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For Edward Ibeh contest, This or That, Vol 21.

Music and romance are camarilla comrades, just like poems are my shield and arrows. But not all lullabies of lovers, harmonise like a street choir of angels. If love resembles the weather, then poetry is like a snowflake. Its fragile abstract nature can betray the innocence of a poetic heart - serenading in slaughtered symphonies of silence. When lust burns in assailable impurity, love suffers in small doses, performing a masquerade concealing truthful tones. So what is the purpose of poetry if it offers no remedy? Whispering winds form hailstorms in my mind, wondering if there is a sanctuary for lonely spirits suffering as seasonally sad souls. In the midst of melancholic misfortune, I wish to drown in tepid tides of holy water, because fate is frozen in winter wanderlust. Heartache taught me how to be a poet, each scar inflicted from profound lies and cries. But what is the purpose of poetry if there is no muse? In the perception of imagination, I search for the one who left frozen tears on my pillowcase. But her eyes see celestite waves kissing ecru shorelines under blue pearlescent skies, blessed with the radiance of saffron sunshine, in the heavenly harmony of relaxing music. So, I wonder why she resides in ebony emotions, refusing to dance, lost in lyrical lament. Some spirits evolve into envious entities, but mine just misses the rose window to her soul. When wine dark skies glare in misery and gloom, composing ashen clouds to pour in plentiful rain, I feel the chills of an Antarctic iced leaf on an ice covered lake, but maintain an evergreen glow, hoping to forever illuminate like cathartic moonlight - reflecting upon her bronze fibers. Opposites attract like fireflies in the night. I am the bridge and you are the chorus. so I follow footprints in the snow, under the guidance of devotary sincere stars. In the hope we will make melodies at midnight - merging into rivers of unassailable purity And If I can't be a poet, then I'll become a poem. I cannot predict how my ink will spill, so will you guide each verse to give it a purpose, breathing my words into life? Will you love me more than poetry? Kissing all those diamond promises into my rhinestone heart - or will you massacre the music, abandoning me like an unfinished symphony.

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Date: 11/10/2023 4:17:00 AM
"Will you love me more than poetry?" - Beautiful work. Congratulations!
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Date: 11/9/2023 11:50:00 AM
Wow, what a spectacular piece with stunning imagery, alliteration, euphony and flow. You're a poet's poet, SO. Heartiest congratulations on your win in my contest!
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Date: 10/21/2023 5:06:00 PM
I like the questions between the sections of this poem, Silent One. They give structure to the creative flow of the poetry. After reading a few of your poems today, I'm a little overwhelmed with the brilliance you display in each and every contest entry. I sometimes feel your words are flowing through me into your pen. I resonate at a very deep level with the essence of each poem. I'll have to meditate on these feelings and try to understand them better. I appreciate your sharing. Bill
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Date: 10/21/2023 2:56:00 AM
Great flow to your poem, and the journey is worth taking.
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Date: 10/20/2023 8:49:00 AM
You have bared of your mind and of your heart to poetry that shakes and provokes! You have pondered on many an issue.. you awaken dormant souls to dig deep in what they see and feel.. the alliteration beauty stands by itself spontaneously adding to the inner musicality of your poem and needless to mention your mastery in portraying so vibrant imagery! An amazing poetry that speaks profoundly to the soul.. thank you so much, Silent One for sharing.. God bless you. Best regards.
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Date: 10/19/2023 5:09:00 PM
I love this emotional poem as so many do. Expressing the innocent love of a heart far away, kelli
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Date: 10/19/2023 4:22:00 PM
OMG Silent! I haven’t been on PSp in about 10 days, i guess, as my Jim’s been very ill, in hosp, etc & my latest poem i just posted took 3 days to pen, yet, let’s you & i prove The Inspring Collective Unconscious!!! We ventured colors’ winds you & I ! Hmmm. For different reasons but… This poem is superb & evocative, speaking for SO many of us! Love it!
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Date: 10/19/2023 2:42:00 PM
awesome poem, you set some crucial questions, but you give answers, enveryone need, i really hope you love her more than poetry, your muse has great expectations, enjoyed S.O
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Date: 10/19/2023 11:44:00 AM
Your poem is exceptional, Silent One. Every aspect of it is beautiful - the use of alliteration, the vivid imagery, and the emotions it evokes. The dialogue within the poem is strong and filled with intense emotions. Your writing is magnificent, my friend. A fave for me. Good luck
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Date: 10/19/2023 3:45:00 AM
This is a magnificent piece of heartfelt poetry, dear Silent One! I'm always swayed in impactful thoughts and compelling emotions whenever I read your poems.And this one deals with a plethora of feelings, coming as a complex stormy wave, then receding towards the horizons..your alliterations, metaphors, similes, adjectives and word choices, ah, everything's impeccable."If love resembles the weather, then poetry is like a snowflake","Heartache taught me how to be a poet" I can definitely resonate
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Date: 10/19/2023 3:48:00 AM
"search for the one who left frozen tears on my pillowcase", "celestite waves kissing ecru shorelines under blue pearlescent skies", "mine just misses the rose window to her soul", "feel the chills of an Antarctic iced leaf on an ice covered lake" Too many brilliant lines to quote in this one!! "Opposites attract like fireflies in the night" Ah, every line and every stanza is a pure addition to this beautifully masterpiece write.. Really! Saved in my FAVs!
Date: 10/18/2023 9:07:00 PM
Great depth of meaning. Fabulous imagery! Your muse hears and responds -- sometimes keeping you in the dark...that midnight dance leading to squint-eyed dawn -- truth a silvery opaque sliver at the horizon. "Kissing all those diamond promises into my rhinestone heart - or will you massacre the music, abandoning me like an unfinished symphony." Great read. Thank you.
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Date: 10/18/2023 4:56:00 PM
Forever in awe of your gifted pen, but this is truly your masterpiece. A fave for me. Hugs
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Date: 10/18/2023 12:12:00 PM
Awesome imagery, Silent One. It's what you excel with!
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Date: 10/18/2023 9:33:00 AM
Your words are so moving. Great imagery and very moving feelings. Many blessings my friend
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Date: 10/18/2023 8:31:00 AM
outstanding, Silent One. Everything about your poem is exquisite--your alliteration, your images, and the emotions they evoke...'opposites attract like fireflies' was perfect as was 'frozen tears on my pillowcase'...I can identify with that as can many others. Your work is always powerful, so thought-provoking. I admire your talent. Have a wonderful Wednesday, Sara
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Date: 10/18/2023 6:46:00 AM
Heartache taught me how to be a poet, each scar inflicted from profound lies and cries--Whispering winds form hailstorms in my mind, wondering if there is a sanctuary---a powerful dialogue throughout in this highly emotive write, SO. Splendid write my friend.
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Date: 10/18/2023 6:25:00 AM
Lost love can only bring ebony emotions. Your diction is first-class. Your alliteration is splendid. I was touched by the line: serenading in slaughtered symphonies of silence. You will always be number one in list of Poetry soup. Blessings
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Date: 10/18/2023 2:21:00 AM
Will you love me more than poetry! Whoa i am left speechless reading this heartfelt and very touching poem that flows with so much depth! A love that is so pure , ah! Diamond promises rhinestone heart, how descriptive and creative! I love that line “ opposites attract like fireflies in the night” i agree, and what a clever way to state that. I think you are poetry! Who would write alliterations like you do? And paint imagery as well as weave evocative lines. I can resonate with the line about
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Date: 10/18/2023 2:26:00 AM
Heartache making one a poet, i think so many can resonate too with that. I cant help but feel the line where you mentioned frozen tears too! Music and romance play a very special role together. Your use of similes, metaphors imagery and alliterations all add to the profoundness of your take and this touches all aspects of poetry, and what would a poet be without a muse? Will we be poets if we never faced trauma, and also sometimes i would rather be the ones poem than a poet. If its a choice, be immortal in pages of their soul and artistic heart. That last line leaves a very soulful impression! This is another one of my fave poems by you! For real! Impeccable! Masterpiece!

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