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Traces

One evening, much like any other
striated feathers of pinks, and deepest primrose
colored the clouds with facets of light, tapering inward
Traces of gold between each color, as deep and clear as the sages

The red sun overhead, had grown weary with seasons,
and did not seem to notice that we were mother and child

Whispering sounds of emerald breezes
did not label me wise, nor her naive'
We were two who walked equally, side by side

She lifted her voice,
and spoke with an eloquence I had not heard before,
and it was just as the twilight calls to the stars....
so that they will know just what to do

Young spruces stood bolt upright,
every twig stiff with interest, 
and with deep respect at her every word
as if they were watching transformation in tandem, 
an exchange so delicately detectable 

And in one clinging moment to the other,
one of us was letting go of childhood, 
and one was letting go of the child

Both of us looking to the sky for recognition

I watched the sycamore shed, beneath its load of yellow, rust and gold
Letting them quietly go, without remorse

while I did the same
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Gauthier Avatar
September 17, 2018 at 9:16 PM
Wow - a beautiful poem, Carrie. A FAVE for me. Congrats on a most deserving win.
Haight Avatar
September 9, 2018 at 9:37 AM
Such touching, melancholy metaphors in your beautifully-written poem, Carrie. A Fav for me! Hugs, Sandra
Barden Avatar
September 8, 2018 at 8:04 PM
This is just exquisite ... breathtaking and so poignantly melancholy, trimmed with precious joy, (gold leaf on the frame). Your work is a benchmark here, Carrie, and we all hope to share a bit of your shadow, at best ... you make us all want to be better poets, and I can think of no greater compliment. Blessings, my friend! :-) <3
Quigley Avatar
May 18, 2016 at 6:04 PM
Hi Carrie--This was a great write that flowed well with beautiful and relevant metaphor. It fit very nicely to the topic, even though it was an older write. Thanks and congrats!
Scars Avatar
May 17, 2016 at 8:56 PM
Carrie, beautiful poem, and congrats on your placement in the contest! :)-luloo
Dietrich Avatar
September 5, 2013 at 5:55 PM
I was reading what I had written about this one a while ago and I thought it was tremendous THEN as well. Congrats for your win.
Morgan Avatar
September 4, 2013 at 11:02 PM
Congrats on your win.Morgan
Adams Avatar
September 4, 2013 at 7:05 PM
congrats on your win with this beautiful poem....:)
A  Avatar
September 4, 2013 at 6:27 PM
a nice win... SKAT
Deschler Avatar
September 4, 2013 at 2:34 PM
Just beautiful imagery in this piece, Carrie! A very enjoyable poem to read! Nicely done!...Thank you for the kind comments on my poem, "I Want To Be Yours". I appreciate it!...Congratulations to you, as well!
A   Avatar
September 4, 2013 at 7:59 AM
Carrie, thanks for the comment... , congratulations in Nathan's any poem contest... have yourself a nice one... Linda
A  Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 9:33 PM
awesome.. :-) ~SKAT~
A   Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 9:06 PM
Carrie, , congratulations... thank you for sharing this small 'GLIMPSES OF EPIPHANY" love...Linda :-)
Arowolo Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 7:23 AM
Beautiful entry......Congrats on your superb win,Carrie....
Hamilton Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 5:41 AM
hi Carrie well penned
Roberts Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 12:56 AM
Carrie this is fantastic........Seren
Onclaud Avatar
August 2, 2013 at 11:49 PM
'one of us letting go of childhood, one letting go of the child..' what a creative impact,carrie.. sweet congrats and thanks for responding through my blog!..:) huggs
Hendricks Avatar
August 2, 2013 at 4:56 PM
Congratulations on a well-deserved win, Carrie. Nice poem, my friend. Licia :-)
Lamoureux Avatar
August 2, 2013 at 4:38 PM
Well deserved win, congrats
Jones Avatar
August 2, 2013 at 4:00 PM
Sniff sniff....congratulations.. Carrie ....but she will always feel inside like mammas little girl.....:-)
K. Avatar
July 30, 2013 at 8:45 AM
You already know how much I admire your ability to convey such delicate moments, Carrie. You tie nature and human nature so beautifully and eloquently here. I just love this one and yes, your sycamore tree! Reading this,as most of your poems, I feel like I always peek into your world.beautiful images and face tingling (yup, again) realities in life!
Lamoureux Avatar
July 29, 2013 at 5:58 PM
There is much wisdom within htese lovely heart felt words. Tremendous piece.
Dietrich Avatar
July 29, 2013 at 4:47 PM
wow, this is TREMENDOUS. How you showed that maturation into adulthood. Just love this, Carrie!!!
Hendricks Avatar
July 28, 2013 at 3:02 PM
I love how you manage to weave all the wonderful colours together. Smart work here, my friend. Licia :-)
Bauer Avatar
July 28, 2013 at 2:59 PM
oh carrie, this is so beautiful and poignant! i'd give it first place in the contest...
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