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Unwritten Absence - 1311

There will come a time, at any age When I will no longer grace this page. That’s when I will be out of rhyme. At any age, there will come a time. An unwritten absence, you see, to be exact. I will leave everything on Soup intact. The only difference, there won’t be me. To be exact an unwritten absence, you see. To remember me, do a good deed. Do it for someone who is really in need. Don’t resuscitate me, let my soul go free. Do a good deed to remember me. When I am lying there covered with a sheet. Give my heart to a man who’s own does not beat. Give all my organs to those that need a spare. Covered with a sheet when I am lying there. Give my eyes to that girl, she’s not seen flowers. My ears to a boy who hears silence for hours. Give science my brain to study and unfurl. She’s not seen flowers, give my eyes to that girl. If there’s something you must bury, let it be every fault. My impatience and envy and failure to exalt. My bigotry and unkind thoughts of an adversary. Let it be every fault, If there’s something you must bury.
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Empress Avatar
September 29, 2023 at 3:28 AM
“To remember me do a good deed” sigh! That touched my heart so deeply. This is so evocative and so well written! Yes even when we are gone our ink will forver remain intact, and will remind readers of who you were. Ill always remember you as the queen of rhymes, and i will always remember these words and thought’s you’ve shared. A very fitting take for the prompt. I felt the depth of this so very much. Thank you for writing. Congratulations on winning
Volumes Avatar
September 29, 2023 at 4:28 AM
Empress, If a poem I have written, actually makes you feel something, the I have achieved my ultimate goal. I am truly pleased. Thank you for your wonderful comment.
Poet Avatar
September 23, 2023 at 2:43 PM
What an exquisite notion! Your words are crafted so exquisitely, dear friend. Even until the very end, you selflessly offer your body parts for the benefit of those in need and science. It's a truly noble concept, and your poem is a masterful display of skillful writing, captivating rhymes, and seamless flow, as you consistently convey your thoughts and talents with clarity. There are numerous dimensions to this poem, evoking emotions and imparting profound wisdom throughout. BOL in the contest
Volumes Avatar
September 23, 2023 at 3:04 PM
Speachless.. thank you so much. Take care.. SV
DiMino Avatar
September 22, 2023 at 7:13 PM
I agree; like Francis, naked in the sun on a grassy hill -- whatever can be recycled, have at it. Well said.
Volumes Avatar
September 23, 2023 at 2:38 AM
Thnx Joe.
Baker Avatar
September 22, 2023 at 1:47 PM
Excellent thoughts on the end of it all, SV. You suggest to others to be kind and caring, and then show us how in giving what you have no use for to those that it will change their life. Very humble way to exit this world. You've put your thoughts into your poetry well, my friend. Bill
Volumes Avatar
September 23, 2023 at 2:38 AM
Thnx Bill
One Avatar
September 22, 2023 at 12:34 PM
Great rhymes and flow to your poem... I think Ink will like this one.. you always express so well and show your talent.. a lot of facets to this poem, emotions, how you feel and words of wisdom..
Volumes Avatar
September 22, 2023 at 1:38 PM
Thank You so much.
Anaya Avatar
September 22, 2023 at 11:53 AM
You are a visionary SV! First stanza I'm already tearing up, I will I will do a good deed you'll see from the heavens above. I can't go on I'm tearing up. SV you have seen a future maybe yours maybe mine.
Volumes Avatar
September 22, 2023 at 1:38 PM
Thank You so much.
Narain Avatar
September 22, 2023 at 10:51 AM
Wow, what a nice poem. Even to the last minute, dedicating the body parts to needy and science. 'Take away all that I hold and bury my mistakes'.! A noble thought, Great penning,
Volumes Avatar
September 22, 2023 at 1:39 PM
Thank You so much.
George Avatar
September 22, 2023 at 1:10 AM
This is the Will and Testament of a noble soul. 'Take away all that I hold and bury my mistakes'.... ! What a lofty thought. So beautifully written, dear sweet friend. All the Best in the contest.
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