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February 1, 2024

The tulips in the vase, a clan of lassies fair. Their buds they hold the gold, the pollen of their youth and promise sunrise told, the tulips in the vase, they lounge in waisted glass with petals kidskin sleek in shades as warm as fire, oh, glamor girls trés chic. The tulips in the vase, romantic redheads bloom. Their teacup tepals filled; ideas nouveau riche with secrets sunset spilled, the tulips in the vase as Venus feeds their dreams. Demure, in damsels’ dupe, a still-life painting prop— enslaved for art they droop.

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Valsa George

Date: 11/2/2024 9:44:00 PM

Tulips placed in a vase in your poetic eyes are 'a clan of lassie's fair'. They are indeed 'glamour girls.' They are also 'demure damsels'. Susan you have given them life. But for art's sake, they are enslaved in vases. Great imagination! When I read this, the image of beautiful girls enslaved for other's needs come to my mind. Through out human history, beauty has been commodified and exploited, particularly women's bodies.... I am sure you have alluded to this when you deliberately used the word 'enslaved' and when you say 'they (tulips) droop'. Great thoughts and beautiful use of alliteration.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/4/2024 5:45:00 PM

Dearest Valsa, not only do you possess a tremendous talent for composing poetry but you reveal a deep insight in the critique of poetry too. Your interpretation of my verse is dead-on and you said it with expressive wisdom, "Through out human history, beauty has been commodified and exploited, particularly women's bodies....", so true, unfortunately. Thank you for delving between the layers of my poem to find it's truth, it's heart. Your golden presence shines upon my poem. You are ever appreciated my sweet friend. warmest wishes.. ~Susan

David Crandall

Date: 6/29/2024 10:49:00 PM

Pretty language and phrases, Susan, and interesting progression from lassies fair, to glamour girls, to romantic redheads, and then ultimately, enslaved and drooping. Makes me want to try this form, but then comes the hard part - coming up with the words. Great poem!

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/30/2024 9:40:00 AM

Dear David, I relish your wonderful response to my poem. With your keen sense of rhythm and rhyme I'm sure you'd create a splendid Monchielle Stanza. Indeed, "coming up with the words" to fit the poetic puzzle is the hard part haha! That I know first hand, my friend. Warmest wishes, dear poet.. ~Susan

Jack Horne

Date: 5/28/2024 8:19:00 AM

I chose this poem at random, knowing I would read something beautiful, whichever one I selected - & I wasn't disappointed! Beautiful & profound work, as always, my friend x

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/30/2024 8:08:00 AM

Dear Jack, your gracious visit and heartwarming comments are a delight to receive. I'm gratified by your presence and humbled by your words, my dear friend. Thank you, i am truly touched. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paige Hind

Date: 3/20/2024 7:10:00 PM

Gorgeous writing- I cannot believe hpw gifted you are, you certainly have found your niche. :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/22/2024 4:48:00 PM

Dear Paige, I'm elated yet humbled by your response to my poem. Thank you for sharing in the emotions of this piece with me. Your gracious visit and shining poetic talent is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Jim Slaughter

Date: 2/24/2024 10:29:00 AM

Perfect props for a still-life painting. A lovely piece, Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/25/2024 10:11:00 AM

Dear Jim, your gracious visit and wonderful thoughts are truly appreciated. Thank you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 2/22/2024 3:12:00 PM

Susan, this amazing poem describes such charming moments of admiring the beauty inside a vase. I loved the third verse, especially. This is a fave. Blessings.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/22/2024 5:19:00 PM

Dear Evelyn, wondrous poetess, I'm thrilled to know you enjoyed my poem, especially the third verse. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagination of this poem with me. Your esteemed comments are cherished as is the honor of your fave. Warmest wishes my dear friend.. ~Susan

Karen Jones

Date: 2/21/2024 6:42:00 PM

Lovely alliteration like “secret sunset spilled” paint such a beautiful scene in minds! Bravo Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/21/2024 6:59:00 PM

Dear Karen, thank you sharing your beautiful thoughts with me. I’m pleased to know you enjoyed the alliteration. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Speaks Volumes

Date: 2/20/2024 9:29:00 AM

To use these as subject matter and turn it into such a wonderful imaginative story is sheer poetic talent dear Susan. In four stanzas, I would not have thought any poet could have made me feel empathy for tulips in a vase, but you did ! As in all your poetry you displayed immense poetic prowess. A joy to read. Thank you.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/20/2024 4:53:00 PM

Dear SV, I am truly touched, humbled and honored by your lovely comments. Thank you for experiencing the emotions of my poem and for sharing your heartwarming response with me. The beauty of your empathy shines, my sweet friend! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/18/2024 10:50:00 PM

Such lovely imagery. I love your creativity.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/19/2024 8:07:00 AM

Dear Andrea, your wonderful words are a joy to receive. The feeling is mutual, my poet friend. Thank you for your gracious visit and kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Gary Radice

Date: 2/16/2024 10:36:00 PM

I can only echo what everyone has already said Susan. This is such a clever, sublime piece. Your powers of observation shine. The personification of the tulips is a joy to read. Thanks for sharing. Cheers - Gary

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/18/2024 9:21:00 AM

Dear Gary, your esteemed presence graces my poem is a wonderful way. I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed this poem. Your inspiring comments are a joy to receive. Thank you my poet friend for your kindness. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/15/2024 6:41:00 PM

so very well done, the form is difficult but you did it with such ease. Thanks for sharing your talent , loved it

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/18/2024 9:17:00 AM

Dear Rose, your kindness graces my page is a lovely way. Thank you for sharing your uplifting thoughts with me. Your gracious visit is a gift. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Christina Bowring

Date: 2/8/2024 12:14:00 AM

Dear Susan, once again I’m in awe of your talent and creativity. Your depth when you describe anything is truly astonishing. You are a true creator both of poetry and art. The way you bring these tulips to life, personify them, is amazing. The imagery is exquisite with wonderful use of alliteration. The sense of their beauty, youth and their need for freedom whilst being confined in captivity and enslaved, exhibited for the use of art is breathtaking.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/14/2024 5:48:00 PM

Dearest Christina, I am the one in awe. The heartwarming beauty of your comments reflects a golden soul that is blessed to be both sensitive and profound. The beauty of your empathy shines. I am humbled and honored to receive such lovely words from a gifted poetess whose artistic finesse and fine poetry I so admire. Please accept my apologies for my later reply. Life's been busy in all the good ways. Your graceful presence here inspires me and greatly enhances the value of my poem. Ever your admirer, warmest wishes and hugs, my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Christina Bowring
Date: 2/8/2024 12:23:00 AM

‘Still - life’ painting prop and yet there is much life in them and the indignation of being admired through captivity leaves them no desire to ‘perform’ and their once free spirits of beauty diminish and droop.Truly amazing - what an inspiration you are to me my dear poetic heroine. Thank you for sharing your immense gift that brings so much joy. Hugs and admiration to you xx

Tom Woody

Date: 2/7/2024 4:03:00 PM

Leave it to you to make something special of tulips in a vase. A classy poem Suze. I had glanced at it a while ago and thought I remembered a photo go-with with some droopy tulips. In any case, awesome poetic still-life

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/13/2024 7:01:00 PM

Dear Tom, I'm glad you enjoyed my "poetic still-life". Indeed, it did have a photo, the photo was causing my page to glitch when I would click on it, so I deleted it. Good memory, my friend! Thank you for your wonderful comments. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze

Paul Callus

Date: 2/7/2024 1:04:00 PM

Hi dear Susan! It is always a pleasure to partake of your poetic offerings and relish every word. A Monchielle could be challenging, and yet you tackle it with apparent ease. The subject matter ~ tulips in a vase ~ reminds me of an exhibit in an art gallery; the more I look at it, the more the technical details catch the eye. Well done, my friend. ~ Warm regards and hugs // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/13/2024 6:37:00 PM

Dear Paul, you not only see the imagery, heart and soul of a poem but you also appreciate its nuts and bolts too. That you appreciate the technical details of my poetry is gratifying. Thank you for your inspiring comments. I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem, my friend. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Brian Sambourne

Date: 2/6/2024 7:36:00 PM

Dear Susan, The personification of tulips in the first 2 lines drew me in. I was not disappointed. Tulips held in a bend, yet alive as a "still life painting prop" truly elevates the flower as artistic inspiration. Wonderful words, stirring posting. Best wishes always, Brian

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/13/2024 6:03:00 PM

Dear Brian, it's wonderful to see you! Your comments are truly gratifying. Thank you, my poetry friend, for your sincere comments and for sharing in the imagery/emotions of this poem with me. I hope you are well and that you beloved mom still inspires with her fighting spirit while her broken wrist heals. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Len Gasun

Date: 2/4/2024 8:25:00 PM

My dearest poet friend Susan, your poem is exquisite as always. I love everyline. Its flow, rhythm and imagery are excellent. I'm in love of this form of poem too although it's difficult for me but you did it amazingly with ease. Faving it now. One of my dream flowers to see in my life is tulip. Hugging your poem while waiting for that opportunity to see one. Thank you always for sharing. God bless you always and your writings. I'll be back to read more. Hugs

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/6/2024 7:04:00 PM

Dear Len, my wonderful poet friend, I'm truly humbled and honored by your visit and response to my poem. Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts and for the distinction of your fav. Your kind words bring a smile, my inspiring friend. I hope you see your dream flower, a beautiful tulip someday soon. I hope all is well with you and yours, dear Len. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Ink Empress

Date: 2/3/2024 8:16:00 AM

Ah dear poetic soul, your way with weaving words truly leaves me mesmerized and in awe! Loving the flow and depth of your artistic lines whilst also sticking to syllables is what leaves me captivated! Inspired! So elegant and there is a beautiful aura in your word weavings, and this is no exception. I absolutely love the way youv also used alliterations in here, they all flow so well together and i love how descriptive it is which gives the impression that you truly are an artistic soul. I love

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/4/2024 4:47:00 PM

Dear Empress, soulful poetess, it's a joy to receive your appreciative comments. Your esteemed thoughts have the power to lift my spirits beyond the cumulus, so uplifting they are. Thank you for your time spent with my poem, for feeling my words, and for leaving your precious words to grace my poem with their splendor. I'm so pleased to know you enjoyed my poem, my sweet poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Ink Empress
Date: 2/3/2024 8:17:00 AM

I especially love the lines “ romantic redheads bloom. Their teacup tepals filled; ideas nouveau riche with secrets sunset spilled,” wow! Exquisite diction! Youv nailed it! Pleasure reading your work today. Sending you light always

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/2/2024 4:36:00 PM

Dear Susan, This is a captivating portrayal of beauty and fragility. Your mastery of words delicately capture the essence of youth, promise, and the transient nature of life. The symbolism of the tulips, trapped in the vase like painted props, evokes a sense of melancholy and reflection. I loved it. - Blessings, Daniel

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/2/2024 5:37:00 PM

Dear Daniel, your esteemed comments are a joy to received. Such lovely and insightful feedback is truly appreciated especially from a poet of your high caliber. You see into the heart of my poem with tenderness and clarity. Thank you, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Yolanda Nicholsen

Date: 2/2/2024 1:31:00 PM

Simplicity what a lovely write I adored reading your work here many blessings sweetie.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/2/2024 5:25:00 PM

Dear Yolanda, your gracious visit and wonderful remarks are truly appreciated. Thank you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 2/2/2024 11:37:00 AM

My dear friend, your take on the contest is a visually striking poem that explores themes of beauty, youth, captivity, and artifice. Through its evocative imagery and nuanced portrayal of the tulips, the poem invites readers to ponder the complexities of human perception and the ways in which beauty is both celebrated and constrained in society.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/2/2024 5:23:00 PM

Dear Silent One, thank you, your response to my poem is amazing. Your natural ability to look below the surface of the poem to its deeper meaning is acknowledged and truly appreciated. You see into the heart of this poem with clarity. Warmest wishes my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 2/2/2024 2:23:00 AM

I love tulips. Alas, they do not grow well in Malta as the soil is too hot for the bulbs. A lovely poem full of imagery.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/2/2024 7:28:00 AM

Dear Victor, I'm so glad to know we share an appreciation for the beauty of tulips. I'm in awe every spring when a wild bunch blooms in front of our house. Too bad they're so short lived though. Thank you for your lovely comments. I'm glad to know you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Bill Baker

Date: 2/1/2024 9:06:00 PM

Difficult form, well-written poem, Susan. The picture matched the poem perfectly. Nice imagery and rhythm. Have a pleasant weekend, my friend. Bill

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/2/2024 7:25:00 AM

Dear Bill, my poetry friend, thank you for your kind visit and wonderful comments. I'm glad to know you enjoyed my poem. Have a great weekend too! Warmest wishes.. ~Suze

Hiya Sharma

Date: 2/1/2024 8:27:00 PM

Gosh, what a breathtaking and astounding monchielle staza poem this is ~ I'm absolutely in awe of your richly crafted, enchanting imagery, that describes the glorious essence of tulips so effortlessly! Your lines shimmer as lil jewels of brilliance and art, I'm evermore stunned by the vivid imagery that you've painted in a mellifluous way here, especially "The tulips in the vase, a clan of lassies fair", "glamor girls", "romantic redheads bloom","secrets sunset spilled" Ahh, gorgeous this is and

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/2/2024 7:21:00 AM

Dearest Hiya, your magnificent comments, so generously bestowed upon my poem, take my breath away. How fortunate am I to have a poetess of your soulful caliber share such amazing thoughts with me? I am indeed, very fortunate to have your poetic presence gracing my poem so beautifully, I am so very humbled and honored too. Thank you, my sweet friend, for your inspiring and uplifting words. This poem was written for the creative thrill of writing and not for any particular contest.. Sending warmest wishes and love your way.. ~Susan

Hiya Sharma
Date: 2/1/2024 8:28:00 PM

"teacup tepals", "Demure, in damsels’ dupe" A truly magnificent and beautiful write, dear Susan.. I can see this one as a top winner, if for the contest.. Sending many best wishes and love to you! :)

Dr. Padmashree R P

Date: 2/1/2024 7:02:00 PM

Such a beautiful poem. Appreciation of flowers, a commentary on the fleeting nature of beauty, and even a critique of superficiality. Thanks a ton Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 2/1/2024 7:26:00 PM

Dear Dr. Padmashree, thank you for your gracious visit and wonderful remarks. Your appreciation is received with delight. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan