Used

Let's start with way back several years ago
When I was still young and naïve

I believed I was in love 
But how wrong I was 
Because all I really was was used. 

He had golden hair and loving eyes, 
At least when he wasn't angry 
But he very often was 

I had moved into his place 
Because I thought he was as great as he seemed 
I was delicate, fragile, and easy to break 
And break was just what he did 

One day we got into a terrible fight  
Raging, he was 
He raised his hand 
And I couldn't run fast enough 
The next day I escaped with bruises and scars 
I wish I'd done something, anything at all 
But I thought I deserved what I got 

So months this little cycle went on
He screamed, and he fought, and it used everything I had
Just to escape with my life. 

Those days changed me for sure 
I don't know how to get on with the world 
The reason I escaped, and the only reason indeed, 
Is because I took action against him. 

His hands around my neck, I had nothing else to do
And he would've killed me if I hadn't grabbed the nearest weapon in view 

The last vision in my mind as I escaped from this place, 
Was him, lying on the ground, unconscious 

So now, as I'm sitting at home, safely writing this,
All I have left of him, are the hand-shaped marks on my neck. 


WRITER'S STATEMENT: 
I tried writing a deeper, darker poem today. Although it may not rhyme, the most important part is that it tells a story. It's obviously about deadly physical abuse, but it's also about being aware, and not letting yourself go so deep in those situations that you could die.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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January 16, 2017 at 3:35 AM
Ok,...has a narration it sits informative, and reasonably well written, but it falls into the category of " tell" , however with a little intensity and shortening, this could be a " show" ...Ian
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January 16, 2017 at 6:59 AM
As I said before, I cannot receive soup mail for some strange reason. So although I can see your mail... I can't reply. I'm glad to have your advice though, as I'm new to poems.
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January 16, 2017 at 6:50 AM
Thank you for your review..... I know I've done better poems, I think I may rewrite.
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