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I believe this was my first attempt at a musical pantoum

 

My heart is breaking, but the show must go on. Too much love will kill you, if you try too hard. Love of my life, don't leave me; where have you gone? You're my best friend, but you have left me scarred. Too much love will kill you, if you try too hard. I feel hurt, but still you take my breath away. You're my best friend, but you have left me scarred. "You'll find somebody to love," is all you can say. I feel hurt, but you still take my breath away. You walk through the door, and say "Don't stop me now." "You'll find somebody to love," is all you can say. You want to break free? It does raise an eyebrow. You walk through the door, and say "Don't stop me now." Crazy little thing called love has turned to rust. You want to break free? It does raise an eyebrow. What do you care - another one bites the dust. Crazy little thing called love has turned to rust. Without you it seems I'm going slightly mad. What do you care - another one bites the dust. Who wants to live forever - I feel so sad. Without you it seems I'm going slightly mad. I need your loving tonight, but you're not here. Who wants to live forever - I feel so sad. I was born to love you, but now live in fear. I need your loving tonight, but you're not here. These are supposed to be the days of our lives. I was born to love you, but now live in fear, as I listen to Queen's musical archives. These are supposed to be the days of our lives. Love of my life, don't leave me; where have you gone? As I listen to Queen's musical archives, my heart is breaking, but the show must go on! Written on 29 April 2016 The Silent One
Wanted to experiment doing a pantoum using music titles. This poem has 15 of Queen's titles as below. I could not get in my favourite song Bohemian Rhapsody! The Show Must Go On Too Much Love Will Kill You Love Of My Life You're My Best Friend You Take My Breath Away Somebody To Love Don't Stop Me Now I Want To Break Free Crazy Little Thing Called Love Another One Bites The Dust I'm Going Slightly Mad Who Wants To Live Forever Need Your Loving Tonight I Was Born To Love You These Are The Days Of Our Lives Pantoum poem A rare form of poetry. It is composed of a series of quatrains; the second and fourth lines of each stanza are repeated as the first and third lines of the next. This pattern continues for any number of stanzas, except for the final stanza, which differs in the repeating pattern. The first and third lines of the last stanza are the second and fourth of the penultimate; the first line of the poem is the last line of the final stanza, and the third line of the first stanza is the second of the final. Ideally, the meaning of lines shifts when they are repeated although the words remain exactly the same: this can be done by shifting punctuation, punning, or simply recontextualizing. It does not have to rhyme nor have a syllable restriction.

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Date: 11/27/2018 9:11:00 AM
The more I read your poetry you take my breath away, you place each word perfectly on each poem you say, I wish I had your talent for I would be a star others would see me as they read your beautiful poetry.
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Date: 5/12/2018 11:44:00 PM
I am taken back by your awesome style. I really like the mix of your poetry with the artist you choose to write about bravo some of the best poetry I have ever read. Jack2
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Date: 4/19/2018 11:51:00 AM
I love Queen and I love your work... nicely done..
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Date: 4/12/2018 12:52:00 PM
A wonderful piece of work! It displays a forged talent, a soul challenge, a refined insight! Thank you Silent One for sharing your write.. This is the first time I come to know this type of poem. I enjoyed reading your poem and I'm pleased to learn from you.
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Date: 4/11/2018 5:45:00 PM
Gosh, we seem to share the same taste in music, Silent One. Queen is one of the best bands ever and I cried when Freddie Mercury died. The loneliness you describe so beautifully in this poem is a feeling I also share. Great work!
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Date: 4/8/2018 7:33:00 AM
It s a really deep and sad written poem,although it s your first musical pantoum but still it s really nice and enjoyable one to read, you see that a incomplete love can destroy a person, human mind is really strange, it will make memories that will never happen in real life and upon realization we ll start to live in memories cause they are are better than reality and that s the start of depression, so best thing is to forget and move on, the past may be dead but future can be bright
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Date: 4/5/2018 6:26:00 PM
another great example of this pantoum form using song titles. I love Fred Mercury's voice. Did you ever see a guy named Adam who was on American Idol years ago? His voice was so beautiful like Freddie's.
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Date: 4/5/2018 2:11:00 AM
I must admit I was a trifle disappointed at not seeing his all time great hit Bohemian Rhapsody in this wonderful Pantoum. I'm sure you can fit it somewhere? Otherwise its perfect in my eyes....Maria
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Date: 4/4/2018 9:18:00 PM
An all-time classic!!! Great stuff, good buddy!!! YEE HAW!!!
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Date: 4/4/2018 5:42:00 PM
Oh he was an amazing musician, and I'm sure he would say, you did him proud, Silent One. Beautiful!
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Date: 4/4/2018 2:56:00 PM
Your first attempt!!??? Seriously?? This is amazing!
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Date: 4/4/2018 12:30:00 PM
you are on a roll with this form and i find myself appreciating your images...thinking twice now about joining your contest, S.O... huggs
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Silent One
Date: 4/4/2018 12:34:00 PM
Why Bohemian Rhapsody? I must say it is my most favourite song of all time... Lol Thanks for the visit..
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Nette Onclaud
Date: 4/4/2018 12:32:00 PM
if you included 'bohemian rhapsody', i won;t talk to you anymore-- that's difficult; i love that song!..:)
Date: 4/4/2018 9:38:00 AM
For a first attempt that is truly remarkable and a great tribute to a great band. Tom.
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Silent One
Date: 4/4/2018 11:50:00 AM
Thank you Tom, yes this was my first music pantoum..

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