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Trembles and Thrills

One bright sunny day, We went to the carnival; My sweet love and me, We went on the Ferris Wheel; And I was trembling inside. It looked real high, Not a single but double; Hold onto me please, I had thrills mingled with fear; Only a bar held us in. My love held me close, Then we began to rise up; Oh my trembling heart, Up we went into the sky; My love whispered he loved me. When we reached the top, It came to a sudden stop; Talk about a thrill, With a bar for protection; The whole city below us. Then a gusty wind, My love kissed me with passion; The Ferris Wheel swayed, He reached into his pocket; Presenting me with a ring. Oh I was trembling, I said, yes, yes, yes, I will; We kissed long and deep, It was totally thrilling; To be stuck up in the sky. __________________________ November 4, 2015 Tanka For the contest, Trembles and Thrills, sponsor, Olive Eloisa Guillermo Second Place
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December 20, 2015 at 12:46 AM
Broken, awesome win. Linda
La France Avatar
December 20, 2015 at 8:19 AM
Linda thanks for the awsome
A  Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 2:08 PM
Broken, congratulations on your nice win. SKAT
La France Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 5:19 PM
Thanks Skat
Scars Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 11:54 AM
Broken Wings..what a wonderful poem expressing the truth of trembles and thrills..Congrats! -*smiles*
La France Avatar
December 20, 2015 at 8:21 AM
Laura thanks for the congrats and the smiles
Godwin Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 9:49 AM
You did a great job with this - engaging words, a setting that does 'tremble' me personally (carnival rides.), all combined into one awesome read. Congratulations ... CayCay
La France Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 5:20 PM
CayCay thanks so much for the comment and the congratulations
Tor Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 5:48 AM
Nice win on this one Constance enjoyed the theme and the thrill!!
La France Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 9:00 AM
Michael, thanks for your forever support ~
Wigley Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 2:44 AM
A wheely good write, BW, jolly well done. Viv x
La France Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 9:01 AM
Viv, thanks so much for the jolly well done!!!
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 2:26 AM
Constance, ****A smooth flow of narration that allows me as a reader to savor the theme, I can feel and be in the scene.. Sweet and heartwarming, I remember the movie the Notebook but this one is much better.. =`) BIG CONGRATULATIONS! I thank you for participating!~ Hugs and smiles, Olive Eloisa
La France Avatar
December 19, 2015 at 9:01 AM
Olive, thanks so much for my wonderful placement in your contest, I am honored ~
Smith Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 10:25 PM
That Ferris wheel scared me especially being stuck on top. I'll do a roller coaster anyday...lovely and romantic
La France Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 11:36 PM
Tim, I actually do not like any rides, prefer these feet on the ground, thanks for the visit
Inman Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 8:03 PM
Hi BW. Love your poem. Did I just learn something new about you or is this fiction?
La France Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 11:37 PM
James, total fiction, thanks for the visit
Fairbrother Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 5:35 PM
Impressive write, thoughtful read, great work and good luck, cheers Kev
La France Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 7:33 PM
Thank you so much Kevin for the visit and the nice comment
Lane Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 4:44 PM
I saw your 'check back later' message..it was worth the wait, BW nicely done
La France Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 7:34 PM
Hi Lin, yes I had to check all those syllables, lol, thanks for the nice comment
Allison Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 3:41 PM
very thrilling ride :- )good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
La France Avatar
November 4, 2015 at 7:34 PM
Thank you Jan
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