Constance La France Poet Rhyme

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''Unwanted''

There was just one time I felt unwanted,
    It was after my big sister was killed;
I can still hear my mother screaming,
      Poor father with his weeping that chilled.

Chilled any heart with its raw emotion,
    Father could be found in a bar drinking;
Mother was depressed and took to her bed,
      I was confused and just stopped speaking.

Speaking softly one day grandma took me,
    I liked the farm with grandma and grandpa;
But I felt unwanted by my own parents,
      I was broken and only wanted to withdraw.

Withdraw to the attic where I found peace,
    It was grandma who encouraged me to write;
Write your sorrow dear heart she whispered,
      I would dream of mother and father at night.

Night was full of my little girl tears falling,
    Then one day mother came to the farm to visit;
She told me that father had stopped drinking,
      I went to my room and hid in the closet.

Closet was so warm, dark, quiet and safe,
    Grandpa said that I was going to a new house;
Father came to get me with wide open arms,
      All I said, daddy can I bring my pet mouse.

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November 5, 2015

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For the contest, How does it feel to be unwanted
Sponsor, Alfred Vassallo


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Dr. Upma A. Sharma November 8, 2015 at 9:23 PM Emotive n heartfelt broken.. u really have a powerful pen dear.. congrats on awesome win! Constance La France November 9, 2015 at 7:43 AM Upma, thank you for the congrats and for the compliment, appreciated ~

Eileen Manassian November 8, 2015 at 12:53 AM Broken Wings...this pain...so real. I'm so happy that you found healing from the pain. Life can be cruel. This is so full of emotions. Congrats on your win, dear. Constance La France November 8, 2015 at 3:21 AM Eileen, thanks for the kind words, and the congrats, appreciated ~

Laura Breidenthal November 7, 2015 at 6:34 PM The comfort of being with the grandparents was sweet... and youve captured the feeling of being unwanted through a little girl very well. This is a sad piece, yet it holds a lot of truth. You are a fine poet, BW! I love your moving words. Always, Laura Constance La France November 8, 2015 at 3:23 AM Laura, thanks for the wonderful comment and yes my grandparents were my strength at that time and thanks for the compliment ~

Jan Allison November 7, 2015 at 6:28 PM Absolutely heartbreaking to know it is a true story - many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Constance La France November 8, 2015 at 3:24 AM Jan, I had a tangled childhood that is for sure, thanks for the congrats ~

Michael Tor November 7, 2015 at 4:44 PM Constance congratulations on your win!! It was a heartfelt write. Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 4:47 PM Michael, thanks so much for the congrats, appreciated

Skat A November 7, 2015 at 3:21 PM Broken, Congrats on your win in Freddie's contest. SKAT Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 4:47 PM Thank you Skat

Eve Roper November 7, 2015 at 1:16 PM I'm so sorry children should not have to go through so much pain;lots of hugs. Congratulations on your win! Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 2:08 PM Eve, thank you so much for the comment and congrats, appreciated

Sandra Haight November 7, 2015 at 1:08 PM So heartbreaking and sad, Broken Wings, but so beautifully expressed so the reader can feel your pain. I am so pleased to see your poem placed so high on this very short winner's list. Hugs, Sandra Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 2:09 PM Sandra, thanks for the beautiful comment, I am thrilled to be on that short list

Anisha Dutta November 7, 2015 at 11:19 AM Feeling so sad and moved. On each contest I feel so happy to see your win, as you always deserve. May your pain be released Anisha D Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 12:38 PM Anisha, thanks for the lovely comment, for sure I have had a tangled life of pain and sorrow, but in the end, it is what has made me want to write, on the day of my fathers death I found my muse and became a poet, yet the little girl still lingers ~

Carrie Richards November 7, 2015 at 9:59 AM So heartbreaking is knowing that this is a true story, Constance. I hope it is healing to share such pain, that I'm sure you have carried all these years. So very sad. And yet so compelling. Well written ! Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 12:33 PM Carrie, oh you know that I wear my sadness like a heavy cloak, it has always been that way, but my sorrow also makes me the poet I am, but you are right writing has always been my way of expressing the pain, thanks so much for the visit ~

Janice Canerdy November 7, 2015 at 9:11 AM I'd like to give more than 7 on this very moving poem. Congratulations! Janice Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 9:45 AM Janice, oh thank you so much for that, so appreciated ~

Janice Canerdy November 7, 2015 at 9:10 AM I'd like to give more than 7 on this very moving poem. Congratulations! Janice Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 9:46 AM Thanks again

Edward Ebbs November 7, 2015 at 8:19 AM Nicely done Broken...I was a child with so much intensity, my grand mother taught me to write my feelings about life. Most of her poems were lost and I forgot until I needed to remember. Congrats on your win! Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 8:24 AM Edward, thank you for the congrats, we are so similar in respect to our grandmothers teaching us to write our feelings, I have my grandmothers notebook of poetry, it is a treasure I love ~

Richard Lamoureux November 7, 2015 at 7:36 AM You do emotion so well Constance, congratulations on your win. Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 7:51 AM Thank you so much Richard, oh yes sadness and death is something I write of very well ~

Alexis Y. November 7, 2015 at 7:14 AM BW, this is a heartfelt piece. You expressed the feeling of being unwanted very well. Congratulations on your 2nd place win it was well deserved:-)Alexis 7 Constance La France November 7, 2015 at 7:52 AM Thank you Alex for the visiting and the nice comment and the congrats, I am just thrilled with my placement ~

Thomas Martin November 6, 2015 at 12:42 PM So, so touching, Constance! I was there with you virtually! so sorry you went through this time. Constance La France November 6, 2015 at 12:50 PM Thomas, so nice to have a visit from you, and happy you felt the pain in my write, it still hurts after all these years

Kevin Fairbrother November 5, 2015 at 4:39 PM Broken Wings I can relate to your pain and hurt but your words enforce that feeling of feeling unwanted, so moving, so sincere, it was lovely to read, Thanks cheers Kev Constance La France November 5, 2015 at 10:16 PM Thank you so much Kevin for visiting my poetry and for that lovely comment, appreciated

Eric Boddie November 5, 2015 at 3:27 PM there are difficult times for us all....now we can stand strong or continue to fall....whichever we decide, we can have no regret....and remember that we can't learn from mistakes if we refuse to reflect....on what stimulated our adversity in the very first place....only when we understand that can the smile return to our face....stand strong my friend....and if you ever need me, just tell me where to begin....;) Eric Boddie November 5, 2015 at 5:12 PM you and I both bw....if people only knew what I have been through then they would always show the same kindness I try to always do....but we have talked about your situation and I FEEL your pain....but I don't think many will feel mine....:( Constance La France November 5, 2015 at 4:07 PM Oh Eric, you are so kind, you know I have had a tangle life but somehow I survived it to reach a place of tranquility, although most of my family is gone now, all those beloved I keep close in my heart, once someone told me that a poet has to suffer to be good and well that is me for sure, thanks for visiting my poetry ~

Beautiful Scars November 5, 2015 at 10:09 AM Great write! GL in the contest :) -LU Constance La France November 5, 2015 at 11:35 AM Thanks Laura

Miraj Raha November 5, 2015 at 9:33 AM Oh that is shocking to hear!! but in your effort to write from your heart you have given us something universally applicable,and even if your wings are broken your heart soars high in the heavens.An excellent write Broken Wings. Constance La France November 5, 2015 at 11:38 AM Thanks Miraj for the nice comment appreciate

Duke Beaufort November 5, 2015 at 9:28 AM This brings tears to my eyes. Grief is hard to bear. This must have been terrible at the time as you have expressed in this poem. I can feel how painful this is. You understand loss and grief more than most. These are things that shape us. I only hope that you can hold dear to your heart that if your wings be broken, you are still an angel and always will be. We should all fly high in our dreams and actions when we can. Thank-you so much for sharing this. Constance La France November 5, 2015 at 11:42 AM Oh thanks Duke for those lovely words of support as grandma taught me I put my sorrow into writing and that is how and why I still fly on broken wings

Constance La France November 5, 2015 at 8:53 AM A true story, this actually happened after my sister was run down by a truck, we went through a difficult time but in the end love won, somehow my parents put it behind them but there was always a sadness in their eyes ~