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Utopia

My mystical fairy exclaims~ there’s a place I know, A dreamland of fantasy, exempt from human woe Undisturbed by misery of tenebrous earthly throe Where nightmares don’t exist, dreams come true And moonlit dawns wallow as whispers of love woo Blushing sun’s amber glow, scintillating cobalt blue. She leads me on pathways paved in bricks of gold Pointing to motifs of signs jeweled glamorously bold, Evidence of affluence and prosperity citizens behold Free from mortal worries, luxuriating life carefree On lagoons and sandy beaches of paradisiacal sea Where passions tango and romantic yearnings spree. Lies are unheard in this land, truth is never blurred, Vocabulary insists love is a precious, beloved word As neither hate, nor bigotry, nor jealousies bemoan For benevolence and compassion eminently atone Offering misdeeds forgiveness as prayers seek solace Sending imperfection to learn from sage of flawless. Enticed by her charm, to elixir of ecstasy I’m drawn Traversing unknown where no human has ever gone In wonderland of opulence~ utopian, exotic, perfect, Exuding eminence distinguished by esoteric intellect; There, I’m awakened, hypnotized in kiss of goodbye When despondent in illusion, my reality utters a sigh. November 14, 2021 Placed 2nd: “U” Contest, New Poems Only Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France Theme: Utopia

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Date: 11/30/2021 2:33:00 PM
I want to go there, please? Congrats on a 2nd. Great poem. "There, I’m awakened, hypnotized in kiss of goodbye When despondent in illusion, my reality utters a sigh." Powerful close, Bill
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Date: 11/21/2021 7:12:00 PM
You know what they say when it sounds or reads 'too good to be true?' They get insanely jealous of the person who could pen such a magical vision of Utopia... When they get over their huff, they too 'utter a sigh,' Vijay. Brilliant write! Vivid Visions, Gershon
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/22/2021 7:53:00 AM
Much appreciate your kind remarks, Gershon. Many thanks.
Date: 11/20/2021 7:42:00 AM
Very well done Vijay! Congratulations on your win!!
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Date: 11/22/2021 7:52:00 AM
Thank you Mark--much appreciate.
Date: 11/18/2021 11:38:00 AM
Congrats on your very high placement Vijay! I thought this would do well !!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/19/2021 6:32:00 AM
Thank you for your return visit Mike. Much appreciate, as always.
Date: 11/18/2021 8:07:00 AM
Once you’ve experienced Utopia, nothing can compare. We see hints all around but they are mixed with too many unpleasantries. Oh to wake up from the fairyland back to reality…a vicious bump of bumps and bruises. Love your wording and imagery. Elixir of ecstasy, Undisturbed by misery of tenebrous earthly throe, On lagoons and sandy beaches of paradisiacal sea…
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/19/2021 6:31:00 AM
That is so nice to hear, Kim. Much appreciate your detailed feedback. Many thanks for the kind remarks.
Date: 11/18/2021 7:07:00 AM
WoW! Vijay, That sounds like what utopia is to me. You have penned such a well-written and engaging verse. I see congrats are already in order, congratulations on a well-deserved win. Well done my friend. Have a wonderful day.
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Date: 11/18/2021 7:20:00 AM
So very kind of you my friend. Much appreciate, Alexis. Many thanks.
Date: 11/17/2021 6:05:00 PM
Another superb poem from your pen Vijay, congrats. Harry
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2021 7:20:00 AM
Thank you Harry. Glad you stopped by.
Date: 11/17/2021 5:21:00 AM
This is a beautiful place and I felt taken to it with your writing. Thank you . So well done Vijay. Congratulations!
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Date: 11/18/2021 7:19:00 AM
Glad to hear that Heidi. Much appreciate as always. Many thanks.
Date: 11/16/2021 1:23:00 PM
Vijay, beautifully penned and congratulations on your Second Place win in my "U" Contest, New Poems ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2021 7:19:00 AM
Much appreciate Constance. Thank you for hosting contests.
Date: 11/16/2021 7:17:00 AM
Vijay, a huge CONGRATULATIONS on your win with this magnificent piece! Janice
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2021 7:18:00 AM
Thank you Janice. So very kind of you.
Date: 11/16/2021 4:53:00 AM
Outstanding writing! Congratulations.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2021 7:18:00 AM
Welcome back my friend. Many thanks.
Date: 11/16/2021 12:10:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win with this beautiful write in Dear Heart's contest Vijayji...God bless...~ Ani
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Date: 11/18/2021 7:18:00 AM
Many thanks for your return visit. Always a joy to read your feedback.
Date: 11/15/2021 1:31:00 PM
gorgeous poetry on utopia, Vijay. Congrats for your win.
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Date: 11/18/2021 7:17:00 AM
Thank you Andrea. Much appreciate.
Date: 11/15/2021 10:31:00 AM
Beautiful writing on Utopia. "Enticed by her charm, to elixir of ecstasy I’m drawn Traversing unknown where no human has ever gone" Beautiful. Congratulations!
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Date: 11/18/2021 7:17:00 AM
Thank you Christuraj--glad you stopped by.
Date: 11/15/2021 6:31:00 AM
I am enticed by your charms Vijay, every word penned beautiful and etched in dreams, have a great day, keep penning, L(:
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Date: 11/18/2021 7:16:00 AM
Thank you Vienna--much appreciate.
Date: 11/15/2021 3:08:00 AM
What a heavenly place you take the reader Vijay, sadly reality kicks in and you realise it was but an illusion. Good luck in the contest and enjoy your week ahead. Tom
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/15/2021 5:25:00 AM
So true--reality kicks in soon enough. Much appreciate Tom, your kind remarks. Many thanks for your good wishes.
Date: 11/15/2021 1:03:00 AM
A perfect write on a perfect place - "Utopia"... that we all wish to be in... atleast in our dreams. Amazing choice of words as always, that flow well with the theme of the poem and beautiful rhymes Vijayji. "Exuding eminence distinguished by esoteric intellect"... loved the alliteration here. My fav line: "As neither hate, nor bigotry, nor jealosies bemoan". Best wishes in the contest.. ~ Ani
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/15/2021 5:23:00 AM
Glad you liked the poem, Ani. I value your opinion and the time you take to write a detailed feedback. Much appreciate as always. Many thanks.
Date: 11/14/2021 7:51:00 PM
You picture a place without defects, Vijay. The rhyme is terrific. Excellently crafted with a selection of magnificent words. Dear friend, I wish you the best of luck in this contest. And I hope you're doing well.
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Date: 11/15/2021 5:20:00 AM
Thank you my friend for your complimentary feedback. Always a pleasure to read your comments, Lasaad. Much appreciate your good wishes.
Date: 11/14/2021 5:43:00 PM
In wonderland of opulence~ utopian, exotic, perfect" I can see why she lead you to such a place. (Soft sigh) Yes, in dreams anything is possible. Keep floating in those magical moments. Reality can wait. :) This is beautiful in so many amazing ways. :) Brandy
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Date: 11/15/2021 5:18:00 AM
Yes indeed! Reality can wait its turn to be disheartened in illusion. Always a joy to read you feedback my friend. Much appreciate as always. Many thanks, Brandy.
Date: 11/14/2021 11:34:00 AM
and i'm enticed by the charm of this.:) nice rhyming, should do well in the contest
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/14/2021 2:02:00 PM
Thank you Charlotte. Much appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 11/14/2021 10:13:00 AM
You describe a place that has no fault. Great rhyme scheme. Very intelligently done plus wonderful choice of vocabulary. Best for a win.
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Date: 11/14/2021 2:02:00 PM
Much appreciate your kind remarks, Victor. Many thanks, as always, for your visit and comments.
Date: 11/14/2021 8:41:00 AM
What a wonderland of exotic beauty and unrivalled charm you have created. This exceeds all demarcations of beauty, an ordinary human being can coceive of..... a world devoid of all vices, where Love reigns with imperial majesty. Yet your feet are firmly planted on reality at the end. Wish you all the best in this contest dear friend.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/14/2021 9:32:00 AM
I am so glad you highlighted that ending line my dear friend. Much appreciate, Valsa, you taking the time to write detailed feedback. Much freedom to write about the unfamiliar world as you have noted. Many thanks for your kind remarks.
Date: 11/14/2021 7:25:00 AM
I see you’ve connected with your spiritual heart, here now within! Beautiful write, Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/14/2021 8:08:00 AM
Honored by your visit US. Glad you found parts of this poem exploring the spiritual world. I know your poems are devoted to spirituality and ultimate enlightenment of the soul. Much appreciate you stopping by. Many thanks.
Date: 11/14/2021 7:04:00 AM
But dreams do come true Vijay and should yours bear reality, what a world that would be! Your words are exquisite and truly evocative of Utopia! Good Luck !!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/14/2021 8:05:00 AM
So very kind of you Mike. Reality is much less alluring so we humans dream. Much appreciate your visit and comments. Many thanks for your kind remarks.
Date: 11/14/2021 4:56:00 AM
A great place to imagine living life in, Vijay:) great description:)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/14/2021 8:03:00 AM
Thank goodness for dreams and fantasies to color our lives. Much appreciate your visit and comments, Jo. Many thanks.
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