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Am I dreaming or have I dreamt myself awake I can’t seem to discern between real and fake What’s right What’s wrong which direction should I take Am I reasonably responsible for the many mistakes I might make Backward bouncy walking Crazy ticketed talking Following the run in a pretty girls stocking Unafraid of anything Willing to do what’s shocking Sarcastically mocking Listening to head voices My brain has lost it’s sane my body’s rocking My mind skipping from Idea to Idea You weren’t there a second ago go but now I see you Wait a second I can see right through you Black isn’t white Yellow is now blue Bending over To take a boulder out of my shoe They were old yesterday and now they’re new But instead of one pair I’m wearing out two The room is shaking Momma’s in the kitchen Half baked Pieces of everything Tender flaked The tiles under my feet vibrate to the beat Hey momma “Trick or Treat? Give me something good to eat” Suddenly I’m covered by a sheet on a cold stainless table being processed like meat sliding on a rail Door closed Fire burning someone turning up the heat Bell ringing, ringing, ringing WAKE UP, Wake up Rick If only I could That would be a cool trick! I feel like I’m being beat with a stick Shake, shake, shake “wake up Rick its Eight, you’re going to be late.” Get out of bed you fool. It’s time for school.” Eyes open, “I‘m up, I’m up!” But wait You can’t hear me talk Because I’m an unwound broken old clock no longer able to tick or tock I only have hands so I can’t even walk. Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz Things that make me go hmm. The second hand of clock or watch is actually the third hand. ;0)

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Date: 12/1/2022 3:38:00 PM
Hey, Richard, I'm a new poet! I couldn't help but love the first stanza of your poem, it captivated me Am I dreaming or have I dreamt myself awake I can’t seem to discern between real and fake Loved those lines and your style of writing!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/1/2022 9:43:00 PM
What a great comment. Thanks so much.
Date: 7/27/2020 10:31:00 AM
Hi Richard, here you are again at your creative best. You are always able to show such creativity in whatever thought you wish to encapsulate. This is another of your fast flowing masterpieces. Ever dream the dream my friend. Has to be a fav. Have a wonderful Monday. Blessings....Mike.
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Date: 5/14/2020 2:23:00 AM
We are all caught in a Reality Matrix...of which we are dreaming of being awake...well-executed Richard and Congrats!! on POTW!!...best wishes from the Wingster :o)
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Date: 5/13/2020 10:18:00 PM
Richard, thank you for the roller coaster ride through your dreams. Doctors recommend eating less chili right before bed, lol! Fun write, and congrats on the POTD ~ John
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/14/2020 7:11:00 AM
Thanks a John.
Date: 5/12/2020 10:44:00 PM
Richard, this poem invites you in and keeps you mesmerized until you are fully awake! Wonderful topsy turvy extended metaphor. Congratulations on your POTW
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/14/2020 7:10:00 AM
Thanks Sam.;0)
Date: 5/10/2020 10:23:00 PM
Awesomely impressive piece of poetry Rich. Stay safe and healthy please. My warmest regards to you friend.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/10/2020 10:26:00 PM
Thanks Gideon.;0)
Date: 5/10/2020 6:40:00 PM
Round and around you go, where will you end up? Nobody knows. Giggle. Or so it seems, in a crazy dream. : ) This is so cute, clever and creative. Thanks for the smile Rick. Congratulations on Poem of the Week. : ) Brandy
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/10/2020 10:26:00 PM
Much appreciated, hugs Rick.
Date: 5/10/2020 6:30:00 PM
Another gem from you Rick, congratulations on POTW!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/10/2020 10:43:00 PM
Thanks Tania. Hugs Rick.
Date: 5/10/2020 5:17:00 PM
Thanks to all, what a pleasant surprise. I will drop by yo visit each of you. Happy Mother’s Day to all the moms.
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Date: 5/10/2020 3:08:00 PM
Thank you for the humor Rick. Congratulations on your POTW honor! xxoo
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Date: 5/10/2020 11:57:00 AM
what a clever humourous write Rick, congrats on POTW:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 5/10/2020 10:56:00 AM
This is a gem that I missed Richard, glad I saw it today, well written and a well deserved honour of POTW. Tom
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Date: 5/10/2020 9:56:00 AM
Deeply contemplative--splendid imagination. Congrats Richard on poem of the week.
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Date: 5/6/2020 1:17:00 AM
The Prologue of dreamland, Whats to come, and delivered, wonderful poetry, Richard, needed at these worrying times...Stay Safe...Harry
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/6/2020 8:45:00 AM
Thanks Harry, I appreciate your visits. ;0)
Date: 5/5/2020 11:05:00 AM
Hi Richard, Great piece of work, take care of yourself, Frances
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Date: 5/6/2020 8:46:00 AM
Thanks Frances, hugs Rick.
Date: 5/4/2020 12:54:00 PM
This sounds real, but its not real but it could be real, love this fascinating, imaginative, creative story - well penned my friend. Hugs, Jennifer.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2020 1:30:00 PM
Thanks Jennifer. I wrote it just after waking up. Hugs Rick.
Date: 5/4/2020 3:25:00 AM
Whimsical and topsy-turvy (like any good dream should be). The topic of dreams is such a fascinating one ... and you pulled it off so well, it was more like Alice in Wonderland, really. Loved the cacophony of images and the sheer absurdity of it all.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2020 8:10:00 AM
Thanks Timothy, I wrote it with the right just the right amount of brain fog.
Date: 5/3/2020 9:28:00 PM
Hello Richard, That train left the tracks a few times. But it was still worth the ride. 'Black isn’t white Yellow is now blue Bending over To take a boulder out of my shoe'. I think Gershon may be right. A Fave for me. -Richard
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2020 8:10:00 AM
Thanks, a great comment to start my morning. ;0)
Date: 5/3/2020 5:06:00 PM
Hmmmm Either that's one CaRRazzy dream or you are smoking something weird. This one made me smile. ?Good imagination here. God Bless, JB
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2020 8:25:00 AM
I’m glad I could make you smile. Hugs Rick.
Date: 5/3/2020 3:57:00 PM
Not POTD, I see... Highway robbery if you ask me. This IS a superfabusplendiferous write!! :) gw
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2020 8:27:00 AM
Timothy got the honour with his Dandelion poem. I have to say it was most deserving. Thanks though for your vote of confidence.
Date: 5/3/2020 2:31:00 PM
so surreal. FEels like a few of MY dreams, Richard. Great images.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2020 9:05:00 AM
Thanks Andrea. ;0)
Date: 5/3/2020 12:26:00 PM
Great writing, & fun to read ---like performance, read-aloud democratic poetry (LOL!) Loved the comments, too, as in A. Hemmati's. Thanks for reading mine today Richard; peaceful dialog is rare these days. PS leads in a way. Shalom, shalom (next HisStory)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2020 9:06:00 AM
Thanks Anil, much appreciated.
Date: 5/3/2020 12:06:00 PM
This had my head spinning... so much to take in... so much to process. Clever write
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2020 9:28:00 AM
Thanks Eileen, hugs Rick.
Date: 5/3/2020 8:28:00 AM
A very clever, humorous write, Mr. West Coast Man! Really enjoyed the charming conclusion! Cheers, Happy Jack!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/3/2020 8:34:00 AM
Great to see you old friend. Keep smiling Jack.
Date: 5/3/2020 3:56:00 AM
I still have no more to say than you and your poetry are true voices of the time. Only as one instance, take another glance at McLeish’s half-a-century old mental journey in “You, Andrew Marvel” to see how far you’ve gone beyond those days’ linear, one-dimensional stream of thought and non-ethereal, prosaic language despite its rich, figurative treatment of the past civilizations' nightfall. You're so much ahead in technique. The technique was employed by Woolf to Faulkner in fiction in a primitive impressionist way with no such surreal, dissolving images as you employ here and is seen in the poetry from Dylan Thomas onward.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/3/2020 8:23:00 AM
I quite enjoyed reading the piece, I was not familiar with Mcleish. I think his poetry holds up quite well. I am honoured that you compare me with such great writers. I don’t feel worthy but as an old girlfriend once said, I’ve never been good at accepting a compliment. I can thank my dead father for that, he had great skill at making me I was less than enough. So I finish by saying Thank You.
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