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"Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?" - William Shakespeare.

'Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?'
Were I to be more truthful, and less kind
Once fair, your hair now more consumed by gray
Your dewy luster I struggle to find

As weighted toll of years fills in your frame
And roses on your cheeks falter and fade
I can not say if it is age I blame
Or from the fall of youth, a cynic's made

Is it my eyes too blighted to recall
The fragile beauty your face once possessed
No large gash dealt, only dying in small
Moments I turned away from your caress

Unwatered, our garden lies bleak and spent
Winter coating the stems where summers went.

5/14/21

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John Watt

Date: 6/16/2021 12:15:00 PM

Michelle, this is sublime sonnet writing. The shakespearean vibe is evident with the musings on aging, beauty, and love, and the metaphors of seasons and gardens, but overlaid with your own experiences and sensibilities. Loved everything about this; read it three times and will look forward to reading it again in the future. Going in my faves ~ John

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/16/2021 6:44:00 PM

I am so glad for a visit from you, my friend! I thought of soupmailing you to let you know I had done another sonnet, but I know you're a pretty busy fellow these days; I am hoping you find some time to compose more of your delectable poems!

Ann Peck

Date: 6/2/2021 8:04:00 AM

I love this poem; I've made it a fav. You describe age and waning love so perfectly, it made me cry.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/16/2021 6:42:00 PM

I am very touched by your response, thank you so much, Ann.

Juliet Ligon

Date: 5/29/2021 10:34:00 PM

Wow, great job on your unique rendition!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/16/2021 6:41:00 PM

Thank you very much, Juliet~

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/29/2021 3:03:00 AM

Ahhh!! I like the flow, rhyme and rhythm of this one and the topic as well. Very creative use of the feel of Shakespeare's work. Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 6/16/2021 6:41:00 PM

I appreciate your visits as well, Sara, thank you!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/21/2021 4:13:00 PM

this is SUPERB sonneteering!! which contest did it win in? FAVE

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 5/29/2021 9:30:00 PM

Thanks, it was for one of Brian Strands contests

Rico Leffanta

Date: 5/18/2021 11:52:00 AM

Congratulations, Michelle! Proof that thinking through an entry does make a difference! Aloha! Rico

Kim Merryman

Date: 5/17/2021 6:48:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Michelle! Blessings, Kim M

Christuraj Alex

Date: 5/17/2021 5:27:00 AM

Congratulations!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/15/2021 7:48:00 PM

This is better than the original! Bravo, Michelle. FAVE time. :) gw

Quoth Theraven

Date: 5/15/2021 9:29:00 AM

Michelle, 'I can not say if it is age I blame ~~ Or from the fall of youth, a cynic's made' This is a wondeful take on a familiar Sonnet. I've made the switch to a more sustainable, eco-friendly gardening. Giving back to mother nature via organic growing methods, fewer chemicals, and greener alternatives. Makes for a better mulch. -Richard