Unruly Pachyderm

That's not my elephant! as you can plainly see
My ethnic elephant eats spaghetti with such glee

This silly pachyderm won't eat one single bite
Says its written in the elephant's bill of rights.

She wants to hang our with the second graders
I really think those darn kids must have paid her

My friend Ella gave her a sweet kiss on the nose
And your elephant sprayed her with her elephant hose

She wouldn't even try to read or write
She said the little desks were far to tight

Now I'm not complaining, but what you should do
Is take your darn elephant back to the zoo.....


for Matt's contest..obviously

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Date: 12/28/2010 3:24:00 PM
I give you the top mark for this as it is strongly reminescent of the best of Ogden Nash. You got this well done! Happy New Year. Gerard.
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Date: 12/27/2010 9:25:00 PM
It looks as if I have some more tough competition for this contest. Good descriptive couplets with rhyming while all the requirements are met.
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Date: 12/22/2010 7:35:00 AM
I love this take on Matt's difficult contest, Barbara!! You made it work.........not easy with such a mixed bag of words and phrases! And I love the remark at the end.....the word (obviously!!!) :) Merry Christmas, Barbara.....hope you are staying dry in all this California rain!! :) Love, Carrie
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Date: 12/20/2010 6:37:00 PM
Barbara, i came back to see this and realized I saw it the other day. Gosh, I used that word unruly in MY elephant poem too. I wonder if your word got stuck in my subconscious. I think you and I think a lot alike, judging by the REsolutions poem you did! Tomorrow my mom is gonna be here. I have to get up really early and get her at the airport. Bye now, Andrea
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Date: 12/19/2010 7:29:00 PM
hahaha. for Matt's contest. . . obviously. Yes, that is for sure. I am glad I just read this. I forgot the dang Spaghetti reference in MY poem. DANG IT. Now I will have to think and think how to fit THAT in. Glad I did not post it yet! Good luck in the contest, Barb. I sure enjoyed the image of the little desks too tight for an elephant! haha .LUv, Andrea
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Date: 12/18/2010 4:32:00 PM
This is one I can never forget. Too funny. You have me chuckling. Thanks for your recent comment. I tend to be a little abrasive.
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Date: 12/18/2010 2:40:00 PM
too cute, good luck in the contest Barbara, this was just the most fun I've ever had in a contest I think
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Date: 12/18/2010 2:17:00 PM
You did a great job on this one, Barbara. I laughed thinking about the elephant spraying Ella with her 'elephant hose.' And trying to fit into a second graders desk has to be a challenge. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 12/18/2010 1:40:00 PM
Thanks for the "pachyderm" definition, LNC. Love, Dumbo
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Date: 12/18/2010 1:03:00 PM
Hi Barbara. Yes, the quirkiness of this contest appealed to me. My first thought was that Matt was on the bottle, surely no sane person would ask us to start with that line. Then to put ' spaghetti , Ella, second graders and bill of rights ',into it had me sending for the men with white coats. Especially as we don't have the final 2 in Ireland so I had to look them up. Then I thought, 'what a good exercise'. The best of luck in the contest. Peace and happiness to you and yours. Eamon
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Date: 12/18/2010 10:28:00 AM
Such a cute story behind this poem, fellow LNC! I'm an old fogie and don't know what a "pachyderm" is :( Maybe I need a vocabulary lesson? Or perhaps this neanderthal friend of yours just needs to return to the zoo. LOL Love and best wishes in the contest, Carolyn
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Date: 12/18/2010 9:43:00 AM
Hi Barbara, Very cute poem...I enjoyed it! Happy Holidays...Lay
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Date: 12/18/2010 9:41:00 AM
A pleasurable read, easy flowing tempo.......Lou
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