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B - Type of Forms Poetry Contest

Sponsored by: Constance La France

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"over the waters blue the night winds sigh, the breakers roar ... Lord Byron My love, we'll meet at eight as we agreed, A storm was near, the lighthouse sent its flash. Would be our lovely tryst that end of day To mark the start of our great happy love. By then we hoped would be a night so bright, The blushing, crimson moon was then so high. The blue rough seas upon the breaking rocks And sing to us a euphonious tune. Together we will wait for stars to rise, Where mesmerizing fireflies dance in tune, This may be our last real chance to love To celebrate midsummer's fun and joy, In love, we'll hug and kiss and be like one. Yet you kept not our sweet love rendezvous. In vain I waited, life began to change. The wind grew slow in its intensity, Clouds gathered ominously o'er the place. The thunder rumbled; lightning was above Flew here and there above the angry seas. My love was nowhere in my heart, for now The storms were raging on the rolling sea And on the ocean of regret. All's lost! But then, a crack in clouds appears anew And she appears all drenched but full of joy. The night winds blow serene with sighs of warmth. Our hearts entwine with love and bliss romance, We will be married soon, our love so true. Placed 1st

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Date: 6/25/2024 7:06:00 AM
Victor, congratulations on your win in my contest, love your poem, the image and the chosen quote, Constance
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Date: 6/16/2024 7:47:00 AM
A thrilling outcome dear Victor. A sweet story. :)
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Date: 6/12/2024 3:42:00 AM
Victor, wonderfully romantic, congratulations on your first place win.
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Date: 6/11/2024 6:46:00 PM
You are a masterful raconteur, Victor. Congratulations on your top win
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Date: 6/11/2024 11:17:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your lovely write/story. What a wonderful picture... Have a great/blessed day writing away..................
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Date: 6/3/2024 5:35:00 PM
Lovely- I am glad it ends well, the image of her drenched appearing to you is beautiful
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Date: 5/31/2024 1:35:00 PM
The storm is wild, but so is your love for her, the sea is raging, and she is no where to be seen, but wait a moment, she does appear, drenched from the rain, the warmth you both feel, as hearts entwine, is blissful, to be married soon feels true and fine. Love this romantic write my friend. Blessings, hugs, Jennifer
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Date: 5/31/2024 5:23:00 AM
I love reading romance and everything that comes with it, especially when there's a happy ending. A great piece Victor and a lovely take on the contest.
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Date: 5/30/2024 8:26:00 PM
Victor, your use of romantic language is skillfully crafted. You possess the ability to narrate a tale, akin to a melodious performance in the moonlight. I appreciate the serene conclusion.
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Date: 5/30/2024 7:33:00 AM
Love the subject take on the contest full of storm and sweet love.
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Date: 5/30/2024 6:57:00 AM
Wow, this is such a romantic write. I was enthralled from beginning to end dear Victor. Truly one of your best and a fave for me xx
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Date: 5/30/2024 6:25:00 AM
We have to read to the end, to see the twist, then a resolution. Lovely romance.
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Date: 5/30/2024 2:30:00 AM
- A romantic poem I enjoy reading, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 5/29/2024 8:42:00 PM
Victor, hi! You really pulled me right into this one. Very touching! Superb! xoxo
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Date: 5/29/2024 7:08:00 PM
Victor, your lovely tale of a romantic rendezvous on a wild night, was captivating. I especially love the final line-so touching and beautiful!
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Date: 5/29/2024 12:49:00 AM
You have a magic touch, I find in yout poetry, an artistry you must be proud of. Pangie Romis
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Date: 5/29/2024 12:06:00 AM
Not only true love but sacrificing ,as well. No way would I come out to meet you in that weather. Let's go to a café for a hot cocoa. I like this story poem.
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Date: 5/28/2024 4:38:00 PM
A silver lining in the clouds, as winds of love blow serenely
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Date: 5/28/2024 1:10:00 PM
Awesome job with the blank verse. See my soupmail. I want to do blank verse as well.
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Date: 5/28/2024 10:42:00 AM
Ahhh!! Great love story told. Thanks for sharing the romantic lines with us. Sara K
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Date: 5/28/2024 10:19:00 AM
You have become quite a seasoned poet in your old age dear Victor, :)
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Date: 5/28/2024 9:44:00 AM
Wonderful use of the storm as a metaphor for your internal turmoil, Victor! The hopes dreams for a romantic evening are wonderfully expressed! Your images are as powerful as the storm and resolve as the storm ends when "the night winds blow serene sighs of warmth." Nice alliteration! Best wishes for the contest! Blessings!
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Date: 5/28/2024 8:45:00 AM
Love that Coleridge quote…ahhh! Love the 3rd verse with stars and fireflies. Blessings, dear one!
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Date: 5/28/2024 8:30:00 AM
Great us of the form, me, personally, I cant really differentiate between any from of verse.. This is really romantic and lovely poetry..
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Date: 5/28/2024 8:27:00 AM
Dear Victor, A well laid out journey through love's trials and triumphs, beautifully capturing the essence of hope amidst storms. I loved the imagery of the lighthouse, crimson moon, and roaring seas, evoking a sense of longing and anticipation. Your words artistically show us of love's resilience and the joy found in its embrace. Stunning work! - Blessings, Daniel
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