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Written for the contest " unconscious bias " sponsored by Edward Ibeh. 
Here I write about mental illness, specifically Borderline Personality Disorder, and how its so stigmatized, and frowned upon, how their emotions and behavior is often confused with manipulative behavior and as attention seeking! 
I pity the world that sleeps on mental health cries! 

This one goes out to all those silenced, and all those that feel ashamed to express because of society's unconscious bias!

Unconscious Bias

I forgive the stars sleeping in nothingness,
             too afraid to embrace eclipsed spheres….. 

In the midst of sweltering gloaming,  
I ascend, obscured and tarnished,  
like a tainted trinket lost  
in the tangerine haze.  
For I’ve long been burning  
from the coals of stigma~
stamping labels upon troubled torrents,  
using malignant metals,  
mirroring the fear within lichen eyes,  
consumed by ancient  
arrows of anguish~
from the era of Hercules and Midas.  
But if only they knew, there is  
no remedy for the jaded jewels that  
refuse to sparkle, 
for my purity remains unseen in  
growing darkness,  
oblivious to the liquid gold  
that flickers compassion,  
as they see not 
beyond their fractured vision.

O distorted colors of the sun,  
I’m not your perplexed perspective;  
I breathe in hues of humanity,  
infused with luminous lavender.  
I’m not a Medusa siren luring you  
to serpentine rocks;  
I swim in chromatic, evanescent streams,  
brimming with blissful bioluminescence,  
illuminating my way under the midnight sky.

I’m not the suffocating wintry winds  
freezing oxygen in your lungs.  
While it seems your tongue is silenced 
and tied to the twisted strings  
of broken instruments, 
I ink words of hope and
empathy upon your cynical skin.

I am more than the blind rage  
seeping in fury.  
I’m not a heartless harpy  
screeching into the emptiness~
drenched in despair,  
pushing boundaries to  
the ends of the earth.  
I am Atlas holding the world on  
his shoulders,  
I am the glistening stars aching  
to touch the silver ring around  
the jasmine moon.

But life is like a helix fixated  
on unconscious bias,  
constantly critical of diverse dialects,  
watching me struggle to stand  
under the weight of pressure,  
knees buckling as your assumptions  
lacerate me, breaking me down,  
burying me in your ruthless riddles.

I feel rumbling dirt beneath  
my bleeding feet.  
My sarcophagus is rising,  
built from your putrid ideals of me.  
Losing footing, I refuse to fall into  
the seething seas of sorrow.

So remember, I was never  
the soulless monster hiding  
beneath your ignorant bed.  
But I am now the skeletons  
etched within the cataclysmic  
aftermath of your 
shallow misconceptions.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Ibeh Avatar
September 27, 2024 at 6:39 AM
Absolutely sublime write, Inky. Stunning imagery and metaphors, my friend. I'm faving this. Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!
Bayles Avatar
September 7, 2024 at 7:44 AM
Powerful poem.
Hind Avatar
September 6, 2024 at 12:41 PM
Maybe you're just too deep to be read, hmmm....:) This is very beautiful...I felt like your words were really powerful....<3
George Avatar
September 5, 2024 at 9:46 PM
Wow... wow! I am speechless! What power and beauty in your poem. You give the strong message that let us not be held captive by the invisible chains of unconscious bias, but break free to see the world and each other with clarity and compassion. "I am Atlas holding the world on his shoulders, I am the glistening stars aching to touch the silver ring around the jasmine moon." Those who are 'sick', they hold such weight like Atlas, but afraid to speak out. We all have peculiarities, fears and tensions within us, but through some bias, they are suppressed. But one should emerge and use his resilience to spring back to find the power within. "Losing footing, I refuse to fall into the seething seas of sorrow." Simply wonderful. Hats off!
One Avatar
September 5, 2024 at 12:30 PM
An interesting take on unconscious bias.. At work we have to do training on this, personally, I think everyone has some form of this.. Your poem is a powerful exploration of personal identity, societal judgment, and resilience in the face of misunderstanding. It expresses a raw emotional journey, filled with metaphors of cosmic and mythological references that highlight the tension between a sufferer's true self and the distorted perceptions imposed upon them. The ending is both haunting and defiant, shifting from the vulnerability of feeling buried by others' misconceptions to a powerful claim of identity: “I am now the skeletons etched within the cataclysmic aftermath of your shallow misconceptions.”
Rodgers Avatar
September 5, 2024 at 5:06 AM
Dear Empress, Wonderful and insightful poem! Because of your unique and deep understanding, you should join my profession as a therapist who helps clients to traverse that stigma, whatever that is. I was teaching a group of therapists yesterday that we should not throw around Borderline diagnosis to everyone that does not want to meet our standard. You have truly given a voice to those who read this and battle those unconscious biases. I applaud you and stand next to you because there is too much unconscious abuse. A FAV of FAVs! - Blessings, My Dearest Friend, Daniel
Onclaud Avatar
September 4, 2024 at 1:04 PM
a powerful voice for those who are challenged by mental health issues...your pen glides on metaphorical lines , ink!
Buhagiar Avatar
September 4, 2024 at 8:45 AM
Your many metaphors shine brilliantly in this exposition of human bias. It is a worthy subject that requires careful consideration of our selfish behaviour. There is also beauty in alliteration and references to classical deities. A superb poem.
Onpaper Avatar
September 4, 2024 at 7:10 AM
tainted trinket lost in the tangerine haze. Ooo yess alliterations!!! my purity remains unseen in growing darkness, damn that line is remarkable!! O distorted colors of the sun, child mmm.. tongue is silenced and tied to the twisted strings of broken instruments, *snaps fingers* .. ooo that ending stanza tho.. So remember, I was never the soulless monster hiding beneath your ignorant bed. But I am now the skeletons etched within the cataclysmic aftermath of your shallow misconceptions. it’s hits powfully papi.
Culverhouse Avatar
September 4, 2024 at 6:47 AM
An important subject, I've written a lot about mental health/illness, it's very close to my heart having suffered and I work in the sector, but I just want to point out from a writing perspective, small point but your use of "helix" followed by fixation" is inspired, the "ix" form and sound, it's small things like that in a poem which stands it out for me, genius IE
Rhymes Avatar
September 4, 2024 at 6:04 AM
I can relate to this poem so much . We are human after all . Love it
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