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Until Death Do Us Part

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Tepid tears start to stream down my face At last I get to see you wearing your bridal gown Your dress is made of antique Chantilly lace I’m in the morgue; it’s here that I break down Writing Challenge 5, March 2019, Four Lines - Poetry Contest Sponsored by Dear Heart 3/26/19

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Lindsay Laurie

Date: 3/31/2019 9:11:00 PM

G'day Jan … a tough time for anyone to go through - thank you Jan - Lindsay

Old Buck

Date: 3/30/2019 7:43:00 PM

Jan: It is your "range" that proves your talent. You've proven it here. Thanks. oldbuck

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2019 2:59:00 PM

Thanks Old Buck, some think I am just a humourist and a poor poopy one at that lol, time has come for me to hang up my pen on soup for a whole and get my poems into a book, I am not leaving just soup has become somewhat toxic for me recently and I need a break :-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 3/29/2019 10:50:00 AM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned piece and so emotional too, what a great image to go with your words ~

Jan Allison
Date: 4/1/2019 2:57:00 PM

thanks so much Constance:-) hugs jan xx

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 3/27/2019 4:20:00 PM

Jan, this is soooooooooooooooooo sad, - congratulations on your 1st placing in the contest. Poetry hugs, Jenny.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2019 4:39:00 PM

Thanks so much jenny:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/27/2019 2:22:00 PM

- Congratulations, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2019 2:23:00 PM

thanks Anne:-lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/27/2019 5:16:00 AM

- A heartbreaking poem, Jan - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2019 1:27:00 PM

many thanks Anne;-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

W.A. Cholt

Date: 3/26/2019 7:01:00 PM

Four lines that express it perfectly.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2019 7:16:00 PM

thanks so much for dropping by:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/26/2019 5:38:00 PM

you did a great job showing tragedy and heartbreak, Jan. Just what the doctor ordered (Dear heart in this case!)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2019 6:01:00 PM

thanks Andrea you know I prefer humour but Constance likes sad so I can write sad find it far easier than romantic!:-) hugs jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 3/26/2019 4:32:00 PM

Your four lines are heart breaking, xo

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2019 4:37:00 PM

aww thanks Pixie:-) hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/26/2019 3:13:00 PM

Wow, poetic genius, Jan, sorrowful, thoughtful and tasteful.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2019 3:37:00 PM

aww thanks Caren, first time I've had the phrase poetic genius on my page I should print and frame this comment, seriously some folk think all I can write is poop poetry but I do write the occassional serious poem from time to time:-) hugs Jan xx

Gary Smith

Date: 3/26/2019 3:09:00 PM

Such a sad but lovely write Jan. :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2019 3:36:00 PM

thanks Gary:-) hugs jan xx

Bette Bavington

Date: 3/26/2019 1:04:00 PM

This is so true. My heart is already sad. My friend's husband passed away last night they had been married over 65 years. It is so hard to let go of a loved one. Very well done.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2019 3:35:00 PM

aww Bette I'm so sorry about your friend's loss:-( hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 3/26/2019 12:25:00 PM

I love it, Jan! You successfully appeal to our emotions, and the sad topic makes even more beautiful. I'm sure the sponsor will echo my thoughts. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2019 12:31:00 PM

thanks so much Paul, I much prefer humour but Constance likes sad so I go out of my comfort zone to write for her contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/26/2019 11:54:00 AM

so sad but so beautifully composed! best of luck in the contest, jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2019 12:24:00 PM

I could reverse the poem lines and start with the final one but I think it reads well as it is, makes a change for me to write deep and sad but I know Constance likes melancholy poems and its a challenge for me not to write humour:-) hugs Jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 3/26/2019 11:30:00 AM

Hello Jan, oh ...this.. poem ..is so sad. I feel for the person in this poem.It is hard to lose a loved one. have a nice day my friend.KM

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2019 12:22:00 PM

thanks Darlene:-) hugs Jan xx