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B - Type of Forms Poetry Contest

Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Underneath Starry Nights

  "over the waters blue the night winds sigh, the breakers roar ... Lord Byron

My love, we'll meet at eight as we agreed,
A storm was near, the lighthouse sent its flash.
Would be our lovely tryst that end of day
To mark the start of our great happy love.

By then we hoped would be a night so bright,
The blushing, crimson moon was then so high.
The blue rough seas upon the breaking rocks
And sing to us a euphonious tune.

Together we will wait for stars to rise,
Where mesmerizing fireflies dance in tune,
This may be our last real chance to love
To celebrate midsummer's fun and joy,
In love, we'll hug and kiss and be like one.

Yet you kept not our sweet love rendezvous.
In vain I waited, life began to change.
The wind grew slow in its intensity,
Clouds gathered ominously o'er the place.
The thunder rumbled; lightning was above
Flew here and there above the angry seas.
My love was nowhere in my heart, for now
The storms were raging on the rolling sea
And on the ocean of regret. All's lost!

But then, a crack in clouds appears anew
And she appears all drenched but full of joy.
The night winds blow serene with sighs of warmth.
Our hearts entwine with love and bliss romance,
We will be married soon, our love so true.


Placed 1st
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La France Avatar
June 25, 2024 at 7:06 AM
Victor, congratulations on your win in my contest, love your poem, the image and the chosen quote, Constance
Fowler Avatar
June 16, 2024 at 7:47 AM
A thrilling outcome dear Victor. A sweet story. :)
Kitchin Avatar
June 12, 2024 at 3:42 AM
Victor, wonderfully romantic, congratulations on your first place win.
Seeker Avatar
June 11, 2024 at 6:46 PM
You are a masterful raconteur, Victor. Congratulations on your top win
Goldsmith Avatar
June 11, 2024 at 11:17 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your lovely write/story. What a wonderful picture... Have a great/blessed day writing away..................
Hind Avatar
June 3, 2024 at 5:35 PM
Lovely- I am glad it ends well, the image of her drenched appearing to you is beautiful
Proxenos Avatar
May 31, 2024 at 1:35 PM
The storm is wild, but so is your love for her, the sea is raging, and she is no where to be seen, but wait a moment, she does appear, drenched from the rain, the warmth you both feel, as hearts entwine, is blissful, to be married soon feels true and fine. Love this romantic write my friend. Blessings, hugs, Jennifer
George Avatar
May 31, 2024 at 5:23 AM
I love reading romance and everything that comes with it, especially when there's a happy ending. A great piece Victor and a lovely take on the contest.
Poet Avatar
May 30, 2024 at 8:26 PM
Victor, your use of romantic language is skillfully crafted. You possess the ability to narrate a tale, akin to a melodious performance in the moonlight. I appreciate the serene conclusion.
Roper Avatar
May 30, 2024 at 7:33 AM
Love the subject take on the contest full of storm and sweet love.
Williams Avatar
May 30, 2024 at 6:57 AM
Wow, this is such a romantic write. I was enthralled from beginning to end dear Victor. Truly one of your best and a fave for me xx
Rodrigues Avatar
May 30, 2024 at 6:25 AM
We have to read to the end, to see the twist, then a resolution. Lovely romance.
Andresen Avatar
May 30, 2024 at 2:30 AM
- A romantic poem I enjoy reading, Victor :) - hugs
Eslinger Avatar
May 29, 2024 at 8:42 PM
Victor, hi! You really pulled me right into this one. Very touching! Superb! xoxo
Buehler Avatar
May 29, 2024 at 7:08 PM
Victor, your lovely tale of a romantic rendezvous on a wild night, was captivating. I especially love the final line-so touching and beautiful!
Romios Avatar
May 29, 2024 at 12:49 AM
You have a magic touch, I find in yout poetry, an artistry you must be proud of. Pangie Romis
Greenhough Avatar
May 29, 2024 at 12:06 AM
Not only true love but sacrificing ,as well. No way would I come out to meet you in that weather. Let's go to a café for a hot cocoa. I like this story poem.
May Avatar
May 28, 2024 at 4:38 PM
A silver lining in the clouds, as winds of love blow serenely
Dietrich Avatar
May 28, 2024 at 1:10 PM
Awesome job with the blank verse. See my soupmail. I want to do blank verse as well.
Kendrick Avatar
May 28, 2024 at 10:42 AM
Ahhh!! Great love story told. Thanks for sharing the romantic lines with us. Sara K
Rose  Avatar
May 28, 2024 at 10:19 AM
You have become quite a seasoned poet in your old age dear Victor, :)
Kauffman Avatar
May 28, 2024 at 9:44 AM
Wonderful use of the storm as a metaphor for your internal turmoil, Victor! The hopes dreams for a romantic evening are wonderfully expressed! Your images are as powerful as the storm and resolve as the storm ends when "the night winds blow serene sighs of warmth." Nice alliteration! Best wishes for the contest! Blessings!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 28, 2024 at 8:45 AM
Love that Coleridge quote…ahhh! Love the 3rd verse with stars and fireflies. Blessings, dear one!
One Avatar
May 28, 2024 at 8:30 AM
Great us of the form, me, personally, I cant really differentiate between any from of verse.. This is really romantic and lovely poetry..
Rodgers Avatar
May 28, 2024 at 8:27 AM
Dear Victor, A well laid out journey through love's trials and triumphs, beautifully capturing the essence of hope amidst storms. I loved the imagery of the lighthouse, crimson moon, and roaring seas, evoking a sense of longing and anticipation. Your words artistically show us of love's resilience and the joy found in its embrace. Stunning work! - Blessings, Daniel
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