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We were young and full of adventure Travelling in our kombi van Burning incense and listening To Cat Stevens and Bob Dylan We decided to climb a tourist peak Slowly making it to the top Going down was easier Though there was a lot of start and stop It was busy on the peak that day With tourists abound We had to keep standing aside On the narrow ground As we stood aside to let someone pass There was a buzzing in the air In a moment bees were upon me Down my top and in my long hair Without any thought or hesitation In a complete frenzied state of affairs Writhing and screaming I ripped off my top To many tourists eyes a-glare ……

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CayCay Jennings

Date: 5/10/2025 7:15:00 AM

Long hair, van, incense, Morning Has Broken, Everybody Must Get *^%%&&^ - did you by any chance graduate high school in the 70s? Me did. Oh, I could tell some stories equally as funny and 'telling'. I'm so sorry for you, had it been me, I would have needed an eppy pen and I don't know how long they've been in existence. Enjoyed this very much ... CayCay (read below that you didn't get stung, maybe u scared the bees.)

Deb M
Date: 5/12/2025 1:19:00 PM

Yes you get it CayCay….kombi van, incense and Everybody Must Get ……!!! Haha…..Thanks so much CayCay! Debx

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/27/2025 4:35:00 AM

Good for you Debs. you gave them a good eye full, almost the 'Full Monty'. I would have done the same - hope they didn't sting too much! Hugs and blessings Jennifer.

Deb M
Date: 4/29/2025 2:25:00 AM

Unbelievably Jen not one sting and there was so many of them! Thanks….Debx

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/21/2025 2:40:00 PM

Hello Deb, You were protecting yourself from the bees. Darlenex Belated happy Easter.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 4/25/2025 10:56:00 AM

Hello Deb M. yes you were. /Darlene/ x

Deb M
Date: 4/25/2025 4:21:00 AM

Exactly Darlene…..thanks Debx

Jan Allison

Date: 4/21/2025 1:40:00 PM

oh gee Deb what a story , thanks for sharing - bet the old boobies got inflated with the bee stings! hugs jan xx

Deb M
Date: 4/25/2025 4:20:00 AM

They were young and perky back then Jan haha! Thanks….Debx

Mike Gentile

Date: 4/5/2025 5:49:00 AM

Deb, you and I must be of the same generation! I can truly relate! What a fun story and I do so hope that it's true! What a memory to keep, a lovely and fun poem to read this morning! Happy Saturday xxoo

Deb M
Date: 4/13/2025 9:53:00 AM

Its true Mike….yes we are of the same generation! Debx

Gregory Colodub

Date: 4/4/2025 9:52:00 AM

What a charming poem, Deb! Thank youx

Deb M
Date: 4/13/2025 9:52:00 AM

Thanks Gregory….Debx

Heidi Sands

Date: 4/3/2025 4:15:00 AM

LOL I know this exact situation when I came across a bee's nest in the garden of my yard! They all came after me as I got stung, ran and the top came off before getting inside lol. Well done ! :)

Deb M
Date: 4/13/2025 9:55:00 AM

So you have been there Heidi! Haha…..thanks….Debx

Ink Empress

Date: 4/3/2025 3:35:00 AM

Omg thats a wild experience youv described here dear debx, made me think of once when i went uphill in malaysia to a tourist spot too and while coming down in my car, goin thru a terrible accident! Im lucky i lived! And survived! Always a pleasure reading you! Hope you are doing well! Sending you light always

Deb M
Date: 4/13/2025 9:54:00 AM

Thankyou sweet Ink….Debx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/3/2025 2:34:00 AM

- A story that takes me back in time, Deb - When: "We were young and full of adventure" - Love the ending :) - hugs

Deb M
Date: 4/13/2025 9:54:00 AM

Thankyou sweet Sunshine! Debx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 4/2/2025 10:42:00 PM

love the surprise in the end, deb... good thing this didn't happen to me when i visited bondi and blue mountain in Sydney...charming write!

Deb M
Date: 4/13/2025 9:53:00 AM

Oh thanks so much Nette…..Debx

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 4/1/2025 6:02:00 PM

Back in the day, they used to give out free halter tops. The girls would change them out right there in the stadium and no one seemed to mind. Maybe those olden days were better after all.

Deb M
Date: 4/2/2025 10:12:00 AM

Now, now Brother Jerry hehe! Sister Debx

Terry Flood

Date: 3/31/2025 4:41:00 PM

Sounds like an episode of ‘Twin Peaks’…. Okay… that was a cheap tawdry gag. The nearest I can get to that was the day I was pruning a shrub which had, unknown to me, a wasps nest under it. Must have been stung fifty times…. Strangely, It merely itched a bit… and I didn’t whip me top off!

Deb M
Date: 4/2/2025 10:12:00 AM

Twin peaks a long time ago haha! Thanks Terry….Debx

I Am Anaya

Date: 3/31/2025 2:23:00 PM

The days were innocent and memorable experiences like this a great conversation piece and not a recording on social media for trolls to have at. Faving my friend~

Deb M
Date: 4/2/2025 10:11:00 AM

Aww thanks so much Anaya ….thankyou for the fave also….a fave is very special indeed! Yes the good ole days for sure….Debx

Karen Jones

Date: 3/31/2025 11:07:00 AM

Oh wow! I hope you didn’t get stung and great you weren’t allergic I suppose! Enjoyed reading.

Deb M
Date: 4/2/2025 10:15:00 AM

Miraculously not one sting….l had long curly hair and were loads of bees in it buzzing …it was awful! Thanks Karen! Debx

John Read

Date: 3/31/2025 10:42:00 AM

Hi Deb I loved reading your story, I bet those tourists couldn't believe what they were seeing. xx

Deb M
Date: 4/2/2025 10:16:00 AM

Thanks so much John….Debx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/31/2025 8:24:00 AM

Ha! You’ve described this so well, Deb! That’s a story that’s painful to live through, but great to share afterwards (both for you and for everyone else who witnessed it)!

Deb M
Date: 4/2/2025 10:20:00 AM

Haha….yes it was very scary actually all buzzing in my hair and down my top and l panicked and ripped my top off without a thought…l was young and in good shape back then but if it happened now….people would be jumping off the peak/rock at the sight haha!! Debx

Joe Dimino

Date: 3/31/2025 8:19:00 AM

Sounds like a downer...then again, you were young. I miss youth. Blessings my friend.

Deb M
Date: 4/2/2025 10:21:00 AM

Yes l miss youth also….how the years fly Joe! Thanks….Debx

Di11y Da11y

Date: 3/31/2025 7:56:00 AM

Haha these things happen Deb. I was tubing or white water rafting or something on a river somewhere in North Carolina and ended up drifting to the shrubs at the side and getting stung a few times by hornets and having to dive under water and my bikini top was not at all where it should have been when someone helped me back aboard :) eek!

Deb M
Date: 4/2/2025 10:23:00 AM

Haha so you have been there and done that also D.D….a memorable experience ha! Thanks….Debx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/31/2025 7:52:00 AM

Yikes, good job camera phones weren't around or you'd be on X or Facebook lol. Tom

Deb M
Date: 4/2/2025 10:14:00 AM

Yes l know Tom….it would have gone viral haha! Debx