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Transient

Along with cadent rhythms of the day,
night crawlers hum like bees around a hive.
Black shadows stretching longer, curve and blend,
to splinter into shards below the bend

Earth swivels axis arms to catch the sun, 
and reaches through the depths of sheer chiffon
In languid dusk, a moment we can trust,
to know it will return another day

The sky creates a rim embossed with gold
colliding where cloth staples red to gray
beyond the shade that drapes across the hills
with purple stardust heavens will unfold

But now is time to let light drift away
Our world with weary voice must say so long,
With great anticipation, heads will rest,
tonight when all the tasks are said and done


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Entered in Contest: 
'PREMIERE CONTEST NO 145,ANY FORM OR NONE,ANY THEME,UPTO A MAX OF 20 lines'  Sponsor Brian Strand
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Haight Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 1:38 PM
Such gorgeous imagery in this poem, Carrie, and perfect Iambic Pentameter. Congratulations on your well-deserved placement on this short list of winners. Hugs, Sandra
Rodrigues Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 7:55 AM
Images galore! Congrats, Carrie!
Gauthier Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 6:35 AM
Congrats on your win, Carrie.
George   Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 5:54 AM
Absolutely beautiful, Carrie. Many congrats on your win. Lainie
Gentry Avatar
May 3, 2018 at 5:20 AM
Congratulations on your placement. Well done.
Allison Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 5:49 PM
many congrats on your win Carrie I am enjoying reading the winners:-) hugs Jan xx
Yvonne Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 12:54 PM
I'm still a big fan. When I read your poems I read it to myself a couple of times then out loud a couple more times. Then I phone a few friends or family and read it to them. Congratulations on your win Carrie!
Richards Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 1:09 PM
You are so wonderfully kind with your comments, Maurice. I have such great admiration to your poems as well !! Thank you very much!
Chakrabarty Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 11:25 AM
Congratulations on win Carrie:::HUGGS.rajat
Mehta Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 5:36 AM
Well deserved win, congrats on the win, Carrie
A. Sharma Avatar
January 19, 2015 at 11:10 PM
Wonderful imagery of a real poet Carrie! Congrats on big win!
Haight Avatar
January 19, 2015 at 10:10 PM
So beautiful, Carrie. Your flowing words bring forth such dreamy visions. Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra
Meier-Hans Avatar
January 19, 2015 at 2:34 PM
I loved it even more reading it once again. This time I'm going to fav it. Congratulations on your win Carrie.
Zerbst Avatar
October 23, 2014 at 7:44 PM
Such a delight! Flowing with the ease of rippling water; shining in resplendent glory; bringing sweet visions of grandeur to my sight. You ought to be proud of this one.
Nance Avatar
September 3, 2014 at 6:17 PM
Well done! Grats on your win Carrie :) u r fantastic ;)
A. Sharma Avatar
September 2, 2014 at 8:11 AM
Superb write Carrie! Congrats on ur super win!
Mehta Avatar
September 1, 2014 at 5:01 AM
Enjoyed the images you have created in this write, Carrie. Congrats
Meier-Hans Avatar
August 31, 2014 at 6:47 PM
Congratulations on your win. I really enjoyed ready this beautifully penned poem.
Devonshire Avatar
August 22, 2014 at 1:30 PM
Dear Carrie, your poems not only create vivid images, but fill readers with emotions too. I can feel the anticipation build to the coming of another day. What an original description: "colliding where cloth staples red to gray." Your meter is perfect as always and if this doesn't win, I'll eat my hat. (Lord, please let this win! Don't think my stomach could handle the hat.) Love, Carolyn
A. Sharma Avatar
August 20, 2014 at 9:02 AM
Deep thoughtful write Carrie! Wonderful imagery n great work! Best wishes!
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