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Collaboration poem by Wesley C (Space Cadet) and Darren White.

We have taken one of my older poems, and completely rewritten it.

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TO BE BROKEN IS TO BE HONEST Voice: Space Cadet (Wesley C) The sand is a warm window; from the sill, I watch skiffs in the distance sail away from me. Sea opens to self-sought solitude. That one day, distant lands became familiar playground for children of men, cruelly joined in time and place, by dice thrown into air, dimpled cubes with my name and theirs. I hear those children laugh in their sunny day, ice cream innocence. Their language a sound from once familiar foreign land. I stand in pain, refuse the hand that asks to help And wonder: if to be a child is to be honest, am I blind to their askance stares? With each step will I leave behind their glares? As I lift my head from my feet, with eyes toward the sea, my scars are only reflections of the footprints they perceive to be as me: Lines in the flesh-colored sand, wilted under uneven sea edges, remainders of the battle of separation. Craters, crimson petals blemished in the glass sun. A lonely pursuit. A sand rose's stigmata on my chest. Silence polished on my window reflection. Yet I gleam, my back to a windowless beach: With each day's dusk, we all fracture, light decays myriad aspects etched experiences To be broken is to be honest

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Date: 1/6/2017 4:12:00 AM
This is one of my favorites of yours. :) w
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Darren White
Date: 1/6/2017 5:50:00 AM
It IS my favourite, and all of that thanks to you, I will never forget how you helped me shape this into the form it has now :)
Date: 12/22/2016 7:54:00 PM
A perfect writing my dear! You and Wesley did another amazing colaboration! I agree with Jason! I also loved this part "my scars are only reflections of the footprints they perceive to be as me..." It really resonates with me - So beautiful Darren <3
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Darren White
Date: 12/22/2016 11:47:00 PM
Wesley is so wonderful in helping me being less literal, and adding more abstraction and symbolism to my poems. This poem I cherish...
Date: 12/21/2016 5:56:00 PM
Amazing Darren! "As I lift my head from my feet, with eyes toward the sea, my scars are only reflections of the footprints they perceive to be as me:" Brilliant Baby. Simply stunning.
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Darren White
Date: 12/21/2016 10:05:00 PM
Thanks <3 This poem is very important to me, and I am so happy with how it is now :)
Date: 12/20/2016 4:44:00 PM
The transformation is brilliantly put! The eggshell breaks from the inside! You guys are on fire! I thoroughly enjoyed this one!
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Darren White
Date: 12/20/2016 11:24:00 PM
It is. Splendid isolation can only be broken from the inside, never from the outside.
Date: 12/20/2016 3:38:00 PM
Terrific...love the ice cream innocence
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Darren White
Date: 12/20/2016 3:47:00 PM
Icecream innocence. That's Wesley's. Yeah, that's a beauty isn't it :)
Date: 12/20/2016 2:57:00 PM
Very deep and inspiring my friend. I felt a chill as I read this as the thoughts it created in my mind painted a hardship, but there was also something uplifting and fulfilling about this. Definitely one of your best.
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Darren White
Date: 12/20/2016 3:45:00 PM
You have that absolutely right. It is both. Coming from terrible hardship, stepping into sun and icecream :)
Date: 12/20/2016 12:28:00 PM
Yes, it is. We must step into our broken places and we all have them. Children, ideally, have yet to be broken. This is a lovely and haunting write, complex and hard to shake off ... CayCay
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Darren White
Date: 12/20/2016 12:33:00 PM
We all have them, we glue them together with gold, and come out of it stronger.... Thanks my friend -Darren.

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