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If you were to confide in me one black, obscure night With your unusually soft eyes on the brink of tears, Your heart and soul compacted in the fretful thoughts of woe, I would gladly listen, with a perceptive, distinctive, and tranquil glow If you would but spill upon me the swelling pangs of your core, To forget how to utter the right words to express your hurt, To launch all fears in floods of sorrow, icing spectral fractals fly I would hold you in my arms and free you—I would try I would try I would try, To banish all ghouls that threaten your might, To fight away the fools that envy your light To penetrate the inner snake that in darkness does bite In earnest blow I will let him know he is toothless in our sight I must be strong—for you, my precious commitment To let you down would tear my purpose away For if it was I trapped in your enigmatic place, You would soon hold me with determination and grace You have freed me in your efforts, of a pain I cannot word, You have tied your soul upon me with the strings of need and must And in your strength I have cast out wicked shadows that do sprout Of your love, never once will I ever again doubt Because you always try, And when we try together, we rectify

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Date: 12/19/2015 6:17:00 AM
It's funny, but most people react to another's hurt and pain with advice rather than compassion. Your associates are fortunate since this is a rare gift. Thinking about it more, it's ironic that this is the perfect way to explain and advise just how important compassion and empathy are. I do love what you do. BTW, your latest portrait reminds me of Jennifer Lawrence. I hope that is not a bad thing to say.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/21/2015 3:45:00 PM
Someone said I looked like Katniss one time, I kid you not.--that was probably because my hair was braided though. Thanks, it's a compliment- I love Jennifer Lawrence. She's super awesome. Thank you for your support and reviews on my work. It is always greatly appreciated. I will send you an email soon! ~Laura
Date: 12/14/2015 11:06:00 AM
Wow! This is a magnificent , breath taking poem...it is a master piece ..very touchy and emotional but in elegant way ..I salute you my dear for ur sweet sweet writing , it captured me...hugs :D dalia
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/21/2015 3:43:00 PM
Thanks Dalia! Very sweet of you to say, and I appreciate your visiting! -sorry for the late reply! ~Laura
Date: 12/11/2015 7:16:00 PM
Dear Laura The heart is a passionate work of pleasure and pain, it takes and gives as it chooses but oh what would life be like without it, they'd be no poetry left for ones like you or I, right, great poem, wonderful piece to share with us, you have a very inspirational soul here and a marvelous talent we are lucky to have you here with us on the soup, you have a great weekend and also glad you enjoyed my work as well cheri
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/12/2015 2:18:00 AM
Many hugs for this sweet comment...I cherish your visits!! I am blessed to share poetry with a bright poetess who writes such awesome work. ~Laura
Date: 12/9/2015 12:45:00 AM
The try of two hearts tied to one love, cry honest and strong in healing fire revived...a pure melody is in your loving pulse, and I love the way your soul finished this poem Laura, "And when we try together we rectify..." that's great love! J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 12/9/2015 12:38:00 PM
Great love indeed. Thanks Justin. (: ~Laura

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