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Two Mountains

The clamber beats me up. Now I have to heel slide down a scree covered ravine while trying to ignore the sweat of panic. Half-way down there’s a large smooth boulder, I hug it slow my breathing, stop battling the mountainside. Rock Ravens circle a compass of warm air, ascend and drop with hardly a wingbeat. It’s then I recall that there are two mountains here, one under my feet the other I brought with me as a tower of doubt.

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Date: 3/11/2020 9:39:00 PM
Eric, your artistic intensity captivated me and rewarded me with the satisfying thrill of a profound self-revelation in the end. Such a potent and exceptional piece! Warmest wishes, mi amigo! ~Susan
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Eric Ashford
Date: 3/11/2020 9:53:00 PM
Thank you compadre, it's good to hear from you on this journey we take together. It's so rewarding to get such a positive confirmation from a thoughtful critic such as you.
Date: 3/10/2020 7:45:00 PM
Thoughtful. It is a sad, mystic evening out there. Same sadness can bring those words, knowingly or unknowingly. Dear Eric, thanks for your poem. Tamanna
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Eric Ashford
Date: 3/10/2020 8:18:00 PM
Thank you very much Tamanna for this insightful review. Obliged to you.
Date: 3/10/2020 6:21:00 PM
Hello Eric, i just read your poem. This person in your poem was brave. i would never climb a mountain. have a nice evening my friend.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 3/11/2020 8:29:00 AM
Hello Eric Ashford, Ohio has no mountains! I did not know that. i learned something today. Thank you. Have a nice day my friend.
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Eric Ashford
Date: 3/10/2020 6:39:00 PM
Thanks for the comments Darlene, living in mainly flat Ohio it's easy for me to avoid mountains now. Cheers.
Date: 3/10/2020 5:43:00 PM
Excellent set up, and then the two mountain reveal..nicely written, Eric. Enjoyed! :)
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Eric Ashford
Date: 3/10/2020 6:13:00 PM
Hi Laura, very pleased that this worked for you. Thanks!

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