Jan Allison Poet Verse

Too Late

It was a wild winter’s night but she couldn’t turn back
The opalescent moon peeped through the clouds and lit her way
Sally’s  heart pounded when she heard loud groaning coming from the building
But she knew that she had to go in
The door creaked on ancient rusty hinges and she crept inside
Her eyes slowly became accustomed to the gloom from the oil lantern
It was then she caught sight of Steve kneeling in the corner  
Rivulets of red blood was trickling down his arms


She was too late... 


The trainee vet had raced ahead of her and the calf was safely delivered! 

Descry contest 
Sponsored by Rob Carmack 

05 08 17

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Ralph Sergi June 24, 2017 at 12:12 PM Great twist in the poem, JAN from MAN! Jan Allison June 24, 2017 at 7:46 PM Thanks so much Ralph I have such a smile on my face my friend thank you so so much for writing with me I am delighted WE got POTD and just wish it had been on your page not mine:-( Hugs jan xx

Reason A. Poteet June 21, 2017 at 8:15 PM You take me back to several years ago and my first calf delivery remembrance. Well-done, Jan, congratulations on your placement. Jan Allison June 22, 2017 at 12:54 AM Oh wow Reason I am amazed anyone can really relate to my story !!! :-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Marie Coreggia May 11, 2017 at 10:05 PM Talk about a surprise ending! The story reads like a mystery and you're are kept on your toes until the release of that very last line. This is beautifully done and it looks like winner to me:) Amitiés Jan Allison May 12, 2017 at 1:05 PM Thanks Anne-Marie I do like to have a twist in the end of some of my poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath May 11, 2017 at 10:31 AM An excellent poem surprise's screening clearly at the end. A beautiful 7. Loved always, bl Jan Allison May 11, 2017 at 2:15 PM Thanks BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong May 9, 2017 at 7:37 PM Your mystery drew us in to a happy and surprising ending. I enjoyed this Jan! 7 ; ) Jan Allison May 11, 2017 at 2:14 PM Thanks Connie:-) I do like a twist at the end of some of the poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Akkina Downing May 9, 2017 at 6:09 PM Ah, I was just on the verge of feeling sad, only be surprised at the end. Twist of blink, Jan. I love it :) Hugs Jan Allison May 11, 2017 at 2:13 PM Thanks akkina:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud May 9, 2017 at 12:58 PM greeat storyteller you are dear jan... enjoyed the element of surprise in the end.. how are you?.. am in a cleansing mode, hah!.. huggs Jan Allison May 9, 2017 at 5:46 PM Thanks Nette I'm fine hope you are OK:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith May 9, 2017 at 12:47 PM Great twist Jan, you had me going. Good luck in the contest... Jan Allison May 9, 2017 at 1:59 PM Thanks charlie:-) hugs Jan xx

Carl Jent May 9, 2017 at 7:52 AM A pleasant surprise ending, I had sadness pending, turned to joy as poem ending then had to write by sending with the day beginning about the contest you should be winning. Nice poem. Jan Allison May 9, 2017 at 12:24 PM I do like to surprise with a twist at the end of some of the poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Lisa Ricci May 9, 2017 at 5:13 AM Oh Jan. Wow. You delivered anticipation a moment in time with weather elements to enhance the plot and scene. The ending was perfect to give meaning to "too late". Well done completely and entirely. Good luck with the contest. Jan Allison May 9, 2017 at 12:24 PM Thanks lisa:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso May 8, 2017 at 11:23 PM I liked this on a few levels, of which only one of them could you guess! :) a Fav Jan Allison May 9, 2017 at 3:25 AM You know I'm warped and twisted with my endings sometimes!. i can guess which level you were thinking of lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Anil Deo May 8, 2017 at 6:08 PM SEVEN! We have some poems with James Herriot touches today (I wrote one with rabbits & butterflies to teach my then daughters, Math. Of course MATHS, in Commonwealth nations!). Tension filled, but only late to deliver a calf (No human was harmed in the making of this poem, I guess?). shalom Sis! Jan Allison May 9, 2017 at 12:26 PM I loved the herriot books and TV series gosh it was many years ago they were screened on the tv:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer May 8, 2017 at 5:55 PM great and unexpected ending, jan! Jan Allison May 9, 2017 at 12:26 PM Thanks Ilene I do like to surprise:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 8, 2017 at 5:37 PM Oh my, I thought there was a murder. WELL done, Jan. I bet it was murder on the mother cow though!!! ( have to look up Descry. I don't even know what it means. hahaha) Jan Allison May 8, 2017 at 5:42 PM Lol I'm not sure if it will appeal to rob I thought of the ending and built the poem around that thought:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 8, 2017 at 3:19 PM Ah...ha! Well done lovely :) xomo! Jan Allison May 8, 2017 at 4:43 PM Thanks Maureen:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith May 8, 2017 at 2:21 PM You left me sad...then I saw that last line. Jan Allison May 8, 2017 at 2:23 PM You know I'm twisted lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green May 8, 2017 at 2:21 PM Caught me...really well done Jan. Nice deceptive little piece of writing here. I really enjoyed this. Jan Allison May 8, 2017 at 2:24 PM Thanks Chris I like to show a little of my dark side lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen May 8, 2017 at 2:15 PM - Wow ... the end surprised me - Really great written, Jan - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison May 8, 2017 at 2:21 PM I'm not sure if it will be to Rob's liking but I thought I would give the contest a try:-) hugs Jan xx