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Trees Left Bare In Autumn

Autumn winds keep taunting gold and russet leaves as they cling for life to swaying branches of trees. Each year I find it woeful, and my heart sadly grieves when Nature strips them with a whirlwind breeze. As they cling for life to swaying branches of trees, my seasonal thoughts become wistful and pensive. When Nature strips them with a whirlwind breeze, I wonder if a maple forest finds it terribly offensive. My seasonal thoughts become wistful and pensive, watching withered ones swept away by Fall's breath. I wonder if a maple forest finds it terribly offensive... trees left bare as their offspring descend in death. Watching withered ones swept away by Fall's breath, I'm filled with dread as they lie lifeless on the ground. Trees left bare as their offspring descend in death without complaint they tumble, not making a sound. I'm filled with dread as they lie lifeless on the ground. Each year I find it woeful, and my heart sadly grieves. Without complaint they tumble, not making a sound. Autumn winds keep taunting gold and russet leaves. September 5, 2022 “Autumn Pantoum” Poetry Contest Sponsored by Caren Krutsinger

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/8/2022 1:56:00 PM

… I wonder if a maple forest finds it terribly offensive…your wistful and pensive thoughts I ponder…love it, Jenna! Congratulations!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 11/8/2022 10:23:00 AM

Congrats and high fives Jenna for your win with this multi-layered pantoum. Not only do you celebrate the glory of autumn in exceptionally vivid images but reach into the depths of autumn's pensive personality and the ways that melancholy reaches out to touch us when we brood as we grieve summer and see the coming of winter! Wonderfully done. Blessings!

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 11/8/2022 6:44:00 AM

Back with big congratulations your win Jenna!

Jenna Logan
Date: 11/8/2022 8:44:00 AM

I appreciate your kind comment, Linda.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 11/8/2022 5:08:00 AM

Beautifully done. Great work on autumn in pantoum form. Congratulations!

Jenna Logan
Date: 11/8/2022 8:43:00 AM

Thanks so very much, Chris.

Terry Miller

Date: 11/8/2022 2:53:00 AM

Great Pantoum, a difficult form with all those repeating lines, congratulations

Jenna Logan
Date: 11/8/2022 8:43:00 AM

It does take some editing. Thank you very much, Terry.

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 9/8/2022 12:56:00 PM

Great pantoum Jenna. Your imagery with falling colors is beautiful. Linda

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/8/2022 7:39:00 PM

Thank you so very much.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 9/6/2022 10:37:00 AM

Lovely penning Jenna, great rhyme and flow too. Such a nice rhyme with good flow too. Blessings,Gordon

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/7/2022 2:44:00 PM

Thank you very much, Gordon.

Michael Tor

Date: 9/6/2022 6:03:00 AM

Your Poetry was full of imagery to enjoy, you convey feelings for fallen leaves that take the reader to feel for the leaves. Best wishes for the contest Jenna. A wonderful entry for the contest...

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/6/2022 9:50:00 AM

I'm delighted that you enjoyed my personification of fallen leaves. Thank you very much, Michael.

David Kavanagh

Date: 9/5/2022 1:19:00 PM

Now you’re making me feel guilty Jenna for cursing the damn things, sorry I mean the gold russet leaves in my driveway each morning, your poem is beautiful with terrific form throughout, I promise to be gentle with them tomorrow, top poem for the contest, cheers David

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/5/2022 1:37:00 PM

Speak to them when you step on them, David. A gentle voice will let them you know you sympathize... LOL just kidding. I'm sure they are a pain for you. Thanks for liking my poem and making your great comments.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/5/2022 11:13:00 AM

Not my favourite form Jenna, but you've made it look easy. Still a few leaves left on the trees here but there is an autumn feel now. Hope you had a lovely weekend away. Tom

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/5/2022 1:36:00 PM

Nor mine, Tom, but the contest required a Pantoum. I don't actually see the changing colors on lots of trees where I live, but I do feel sad about their falling. I didn't get to go away, but it was a quiet weekend for the most part.

Mark Koplin

Date: 9/5/2022 9:39:00 AM

Well done! Reminds me of a story we used in hospice called Freddy the leaf.

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/5/2022 10:30:00 AM

You'll have to share that one with me sometime. Thanks, Mark.

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 9/5/2022 9:27:00 AM

Simply beautiful Jenna, a masterpiece I’d say. Love every line and “Trees left bare as their offspring descend in death” is fantastic… Belle

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/5/2022 10:30:00 AM

I'm truly heartened by your sweet remarks. Thanks, Belle.

L Milton Hankins

Date: 9/5/2022 8:15:00 AM

Absolutely beautiful writing, Jenna. I see this as a winning poem. Pantoums can be a bit complicated, particularly if you are trying to do one that rhymes (which by the way is not required), but you have succeeded in writing a perfect one. Thanks for sharing! P.O.T.D. worthy. A FAVE for me.

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/5/2022 10:28:00 AM

You know I'm a rhymer at heart, so I took it there. lol Thank you for such glowing comments, as well as a fave, Milt. My turn for the usual monthly potd passed me by a couple of weeks ago, and that's fine with me. As long as I get comments like yours... I'm happy.

Frederic Parker

Date: 9/5/2022 7:55:00 AM

I've never considered leaves as offspring, and yet they are, an interesting way to perceive the Fall, dear poet

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/5/2022 10:26:00 AM

Hi Frederic. I think the romantic side of me never wants to see things end or perish. Thank you for your kind thoughts.

Jeff Kyser

Date: 9/5/2022 7:51:00 AM

Nice pantoum, Jenna. I find I enjoy autumn, even the leaves. We left most of the trees below our house because they are so lovely, but winter means a different/expanded view of the valley below, so I enjoy that too!

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/5/2022 10:25:00 AM

Thanks a bunch, Jeff. I don't see a lot of leaves turning colors down South, and they're beautiful, but makes me sad that they live for such a short time.