your rhythmic meter is spot on, as usual...excellent write! :)
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Chris Green
Date: 1/24/2020 9:18:00 AM
Thanks Laura, I appreciate your visit to my poetry
Date: 1/23/2020 5:58:00 PM
when the past has nothing left to reap that's my fav line... excellent write. It was on the dark side, and I like that yet still held hope and possibilities as if they shadowed backward. Your imagery was superb. Ann
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Chris Green
Date: 1/24/2020 9:17:00 AM
Thanks so very much Ann for your kind thoughts

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