''Unwanted''

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There was just one time I felt unwanted,
    It was after my big sister was killed;
I can still hear my mother screaming,
      Poor father with his weeping that chilled.

Chilled any heart with its raw emotion,
    Father could be found in a bar drinking;
Mother was depressed and took to her bed,
      I was confused and just stopped speaking.

Speaking softly one day grandma took me,
    I liked the farm with grandma and grandpa;
But I felt unwanted by my own parents,
      I was broken and only wanted to withdraw.

Withdraw to the attic where I found peace,
    It was grandma who encouraged me to write;
Write your sorrow dear heart she whispered,
      I would dream of mother and father at night.

Night was full of my little girl tears falling,
    Then one day mother came to the farm to visit;
She told me that father had stopped drinking,
      I went to my room and hid in the closet.

Closet was so warm, dark, quiet and safe,
    Grandpa said that I was going to a new house;
Father came to get me with wide open arms,
      All I said, daddy can I bring my pet mouse.

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November 5, 2015

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For the contest, How does it feel to be unwanted
Sponsor, Alfred Vassallo


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Date: 11/8/2015 9:23:00 PM
Emotive n heartfelt broken.. u really have a powerful pen dear.. congrats on awesome win!
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Constance La France
Date: 11/9/2015 7:43:00 AM
Upma, thank you for the congrats and for the compliment, appreciated ~
Date: 11/8/2015 12:53:00 AM
Broken Wings...this pain...so real. I'm so happy that you found healing from the pain. Life can be cruel. This is so full of emotions. Congrats on your win, dear.
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Date: 11/8/2015 3:21:00 AM
Eileen, thanks for the kind words, and the congrats, appreciated ~
Date: 11/7/2015 6:34:00 PM
The comfort of being with the grandparents was sweet... and youve captured the feeling of being unwanted through a little girl very well. This is a sad piece, yet it holds a lot of truth. You are a fine poet, BW! I love your moving words. Always, Laura
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Date: 11/8/2015 3:23:00 AM
Laura, thanks for the wonderful comment and yes my grandparents were my strength at that time and thanks for the compliment ~
Date: 11/7/2015 6:28:00 PM
Absolutely heartbreaking to know it is a true story - many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 11/8/2015 3:24:00 AM
Jan, I had a tangled childhood that is for sure, thanks for the congrats ~
Date: 11/7/2015 4:44:00 PM
Constance congratulations on your win!! It was a heartfelt write.
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Date: 11/7/2015 4:47:00 PM
Michael, thanks so much for the congrats, appreciated
Date: 11/7/2015 3:21:00 PM
Broken, Congrats on your win in Freddie's contest. SKAT
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Date: 11/7/2015 4:47:00 PM
Thank you Skat
Date: 11/7/2015 1:16:00 PM
I'm so sorry children should not have to go through so much pain;lots of hugs. Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 11/7/2015 2:08:00 PM
Eve, thank you so much for the comment and congrats, appreciated
Date: 11/7/2015 1:08:00 PM
So heartbreaking and sad, Broken Wings, but so beautifully expressed so the reader can feel your pain. I am so pleased to see your poem placed so high on this very short winner's list. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 11/7/2015 2:09:00 PM
Sandra, thanks for the beautiful comment, I am thrilled to be on that short list
Date: 11/7/2015 11:19:00 AM
Feeling so sad and moved. On each contest I feel so happy to see your win, as you always deserve. May your pain be released Anisha D
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Date: 11/7/2015 12:38:00 PM
Anisha, thanks for the lovely comment, for sure I have had a tangled life of pain and sorrow, but in the end, it is what has made me want to write, on the day of my fathers death I found my muse and became a poet, yet the little girl still lingers ~
Date: 11/7/2015 9:59:00 AM
So heartbreaking is knowing that this is a true story, Constance. I hope it is healing to share such pain, that I'm sure you have carried all these years. So very sad. And yet so compelling. Well written !
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Date: 11/7/2015 12:33:00 PM
Carrie, oh you know that I wear my sadness like a heavy cloak, it has always been that way, but my sorrow also makes me the poet I am, but you are right writing has always been my way of expressing the pain, thanks so much for the visit ~
Date: 11/7/2015 9:11:00 AM
I'd like to give more than 7 on this very moving poem. Congratulations! Janice
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Date: 11/7/2015 9:45:00 AM
Janice, oh thank you so much for that, so appreciated ~
Date: 11/7/2015 9:10:00 AM
I'd like to give more than 7 on this very moving poem. Congratulations! Janice
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Date: 11/7/2015 9:46:00 AM
Thanks again
Date: 11/7/2015 8:19:00 AM
Nicely done Broken...I was a child with so much intensity, my grand mother taught me to write my feelings about life. Most of her poems were lost and I forgot until I needed to remember. Congrats on your win!
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Date: 11/7/2015 8:24:00 AM
Edward, thank you for the congrats, we are so similar in respect to our grandmothers teaching us to write our feelings, I have my grandmothers notebook of poetry, it is a treasure I love ~
Date: 11/7/2015 7:36:00 AM
You do emotion so well Constance, congratulations on your win.
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Date: 11/7/2015 7:51:00 AM
Thank you so much Richard, oh yes sadness and death is something I write of very well ~
Date: 11/7/2015 7:14:00 AM
BW, this is a heartfelt piece. You expressed the feeling of being unwanted very well. Congratulations on your 2nd place win it was well deserved:-)Alexis 7
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Date: 11/7/2015 7:52:00 AM
Thank you Alex for the visiting and the nice comment and the congrats, I am just thrilled with my placement ~
Date: 11/6/2015 12:42:00 PM
So, so touching, Constance! I was there with you virtually! so sorry you went through this time.
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Date: 11/6/2015 12:50:00 PM
Thomas, so nice to have a visit from you, and happy you felt the pain in my write, it still hurts after all these years
Date: 11/5/2015 4:39:00 PM
Broken Wings I can relate to your pain and hurt but your words enforce that feeling of feeling unwanted, so moving, so sincere, it was lovely to read, Thanks cheers Kev
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Constance La France
Date: 11/5/2015 10:16:00 PM
Thank you so much Kevin for visiting my poetry and for that lovely comment, appreciated
Date: 11/5/2015 3:27:00 PM
there are difficult times for us all....now we can stand strong or continue to fall....whichever we decide, we can have no regret....and remember that we can't learn from mistakes if we refuse to reflect....on what stimulated our adversity in the very first place....only when we understand that can the smile return to our face....stand strong my friend....and if you ever need me, just tell me where to begin....;)
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Date: 11/5/2015 5:12:00 PM
you and I both bw....if people only knew what I have been through then they would always show the same kindness I try to always do....but we have talked about your situation and I FEEL your pain....but I don't think many will feel mine....:(
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Constance La France
Date: 11/5/2015 4:07:00 PM
Oh Eric, you are so kind, you know I have had a tangle life but somehow I survived it to reach a place of tranquility, although most of my family is gone now, all those beloved I keep close in my heart, once someone told me that a poet has to suffer to be good and well that is me for sure, thanks for visiting my poetry ~
Date: 11/5/2015 10:09:00 AM
Great write! GL in the contest :) -LU
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Date: 11/5/2015 11:35:00 AM
Thanks Laura
Date: 11/5/2015 9:33:00 AM
Oh that is shocking to hear!! but in your effort to write from your heart you have given us something universally applicable,and even if your wings are broken your heart soars high in the heavens.An excellent write Broken Wings.
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Date: 11/5/2015 11:38:00 AM
Thanks Miraj for the nice comment appreciate
Date: 11/5/2015 9:28:00 AM
This brings tears to my eyes. Grief is hard to bear. This must have been terrible at the time as you have expressed in this poem. I can feel how painful this is. You understand loss and grief more than most. These are things that shape us. I only hope that you can hold dear to your heart that if your wings be broken, you are still an angel and always will be. We should all fly high in our dreams and actions when we can. Thank-you so much for sharing this.
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Date: 11/5/2015 11:42:00 AM
Oh thanks Duke for those lovely words of support as grandma taught me I put my sorrow into writing and that is how and why I still fly on broken wings
Date: 11/5/2015 8:53:00 AM
A true story, this actually happened after my sister was run down by a truck, we went through a difficult time but in the end love won, somehow my parents put it behind them but there was always a sadness in their eyes ~
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