Vince Suzadail Jr. Poet Etheree

Touch Me-Monday

NO!
Not now
Damn alarm
Feel like crying
Another Monday
I have to go to work
And still feeling so confused
Look at all those freaking stop lights
Touch me, tell me I am not dreaming
Will one of you damn lights turn green today

It's rush hour? How come we are not moving
Touch me again. With a baseball bat
Take me away from this nightmare
A tropical island please
I’ll touch that alarm clock
With a large hammer
No more Mondays
Feel better? 
Feel good?
YES!


Vince Suzadail Jr
For Nette Onclaud's Touch me count -up and down contest

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Akash Yadav August 24, 2011 at 5:13 AM this is a great write... I wish you all the best for future...sincerely, akash.

Phyllis Babcock July 28, 2011 at 11:07 AM I think we all could visualize ourselves in this situation Vince. No more Mondays would be great. love phyl

Judy Ball July 28, 2011 at 12:55 AM Been theere and done that. Looking forward to retirement. Very good feeling in this. Love the imagery. I could see myself in your words. A good write. God Bless, JB

Robert A. Dufresne June 8, 2011 at 6:12 PM Sounds alot like my commutes, Vince. excellent Etheree . Thanks fo your comment on my poem.

Mohammad Yamin May 30, 2011 at 1:18 PM A superb Etheree - a great write. It is always so rewarding to read your well articulated poems. Thanks for your encouraging comments on my poem Mother. I missed the Mother's Day Contest. -Mohammad

James Fraser May 1, 2011 at 7:52 AM Many congratulations on your win in Nette's fine contest Vince. Have a lovely Sunday....:)

Carol Sunshine Brown April 29, 2011 at 11:45 AM Congratulations on your win Vince in Nette's contest. Love, Carol

Elaine George April 28, 2011 at 10:42 PM Definitely FIRST PLACE! Win. Many congrats, Lainie

Emma Buckeridge April 28, 2011 at 9:00 PM Congratulations on the big win! Great poem, I sure feel like this on a Monday morning. Well done.

Debbie Guzzi April 28, 2011 at 5:41 PM LOL, yup, me and road rage, I hear ya! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Kash Poet April 28, 2011 at 10:37 AM Just Excellent!!Congrats on your 1st place win,Vince--kash

Iolanda Scripca April 28, 2011 at 10:30 AM Oh, Vince, you've spoken my mind :) This is seriously funny!!! I hate Mondays too. Who doesn't? You are an excellent poet/writer!!! Congrats on your bIG win! Love, iolanda

Gautami Phookan April 28, 2011 at 10:26 AM Excellent write on 'bad' Mondays. Congrats on your 1st place win. liked this one..gautami

Francine Roberts April 28, 2011 at 9:36 AM great job , congrats on your first place win

Carolyn Devonshire April 28, 2011 at 9:32 AM Wish I could send you a "tropical island," Vince. There are alarm clocks (with padding) that you can throw against a wall to make them stop ringing. Maybe for your next birthday... Excellent work! Congratulations on taking the top spot in Nette's contest! Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart April 28, 2011 at 4:34 AM Congrats Vince on your first place win in Nette's contest with this exquisite entry my friend... a lovely lilting piece of poetry ..enjoy your top spot for a top notch poem..luv..

Gwendolen Song April 28, 2011 at 12:23 AM I started to write for this contest and took a similar angle...u have some serious hatred for Mondays, don't you? Hilarious write! Congrats on your first place win! Gwendolen

Kabuteng P.Ink K. April 27, 2011 at 10:51 PM Oh this one is so cool, Vince ^_^ you got me smiling a lot here, and I really liked how you did yours, starting with No! & ending with Yes! Very witty etheree on Monday ^_^ Super congrats on your 1st place win ^_^ --- btw-- can you pls tell me the title of your stream write? Thank you :D

Samual Ronthorpe April 27, 2011 at 7:39 PM Excellent. Congrats on a great write.

Joyce Johnson April 27, 2011 at 6:50 PM My goodness Vince you hate Mondays much more than I do. But then I am retired. Congratulations on your big win. Love, Joyce

John Freeman April 27, 2011 at 6:37 PM Congratulation Vince on first place. Agape, Moses

Carrie Richards April 27, 2011 at 5:22 PM Hooray...this was a favorite of mine! So glad to see it is number 1 !! Congrats Vince!! well deserved!

Andrea Dietrich April 27, 2011 at 5:18 PM vince, this is awesome. One of the few I have read on the subject of Monday. The worst day of the week for me and I too feel just like you about it. Congratulations. Great humor shining thru.

Poet Destroyer A April 23, 2011 at 1:02 AM Wow! Sounds like.Friday... that's the.only day I dread to get up.. and move around... and I hear ya on them stop lights... enjoyed your poem... take.care...p.d.

Carrie Richards April 20, 2011 at 6:40 PM Sooo many folks will relate to this one!! Better have another cup of coffee, Vince!! You'll need it!! LOL !!

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