~vacant Dwelling~

I’ve been here many times before The door still wears the same coat of paint The gold colored doorknob Have only few patches of gold left The years of wear and tear evident Sliding it open that old familiar smell Wafts pass me, as if in a rush to escape… The emptiness screams at me In a fight to jolt my memory Alas it’s not necessary I use to spend days here Recollection comes naturally Days of lying on the couch Soaking up the fresh sea breeze, When the day was almost done You sitting in your favorite chair We would talk for hours at a time Now all that’s left are memories Laughter is gone and with it the sun Too many open spaces In this place where love use to dwell…

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 11/26/2010 6:08:00 PM
very deep write here my friend
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Date: 11/22/2010 5:57:00 PM
Hi Wilma.Your memories become my memories as you take me on an emotional journey as I read.You write this with such wonderful realism that I am walking through the door and seeing as you see. feeling your sadness and empty heart.This is lovely and very moving especially your last few lines.Very enjoyable.Thank you.Thank you also for your comments on my Dance.....I'm so glad you liked it.Love June (S)
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Date: 11/21/2010 10:02:00 AM
Terrific capture of the empty apartment scene Wilma. If you have entered this into Matt's contest, I wish you good luck >> James :)
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Date: 11/21/2010 7:12:00 AM
Darn the memories, they never obey the eviction orders and leave like people do. Some times they can be a warm coat though. Nice write, my friend
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Date: 11/20/2010 6:28:00 PM
wow! super deep,, i wonder where this came from,, love the part where the doorknobs paint has not much on it,,,, nice Wilam, the emptyness dwells good in this entry,..p.d.
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Date: 11/20/2010 1:13:00 PM
Perfect entry Wilma .. a very touching write my friend.. and many recollections of the way things used to be and are no longer ..good luck in the contest luv.. for Matt... enjoy a Happy Thanksgiving with your family luv..
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Date: 11/20/2010 12:39:00 PM
This is a perfect poem for Matt's "Empty Room" Contest, Wilma! One of the best I've seen so far. We must be thankful for memories such as these 'cause they enrich our lives. I love the imagery, Wilma..transported to this place I can feel the peace and joy you experienced. Hope you're enjoying your weekend! Love, Audrey
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Date: 11/20/2010 6:41:00 AM
Old houses are haunted and haunting. I can think of only one and I remember nearly every inch of the place. The last time I visited my old childhood home it was painted purple. Ouch! Great write. LOve, Dave
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Date: 11/20/2010 6:33:00 AM
Nice memories of the past you have penned in this write. Good luck, Wilma
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Date: 11/20/2010 6:23:00 AM
Oh, you describe the feelings you have about this now vacant home so well, Wilma. How sad to relive these memories of happier days without your loved one. If this is for the empty apartment contest, it should place very high! Excellent poem, my friend, and it goes to my favorites. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/20/2010 5:14:00 AM
This may be my favorite of yours..its a painful but beautiful read. BG
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Date: 11/20/2010 3:51:00 AM
I love when our poetry is compared. But this is much better then mine I must say. Well. Done my partner in crime. With love Michael
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Date: 11/19/2010 11:43:00 PM
a song of quiet torment.. i inhale this beautiful, gripping piece, wilma... may you enter this in the "empty apartment" contest.. best of luck! warmest, nette
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Date: 11/19/2010 9:11:00 PM
wow, another awesome one. I just finished reading Michael's. and now I see this one that I really like too. Glad I am not judging THIS contest! Thanks for your comment today. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 11/19/2010 9:05:00 PM
now that's a good poem, deep passion
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