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We became us, me and Pascal Perhaps slightly out with my rationale But I was 18, prone to cause a fuss Me and Pascal, we became us Difficult goth girl, RPG devotee Liked the same rock club you see It felt so nice to give love a whirl RPG devotee, difficult goth girl I was his beauty, we planned our life It was agreed we'd be man and wife Though I was underclass and his mum snooty We planned our life, I was his beauty He played games, night and day I graduated, he frittered time away Completely gone were original flames Night and day, he played games Though he was very bright, he lost direction I still blame his mum on reflection At 23 didn't want to sit in every night He lost direction, though he was very bright We've lost touch, though I think of him For years after he was like my phantom limb 5 formative years, isn't nothing much Though I think of him, we've lost touch

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Date: 7/15/2023 6:55:00 AM
Another exceptional poem, DD:) I love this form, should try it out again...
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Date: 7/15/2023 8:21:00 AM
This form does elevate an idea, thank you for your kind words x
Date: 7/15/2023 2:17:00 AM
some sadnes t.o this missing relation, it is emotionnal and poignant, enjoyed yann
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Date: 7/15/2023 3:33:00 AM
Thanks Yann, it's a very long time ago now and it ending was certainly right, it's just a shame that it means we kind of both lost the people that existed for those 5 years and they were perhaps the coolest and most innocent versions of ourselves we'd ever be.
Date: 7/15/2023 12:51:00 AM
Exceptional poetry, beautiful in its sadness Dilly a fave for me. I must look out the form, I love the impact of the turned lines 1 and 4:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/15/2023 1:04:00 AM
It's called swap quatrain Jan, I've done a few and this is probably the weakest but it can be really beautiful, some others have done amazing ones. My best one was probably this one https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/i_let_it_slip_away_1542891

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