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Unchain My Heart and Set Me Free

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Hi Everyone, First of all I would like to say Happy 4th of July to you all. Enjoy this day with family and friends. Futhermore this is a fictional write about a toxic relationship. I didn't title it. Read it and put in the comments what you think the title should be. I will choose the title that appeals to me the most:-)Enjoy

Unlock me set me free Allow me to be myself I’m tired of being here In this prison of hate You’re so confusing Unlock me set me free One minute you adore me And the next you imprison me I’m held captive by hurtful And deceitful words I’m a puppet in chains Clinging to your every word Unlock me set me free You’re a master manipulator Where is your shame Your heart and soul is dark Love doesn't exist in your world You are a cold hearted warden Let me go, release me This isn't love, It's just a sham I want my independence I’m tired of independence day Only being a far away dream Alexis Y. 7-4-18

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Irfanulla Shariff

Date: 7/27/2018 8:33:00 AM

A wholehearted poem….brilliantly penned, Alexis. All the best!

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/26/2018 9:37:00 AM

YOUR POETRY IS VERY GOOD MY FRIEND. A few here live and love to trash others my friend. Such people are to be ignored, pitied and walked away from, IMHO.. I fav this both for its truth and your fine poetic talent on display my friend...

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 7/20/2018 11:09:00 AM

I agree w/Gary ... a powerful ink spill of emotions, Alexis. Very raw and visceral poetry bubbling from the depths of the heart. Loved it tho'. Love and smiles always.

Gary Bateman

Date: 7/16/2018 1:36:00 PM

Hello Alexis, A very powerful and emotionally-charged verse!! Recommended titles: "Set Me Free" or "This Prison of Hate" or "Let Me Go." Hope this helps. Enjoyed the passion and power of your verse. Best Always, Gary

CayCay Jennings

Date: 7/7/2018 12:33:00 AM

After reading the below (not the blog), how about: Sick Dressed Slick Is Still Sick ... A Mister Forever Prisoner To His Own sinister / I'll escape to Soar Wiser Than Before, You'll Still Be Ignorance grounded ... A Man Who Is An Example of What Not to be ... The Man Who Taught Me When to Leave .... He Needed Killin' but I Wasn't Jail Time Willin' `````````````` Whatever is going on, you are God's perfect and loved child. I know the God of my understanding can / wants to get you through

Alexis Y.
Date: 7/7/2018 3:28:00 PM

Hi Cay Cay, Thanks so much for all your suggestions:-) Alexis

CayCay Jennings

Date: 7/7/2018 12:01:00 AM

Wow Wee Wham - I read writes from you on this topic before, probably from everyone here who has been broken such. This one is you more sure, more directly assertive and full of righteous fire than I can recall (I am more than willing to be wrong, my memory often is!) ALL were emotional, but this is a woman grown (if that makes sense, it is quite late and my brain is already asleep. i expect to giggle for no reason quite soon.) Miss you much, haven't had much Soup life lately. Hugs ... CayCay

Alexis Y.
Date: 7/7/2018 3:29:00 PM

Hi Cay Cay, I love this comment. I appreciate your support my friend;-) Alexis

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/6/2018 2:53:00 PM

Just saw the blog Alexis. How about, regaining my independence. Tom.

Alexis Y.
Date: 7/7/2018 3:37:00 PM

Hi Tom, That is a good suggestion. I appreciate your support:-) Alexis

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/6/2018 1:11:00 PM

I saw your blog briefly, Alex. I would call this "Set Me Free" or "Independence Day Dreaming"

Alexis Y.
Date: 7/7/2018 3:38:00 PM

Hi Andrea, I like both of your suggestions. I appreciate your support:-) Alexis

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 7/6/2018 11:22:00 AM

I like it Alexis, potent penning. "Under Your Lock And Key" comes to mind for me. xomo

Susan Gentry

Date: 7/6/2018 9:59:00 AM

Raw emotions. You can feel the pain. With that said, I suggest, 'I'm Out of Here!' :)

Jan Allison

Date: 7/6/2018 9:53:00 AM

How about 'unchain my heart and set me free':-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 7/6/2018 3:36:00 AM

When love has faded the heart wants to be set free...Well expressed Alexis..

Vijay Pandit

Date: 7/5/2018 8:36:00 PM

I felt the intensity of emotions in your write.. glad that it’s fiction.. but you depicted real life.. a well crafted poem, Alexis.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 7/5/2018 7:24:00 PM

I hope you had a happy 4th of July! As far as this write. Many emotions tangle around your words, and the sad truth is, many have been through this situation. As for the title- No one should ever feel or be caged. Ever!! I think the last three words of your first line, should be your title. "set me free" ~ Brandy

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 7/5/2018 3:00:00 PM

This is very good, Alexis, and very tragic ... not a situation anyone would want to be in, but so well phrased and crafted. I think I would name it "Return the Key to My Heart" or "Locked In Dependence". Blessings! :-) <3