Deb M Poet Rhyme

-Topless

We were young and full of adventure
Travelling in our kombi van
Burning incense and listening
To Cat Stevens and Bob Dylan

We decided to climb a tourist peak
Slowly making it to the top
Going down was easier 
Though there was a lot of start and stop

It was  busy on the peak that day
With tourists abound
We had to keep standing aside 
On the narrow ground

As we stood aside to let someone pass
There was a buzzing in the air
In a moment bees were upon me
Down my top and in my long hair

Without any thought or hesitation
In a  complete frenzied state of affairs
Writhing and screaming I ripped off my top
To many tourists eyes a-glare ……

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CayCay Godwin May 10, 2025 at 7:15 AM Long hair, van, incense, Morning Has Broken, Everybody Must Get *^%%&&^ - did you by any chance graduate high school in the 70s? Me did. Oh, I could tell some stories equally as funny and 'telling'. I'm so sorry for you, had it been me, I would have needed an eppy pen and I don't know how long they've been in existence. Enjoyed this very much ... CayCay (read below that you didn't get stung, maybe u scared the bees.) Deb M May 12, 2025 at 1:19 PM Yes you get it CayCay….kombi van, incense and Everybody Must Get ……!!! Haha…..Thanks so much CayCay! Debx

Jennifer Proxenos April 27, 2025 at 4:35 AM Good for you Debs. you gave them a good eye full, almost the 'Full Monty'. I would have done the same - hope they didn't sting too much! Hugs and blessings Jennifer. Deb M April 29, 2025 at 2:25 AM Unbelievably Jen not one sting and there was so many of them! Thanks….Debx

Darlene De Beaulieu April 21, 2025 at 2:40 PM Hello Deb, You were protecting yourself from the bees. Darlenex Belated happy Easter. Darlene De Beaulieu April 25, 2025 at 10:56 AM Hello Deb M. yes you were. /Darlene/ x Deb M April 25, 2025 at 4:21 AM Exactly Darlene…..thanks Debx

Jan Allison April 21, 2025 at 1:40 PM oh gee Deb what a story , thanks for sharing - bet the old boobies got inflated with the bee stings! hugs jan xx Deb M April 25, 2025 at 4:20 AM They were young and perky back then Jan haha! Thanks….Debx

Mike Gentile April 5, 2025 at 5:49 AM Deb, you and I must be of the same generation! I can truly relate! What a fun story and I do so hope that it's true! What a memory to keep, a lovely and fun poem to read this morning! Happy Saturday xxoo Deb M April 13, 2025 at 9:53 AM Its true Mike….yes we are of the same generation! Debx

Gregory Stanford April 4, 2025 at 9:52 AM What a charming poem, Deb! Thank youx Deb M April 13, 2025 at 9:52 AM Thanks Gregory….Debx

Heidi Sands April 3, 2025 at 4:15 AM LOL I know this exact situation when I came across a bee's nest in the garden of my yard! They all came after me as I got stung, ran and the top came off before getting inside lol. Well done ! :) Deb M April 13, 2025 at 9:55 AM So you have been there Heidi! Haha…..thanks….Debx

Ink Empress April 3, 2025 at 3:35 AM Omg thats a wild experience youv described here dear debx, made me think of once when i went uphill in malaysia to a tourist spot too and while coming down in my car, goin thru a terrible accident! Im lucky i lived! And survived! Always a pleasure reading you! Hope you are doing well! Sending you light always Deb M April 13, 2025 at 9:54 AM Thankyou sweet Ink….Debx

Anne-Lise Andresen April 3, 2025 at 2:34 AM - A story that takes me back in time, Deb - When: "We were young and full of adventure" - Love the ending :) - hugs Deb M April 13, 2025 at 9:54 AM Thankyou sweet Sunshine! Debx

Nette Onclaud April 2, 2025 at 10:42 PM love the surprise in the end, deb... good thing this didn't happen to me when i visited bondi and blue mountain in Sydney...charming write! Deb M April 13, 2025 at 9:53 AM Oh thanks so much Nette…..Debx

Jerry Brotherton April 1, 2025 at 6:02 PM Back in the day, they used to give out free halter tops. The girls would change them out right there in the stadium and no one seemed to mind. Maybe those olden days were better after all. Deb M April 2, 2025 at 10:12 AM Now, now Brother Jerry hehe! Sister Debx

Terry Flood March 31, 2025 at 4:41 PM Sounds like an episode of ‘Twin Peaks’…. Okay… that was a cheap tawdry gag. The nearest I can get to that was the day I was pruning a shrub which had, unknown to me, a wasps nest under it. Must have been stung fifty times…. Strangely, It merely itched a bit… and I didn’t whip me top off! Deb M April 2, 2025 at 10:12 AM Twin peaks a long time ago haha! Thanks Terry….Debx

I Am Anaya March 31, 2025 at 2:23 PM The days were innocent and memorable experiences like this a great conversation piece and not a recording on social media for trolls to have at. Faving my friend~ Deb M April 2, 2025 at 10:11 AM Aww thanks so much Anaya ….thankyou for the fave also….a fave is very special indeed! Yes the good ole days for sure….Debx

Karen Jones March 31, 2025 at 11:07 AM Oh wow! I hope you didn’t get stung and great you weren’t allergic I suppose! Enjoyed reading. Deb M April 2, 2025 at 10:15 AM Miraculously not one sting….l had long curly hair and were loads of bees in it buzzing …it was awful! Thanks Karen! Debx

John Read March 31, 2025 at 10:42 AM Hi Deb I loved reading your story, I bet those tourists couldn't believe what they were seeing. xx Deb M April 2, 2025 at 10:16 AM Thanks so much John….Debx

Ilene Bauer March 31, 2025 at 8:24 AM Ha! You’ve described this so well, Deb! That’s a story that’s painful to live through, but great to share afterwards (both for you and for everyone else who witnessed it)! Deb M April 2, 2025 at 10:20 AM Haha….yes it was very scary actually all buzzing in my hair and down my top and l panicked and ripped my top off without a thought…l was young and in good shape back then but if it happened now….people would be jumping off the peak/rock at the sight haha!! Debx

Joseph P. DiMino March 31, 2025 at 8:19 AM Sounds like a downer...then again, you were young. I miss youth. Blessings my friend. Deb M April 2, 2025 at 10:21 AM Yes l miss youth also….how the years fly Joe! Thanks….Debx

Tom Cunningham March 31, 2025 at 7:52 AM Yikes, good job camera phones weren't around or you'd be on X or Facebook lol. Tom Deb M April 2, 2025 at 10:14 AM Yes l know Tom….it would have gone viral haha! Debx