Jenna Logan Poet Pantoum

Trees Left Bare In Autumn

Autumn winds keep taunting gold and russet leaves
as they cling for life to swaying branches of trees.
Each year I find it woeful, and my heart sadly grieves
when Nature strips them with a whirlwind breeze.

As they cling for life to swaying branches of trees,
my seasonal thoughts become wistful and pensive.
When Nature strips them with a whirlwind breeze,
I wonder if a maple forest finds it terribly offensive.

My seasonal thoughts become wistful and pensive,
watching withered ones swept away by Fall's breath.
I wonder if a maple forest finds it terribly offensive...
trees left bare as their offspring descend in death.

Watching withered ones swept away by Fall's breath,
I'm filled with dread as they lie lifeless on the ground.
Trees left bare as their offspring descend in death
without complaint they tumble, not making a sound.

I'm filled with dread as they lie lifeless on the ground.
Each year I find it woeful, and my heart sadly grieves. 
Without complaint they tumble, not making a sound.
Autumn winds keep taunting gold and russet leaves.  


September 5, 2022
“Autumn Pantoum” Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Caren Krutsinger

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Kim Rodrigues November 8, 2022 at 1:56 PM … I wonder if a maple forest finds it terribly offensive…your wistful and pensive thoughts I ponder…love it, Jenna! Congratulations!

Sam Kauffman November 8, 2022 at 10:23 AM Congrats and high fives Jenna for your win with this multi-layered pantoum. Not only do you celebrate the glory of autumn in exceptionally vivid images but reach into the depths of autumn's pensive personality and the ways that melancholy reaches out to touch us when we brood as we grieve summer and see the coming of winter! Wonderfully done. Blessings!

Linda Alice Fowler November 8, 2022 at 6:44 AM Back with big congratulations your win Jenna! Jenna Logan November 8, 2022 at 8:44 AM I appreciate your kind comment, Linda.

Christuraj Alex November 8, 2022 at 5:08 AM Beautifully done. Great work on autumn in pantoum form. Congratulations! Jenna Logan November 8, 2022 at 8:43 AM Thanks so very much, Chris.

Terry Miller November 8, 2022 at 2:53 AM Great Pantoum, a difficult form with all those repeating lines, congratulations Jenna Logan November 8, 2022 at 8:43 AM It does take some editing. Thank you very much, Terry.

Linda Alice Fowler September 8, 2022 at 12:56 PM Great pantoum Jenna. Your imagery with falling colors is beautiful. Linda Jenna Logan September 8, 2022 at 7:39 PM Thank you so very much.

Gordon Mcconnell September 6, 2022 at 10:37 AM Lovely penning Jenna, great rhyme and flow too. Such a nice rhyme with good flow too. Blessings,Gordon Jenna Logan September 7, 2022 at 2:44 PM Thank you very much, Gordon.

Michael Tor September 6, 2022 at 6:03 AM Your Poetry was full of imagery to enjoy, you convey feelings for fallen leaves that take the reader to feel for the leaves. Best wishes for the contest Jenna. A wonderful entry for the contest... Jenna Logan September 6, 2022 at 9:50 AM I'm delighted that you enjoyed my personification of fallen leaves. Thank you very much, Michael.

David Kavanagh September 5, 2022 at 1:19 PM Now you’re making me feel guilty Jenna for cursing the damn things, sorry I mean the gold russet leaves in my driveway each morning, your poem is beautiful with terrific form throughout, I promise to be gentle with them tomorrow, top poem for the contest, cheers David Jenna Logan September 5, 2022 at 1:37 PM Speak to them when you step on them, David. A gentle voice will let them you know you sympathize... LOL just kidding. I'm sure they are a pain for you. Thanks for liking my poem and making your great comments.

Tom Cunningham September 5, 2022 at 11:13 AM Not my favourite form Jenna, but you've made it look easy. Still a few leaves left on the trees here but there is an autumn feel now. Hope you had a lovely weekend away. Tom Jenna Logan September 5, 2022 at 1:36 PM Nor mine, Tom, but the contest required a Pantoum. I don't actually see the changing colors on lots of trees where I live, but I do feel sad about their falling. I didn't get to go away, but it was a quiet weekend for the most part.

Mark Koplin September 5, 2022 at 9:39 AM Well done! Reminds me of a story we used in hospice called Freddy the leaf. Jenna Logan September 5, 2022 at 10:30 AM You'll have to share that one with me sometime. Thanks, Mark.

Beryl Edmonds September 5, 2022 at 9:27 AM Simply beautiful Jenna, a masterpiece I’d say. Love every line and “Trees left bare as their offspring descend in death” is fantastic… Belle Jenna Logan September 5, 2022 at 10:30 AM I'm truly heartened by your sweet remarks. Thanks, Belle.

L Milton Hankins September 5, 2022 at 8:15 AM Absolutely beautiful writing, Jenna. I see this as a winning poem. Pantoums can be a bit complicated, particularly if you are trying to do one that rhymes (which by the way is not required), but you have succeeded in writing a perfect one. Thanks for sharing! P.O.T.D. worthy. A FAVE for me. Jenna Logan September 5, 2022 at 10:28 AM You know I'm a rhymer at heart, so I took it there. lol Thank you for such glowing comments, as well as a fave, Milt. My turn for the usual monthly potd passed me by a couple of weeks ago, and that's fine with me. As long as I get comments like yours... I'm happy.

Frederic Parker September 5, 2022 at 7:55 AM I've never considered leaves as offspring, and yet they are, an interesting way to perceive the Fall, dear poet Jenna Logan September 5, 2022 at 10:26 AM Hi Frederic. I think the romantic side of me never wants to see things end or perish. Thank you for your kind thoughts.

Jeff Kyser September 5, 2022 at 7:51 AM Nice pantoum, Jenna. I find I enjoy autumn, even the leaves. We left most of the trees below our house because they are so lovely, but winter means a different/expanded view of the valley below, so I enjoy that too! Jenna Logan September 5, 2022 at 10:25 AM Thanks a bunch, Jeff. I don't see a lot of leaves turning colors down South, and they're beautiful, but makes me sad that they live for such a short time.