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One bright sunny day, We went to the carnival; My sweet love and me, We went on the Ferris Wheel; And I was trembling inside. It looked real high, Not a single but double; Hold onto me please, I had thrills mingled with fear; Only a bar held us in. My love held me close, Then we began to rise up; Oh my trembling heart, Up we went into the sky; My love whispered he loved me. When we reached the top, It came to a sudden stop; Talk about a thrill, With a bar for protection; The whole city below us. Then a gusty wind, My love kissed me with passion; The Ferris Wheel swayed, He reached into his pocket; Presenting me with a ring. Oh I was trembling, I said, yes, yes, yes, I will; We kissed long and deep, It was totally thrilling; To be stuck up in the sky. __________________________ November 4, 2015 Tanka For the contest, Trembles and Thrills, sponsor, Olive Eloisa Guillermo Second Place

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Date: 12/20/2015 12:46:00 AM
Broken, awesome win. Linda
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Date: 12/20/2015 8:19:00 AM
Linda thanks for the awsome
Date: 12/19/2015 2:08:00 PM
Broken, congratulations on your nice win. SKAT
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Date: 12/19/2015 5:19:00 PM
Thanks Skat
Date: 12/19/2015 11:54:00 AM
Broken Wings..what a wonderful poem expressing the truth of trembles and thrills..Congrats! -*smiles*
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Date: 12/20/2015 8:21:00 AM
Laura thanks for the congrats and the smiles
Date: 12/19/2015 9:49:00 AM
You did a great job with this - engaging words, a setting that does 'tremble' me personally (carnival rides.), all combined into one awesome read. Congratulations ... CayCay
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Date: 12/19/2015 5:20:00 PM
CayCay thanks so much for the comment and the congratulations
Date: 12/19/2015 5:48:00 AM
Nice win on this one Constance enjoyed the theme and the thrill!!
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Constance La France
Date: 12/19/2015 9:00:00 AM
Michael, thanks for your forever support ~
Date: 12/19/2015 2:44:00 AM
A wheely good write, BW, jolly well done. Viv x
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Date: 12/19/2015 9:01:00 AM
Viv, thanks so much for the jolly well done!!!
Date: 12/19/2015 2:26:00 AM
Constance, ****A smooth flow of narration that allows me as a reader to savor the theme, I can feel and be in the scene.. Sweet and heartwarming, I remember the movie the Notebook but this one is much better.. =`) BIG CONGRATULATIONS! I thank you for participating!~ Hugs and smiles, Olive Eloisa
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Date: 12/19/2015 9:01:00 AM
Olive, thanks so much for my wonderful placement in your contest, I am honored ~
Date: 11/4/2015 10:25:00 PM
That Ferris wheel scared me especially being stuck on top. I'll do a roller coaster anyday...lovely and romantic
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Date: 11/4/2015 11:36:00 PM
Tim, I actually do not like any rides, prefer these feet on the ground, thanks for the visit
Date: 11/4/2015 8:03:00 PM
Hi BW. Love your poem. Did I just learn something new about you or is this fiction?
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Date: 11/4/2015 11:37:00 PM
James, total fiction, thanks for the visit
Date: 11/4/2015 5:35:00 PM
Impressive write, thoughtful read, great work and good luck, cheers Kev
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Constance La France
Date: 11/4/2015 7:33:00 PM
Thank you so much Kevin for the visit and the nice comment
Date: 11/4/2015 4:44:00 PM
I saw your 'check back later' message..it was worth the wait, BW nicely done
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Date: 11/4/2015 7:34:00 PM
Hi Lin, yes I had to check all those syllables, lol, thanks for the nice comment
Date: 11/4/2015 3:41:00 PM
very thrilling ride :- )good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Constance La France
Date: 11/4/2015 7:34:00 PM
Thank you Jan

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