Tired

Tired I am so tired today All my will and strength Seems to have leaked away Seeping from a hole in my left foot A human skin balloon I slowly deflate I can’t rally my thoughts Or make a break for a coffee cup It slouches like me in a delirium of non-wake up Outside the wind is up Ah yes the wind mad March calling Battering flags and snapping branches Interrupts my drowsy thoughts meandering Polishing pointless inconsequent causalities Polishing pointless inconsequent causalities Not a bad line for someone who is half asleep But the human balloon Still slowly deflates Leaking out from a hole in my left foot I think the best thing for me Is an early night Good bye long day; good night tonight

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Constance La France

Date: 3/7/2009 3:16:00 AM

"make a break for the coffee shop" yes, I know this feeling, stuck here in the North Pole, I mean, Canada, hibernating waiting for Spring to arrive, I can relate to your problem..powerful poetry... and thank you for your comment on my poem.. Journey to Soul, Constance

Brian Strand

Date: 3/6/2009 11:43:00 PM

Like the kyrielle flavour Colin & especially this imagery 'A human skin balloon/I slowly deflate .Rgds Brian & thanks for your kind words

Denis Joe

Date: 3/6/2009 1:24:00 PM

This is great in the way that the poem draws the reader into a world. I love the way that the lines are drawn out in order to reflect a sort of slowness (dawning?) and also how the poem should be read aloud. A wonderful, tight piece.

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 3/6/2009 3:17:00 AM

Goodnight, poet. :) sleep tight. LOVE that 4th stanza. :) Love, Kristin

Laurie Ginn

Date: 3/5/2009 4:42:00 PM

Okay very visual person here. Once you started about the hole in the foot my imagination went wild....infection,,how big,,,pus, couldn't get past it. Even after listening to Christie crack up on the phone for 10 minutes reading it over and over. And who knows, you're in Spain for gosh sakes, do you have insurance

Sharon Winter

Date: 3/5/2009 4:27:00 PM

That's because all your energy is going into your writing. And still, energy-less you manage to come up with brilliant lines. And love how you manage to realize that in the midst of your writing! ~lol~ Night night sleep tight great write. Love, Shar

Monique Davis

Date: 3/5/2009 2:56:00 PM

"I can't rally my thoughts or make a break for a coffee cup"...I feel that way every morning. LOL. What a way to grab the reader. Really cute. - Monique

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/5/2009 12:54:00 PM

Polishing pointless inconsequent causalities....Yeah...that's a pretty good line...I might have to steal it and tuck it into one of my own poems!! You did pretty good for a guy that's half asleep !!:)!!!!!!