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One summer in a garden at midnight,
I chanced upon an angel standing where
the moon made a mosaic with its light.
He must have come from heaven; oh how fair
his alabaster skin and eyes of blue!
The guardian of my heart he might be.
How wrong I was! For that which would ensue
was nothing like what he had promised me.

At first his eyes were azure skies until
the dark clouds came; my angel man transformed.
The windows to his soul gave me a chill.
His mind was twisted like a maze. There stormed
inside his body a chimera soul,
for wickedness had swallowed him up whole.

Written February 14, 2016
for the Chimera World Contest of  Nayda Ivette Negron

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 2/24/2017 9:21:00 AM
The definition of chimera is interesting, in that it, I think is easy to jump on the ensued opinion that lied before and comdemn an innocent lost soul. May love fill the heart of each beautiful creature. And especially the ugly ones. :/ Great word for a contest Nayda.
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Date: 2/20/2017 6:51:00 PM
Terrific writing Andrea! Great visuals through your very descriptive words and the title is so well suited. Excellent writing, a most enjoyable, spooky read :-) blessings, lynn
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Date: 2/20/2017 8:08:00 AM
Chilling!
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Date: 2/19/2017 1:55:00 PM
Great sonnet dear sis. Had me loving this image and wham it changed and I wanted nothing to do with him. Great job.
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Date: 2/19/2017 11:05:00 AM
Great sonnet Andrea - congrats on your placement :)
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Date: 2/18/2017 12:31:00 PM
You have written a truly deep and masterful sonnet my good friend! A fav and a most solid 7 ... Such deep imagery, and excellent flow.
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Date: 2/17/2017 6:05:00 PM
Congratulations Andrea on the placement of the contest. Excellent mythological sonnet.
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Date: 2/17/2017 3:11:00 PM
A wonderful write Andrea, congratulations on placing in the contest...
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Date: 2/17/2017 8:11:00 AM
- Andrea, here there was many a beautiful lines and words - Enjoy reading :) - Good luck in the contest - Best wishes for a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/17/2017 2:18:00 AM
Chimera: Greek mythology glorified in your captivating poem dear, Andrea! Absolutely marvelous!
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Date: 2/16/2017 10:24:00 PM
Incredible sonnet, Andrea...I love how you used the words, and if I could write in meter as well as you, I'd be thrilled. You do it so well it seems effortless. Lots of luck but I doubt you'll need it Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 2/16/2017 10:19:00 PM
Hey Andrea, thank you for the kind words tonight...too kind! If I have THE GIFT, it's a learned one from poets like yourself.
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Date: 2/16/2017 10:07:00 PM
The midnight moon has that effect!...Very nicely penned Andrea...best wishes
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Date: 2/16/2017 7:33:00 PM
I guess we should be careful before we really get attached and committed to someone or something. You tell the story with such elegance and flair plus the moonlight is perfect. It makes me think of crazy behavior. I probably mentioned there will be a once or twice in a lifetime event on August 21, 2017. It passes right through the heart of Iowa.
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Date: 2/16/2017 6:14:00 PM
What a fine fantasy tale you tell with this poem! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 2/16/2017 1:23:00 PM
Creepy! I love the way this starts very tranquil and my thoughts were that it was going to be a love story, then *bam!* in comes the sucker punch. Good luck with the competition!
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Date: 2/16/2017 10:42:00 AM
You know better than to eat Polish sausage before bedtime, it makes you have nightmares. Very dark, Andrea. Having a bad day?
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Date: 2/16/2017 3:09:00 AM
Sounds frightening, Andrea:) great use of the words:)
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Date: 2/16/2017 1:06:00 AM
OMG Andrea!!Your Sonnet is so moving, so strong a 7+ :) You have created the imagery & energy that oh~so many humans have felt..Your piece speaks for many....peace, jill
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Date: 2/15/2017 5:15:00 PM
The darker side of Andrea comes out in this wonderfully written poem. This is a sure winner. You used the required words perfectly.
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Date: 2/15/2017 4:34:00 PM
quite a creepy poem Andrea good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 2/15/2017 4:14:00 PM
as it is for all men at first appearance we seem like glimmering Knights at second look we are seen for who or what we truly are...and then the disappoints begin..ha ha...good luck in the contest
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Date: 2/15/2017 3:57:00 PM
Excellent but chilling, Andrea. Best to keep away from moons at midnight. Good luck with the contest. // Barry
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Date: 2/15/2017 3:34:00 PM
Great Chimera Andrea x well done x
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Date: 2/15/2017 3:29:00 PM
skies turned wicked! Lovely and frightening images! Nice, Andrea!
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