Trembles and Thrills- For Contest

To ourselves alone both had the place
and we dropped to our knees face to face
so close our breath mingled
our nerves and skin tingled
no credit card would fit through the space

her eyes wide in anticipation
her chest heaved with such expectation
a look pleading, needy
my face just plain greedy
hand thrust down with no hesitation

layers torn off I fell back and stared
for this I had been quite unprepared
with reckless abandon
she just left my hand on
as the moment passed by that we shared

oh so gently her weight did she shift
leaning backwards to let my hand lift
as I fizzed from the thrill 
of the new hammer drill
she bought me Christmas day as a gift.

November 5th, 2015

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 12/20/2015 12:47:00 AM
Viv, awesome win. Linda
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Viv Wigley
Date: 12/20/2015 1:12:00 AM
Thanks, Linda. You must be getting warm in that hat by now :) Viv x
Date: 12/19/2015 2:09:00 PM
Viv, congratulations on your nice win. SKAT
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Viv Wigley
Date: 12/20/2015 1:11:00 AM
Thanks Skat, enjoyed it. Viv x
Date: 12/19/2015 5:52:00 AM
Viv so clever and funny. Loved this one my friend. Congratulations!!
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Date: 12/20/2015 1:11:00 AM
Thanks, Michael, wish my love life was like that Christmas- once a year would be nice.... :) Regards, Viv
Date: 12/19/2015 2:29:00 AM
Viv, *** Fluid flow narration that kept me hanging and anticipating the next scene and just the last line, hahahaha!!!! The twist is cute!! Big Congratulations! I thank you for participating!~hugs and smiles, Olive Eloisa =`)
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Date: 12/20/2015 1:10:00 AM
Thanks, Olive, a fun contest to get stuck into. Viv x
Date: 11/14/2015 8:08:00 AM
Oh man, I wish my wife would give me things like this!!! It's such a useful tool. You are just too funny!
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Date: 11/14/2015 8:34:00 AM
Leave hints, Duke- that's what I do. Like an unassembled shelf. Regards, Viv
Date: 11/13/2015 9:55:00 AM
Love the twist at the end...you definitely had a day to remember ??....awesome limerick. Hugs
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/13/2015 11:23:00 AM
Thanks Cecilia, I probably made a Christmas morning sound a little more steamy than it really was, but all in good fun. Will drop by your work shortly. Thanks for dropping by. Viv x
Date: 11/13/2015 6:37:00 AM
Ahhh!!! Leading into the big ending..I hope that you get the tools that you want for Christmas..Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Sara
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Date: 11/12/2015 12:16:00 AM
Good on you Viv. You never cease to amaze me with your wit - well done - Lindsay
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/12/2015 10:13:00 AM
Likewise, Lindsay. Hope all is well and warm in upside down land. Regards, Viv
Date: 11/7/2015 5:58:00 PM
Very clever twist Viv, but the question remains, was she as satisfied as you were?
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/7/2015 11:57:00 PM
She looked at the drill and was concerned about the length of the bit. So, no change there, then. Thanks for dropping by, James. Regards, Viv
Date: 11/5/2015 3:26:00 PM
hahaha. you naughty naughty boy trying to trick us. I just knew you were up to something but had to finish to be sure. hahaha!!! Great idea for the contest.
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Date: 11/5/2015 4:53:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea, I promise to behave in future..... x
Date: 11/5/2015 3:04:00 PM
You took me to the gutter and then just left me! Very entertaining and clever - really enjoyed it ... CayCay
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/5/2015 4:54:00 PM
All good fun in the game of love and war, trembles and thrlls, Cay Cay x
Date: 11/5/2015 4:16:00 AM
Viv, you had me going there...nice scene. I was never sure which a man wanted most... a woman or a new tool. lol Well done.
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/5/2015 4:44:00 AM
oh... too funny...or maybe not
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/5/2015 4:41:00 AM
To be honest, Lin, as a teenager I would furtively glance at the shower pages in our mail order catalogue- now, I get turned on by the one from 'Machine Mart'. Viv x
Date: 11/5/2015 2:19:00 AM
- Bravo !!!! - Love it, Viv :) - I wish you a lovely day - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/5/2015 4:42:00 AM
Thanks Anne Lise wishing you one as pretty as yourself. Viv x
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