Untold

Oh, how I blush, in appeal of your zeal Enthralled in treasured memories of glee As words not said, intimately unseal Verses of love arousing latent plea In caged lofty dreams, longing to be free Flirting secretly, letting passions rise Pulsing my vibes, sensing sensuous highs; Alas, my youth then, had nary a clue How to woo your smile, courting doting eyes-- Bashful to tell you, how much I loved you. August 13, 2020 Placed 1st: Pick-A-Title, Vol 21 - Dizain - Poetry contest Title chosen: Untold Sponsor: Edward Ibeh Ten syllables per line (howmanysyllables.com)

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Valsa George

Date: 12/13/2021 3:11:00 AM

Words of love never told but communicated through gestures and eyes convey more. What you hid in your mind must have been surmised by her... and she must have been waiting to hear them voiced ! Powerfully expressed Vijay !

Angela Crabtree

Date: 10/5/2020 9:51:00 AM

Very beautiful, Vijay. A lot of emotion expressed :)

V. Deepa

Date: 8/26/2020 10:47:00 PM

Flying back to you with my heartily Congratulations dear Vijay sir:-) As I predicted earlier.. lovely to see it placed at top:-)..Keep inspiring with your golden pen.Take care.Warm regards..coming your way..!!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 9/1/2020 5:27:00 AM

Much appreciate Deepa--many thanks.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 8/22/2020 6:43:00 AM

This poem deservedly got a top win Vijay -I hope you eventually told her how much you lover her? Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/22/2020 1:02:00 PM

Much appreciate Jennifer--many thanks.

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 8/21/2020 1:29:00 PM

That's the utmost beauty of what is untold.. rather suggesting and displaying without really saying or revealing! What is untold preserves its mystery and thrill! Just we rely on the raw sweet feelings.. Congratulations on your outshining win, dear Vijay! Great poetry! Well earned! An immense pleasure to read.. My warmest wishes. Regards and blessings.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/22/2020 1:02:00 PM

Much appreciate Besma--many thanks. Regards.

Edward Ibeh

Date: 8/19/2020 5:08:00 PM

Heartiest congratulations for your top win in my contest with this spectacular poem, Vijay:-) You always give my contests your all!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/20/2020 3:24:00 PM

Much appreciate Edward--many thanks.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/18/2020 7:56:00 AM

I love your line, "Bashful to tell you, how much I loved you." Guess we all go though it. A wonderful write. Enjoy your day writing away.............

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/18/2020 3:22:00 PM

Much appreciate Paula--many thanks.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/16/2020 9:56:00 AM

Loved “how to woo your smile.” You are a beautiful writer with romantic lines.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/16/2020 11:43:00 AM

So very kind of you Kim--much appreciate my friend--many thanks.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 8/16/2020 2:00:00 AM

Endearing poem, smartly done, Vijay. I may have to try my hand at the Dizain form. This is a most excellent poem, my dear friend. Smiles and smiles of joy always.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/16/2020 11:42:00 AM

You are so very kind my friend--much appreciate your kind remarks. Many thanks.

Silent One

Date: 8/15/2020 1:05:00 PM

We've a been there... I used to be too shy to ask a girl out and now I think about all those girls that waited for me to ask them, but I didn't.... I guess these things happen for a reason.. great choice for the contest

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/16/2020 11:42:00 AM

You are right, SO--most of us can recall some version of this. Much appreciate your comments my friend. many thanks.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/15/2020 12:10:00 PM

Oh that awkward time of our youth, but how quickly we learn. Well written Vijay, and good luck. Tom

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/16/2020 11:40:00 AM

Thank you Tom--much appreciate. Enjoy your vacation!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/15/2020 11:55:00 AM

I think in youth we are often too shy to express feelings of love. Your memory of this bashful period made an excellent dizain. Best wishes in the contest, my friend! Hugs, Carolyn

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/16/2020 11:40:00 AM

Thank you my friend--much appreciate, as always, Carolyn.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/15/2020 10:20:00 AM

A perfect vision of how youth begins to blossom Vijay. I loved it! xxoo

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/16/2020 11:38:00 AM

Thanks for stopping by my friend--much appreciate, especially during your time of grief. Many thanks, Connie. Stay strong! My thoughts and prayers are with you.

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 8/15/2020 12:05:00 AM

Aside from its very smooth rhythms, this poem is also really quite charming, Vijay; very fine poetry.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/15/2020 5:22:00 AM

Much appreciate Lawrence--thank you my friend for your kind remarks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 8/14/2020 9:41:00 PM

"Oh, how I blush" Yes, with those "Untold" thoughts of longing and love. I am blushing while reading these words from your heart. This is beautiful, tender and romantic. Simply breathtaking my dear friend. You have created another Masterpiece. :) Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/15/2020 5:21:00 AM

Thank you my friend. You always bring cheer to the day. Much appreciate your kind remarks, Brandy.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/14/2020 5:16:00 AM

So romantic and touching, Vijay. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/14/2020 6:08:00 AM

Thank you Janice--much appreciate, as always.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/14/2020 5:07:00 AM

Our heart is never really happy with the words our mind comes up with for the heart feels so much more than the words are able to convey! However, my friend, Vijay you have managed to transmit the intensity, warmth, and sincerity of your feelings to your heart's expectations!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/14/2020 6:08:00 AM

Always appreciate your valued remarks my friend--many many thanks.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/14/2020 4:30:00 AM

- Woow, Vijay ... a beautiful and romantic poem :) - "Flirting secretly, letting passions rise Pulsing my vibes, sensing sensuous highs "- Best wishes in the contest :) - Have a wonderful weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/14/2020 6:07:00 AM

So very kind of you Anne-Lise--much appreciate--many thanks.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 8/13/2020 5:35:00 PM

Beautiful Dizain, great lines, "Verses of love arousing latent plea In caged lofty dreams, longing to be free".

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/14/2020 6:07:00 AM

Glad you liked the lines, MLK--haven't seen you much lately. Much appreciate your visit and comments. Many thanks.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 8/13/2020 4:15:00 PM

Hello Vijay pandit, don't be shy- tell her how you feel. enjoy your evening my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 8/14/2020 3:46:00 PM

Hello Vijay Pandit, you are so welcome. Enjoy your evening my friend.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/14/2020 6:06:00 AM

Thank you for your visit and comments Darlene--much appreciate.

V. Deepa

Date: 8/13/2020 1:45:00 PM

"Bashful to tell you, how much I loved you"... Aa ha....beautiful lines Vijay sir.:-) Perfect for the theme.I am sure this is gonna be placed #top :-) Best wishes sent to you sir.. I enjoyed your love filled muse!! Take care.Warmest regards.:-)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/14/2020 6:05:00 AM

So very kind of you, Deepa. Much appreciate your feedback--many thanks.

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/13/2020 1:17:00 PM

Very sweet! You have shown the untold so well with this poem :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 8/14/2020 6:04:00 AM

Thank you my friend--much appreciate Heidi.