Time

TIME measures du ~ ra ~ tion smooth, continuous journeying; unfettered, abstract . . and . . invisible “both memories and dreams it holds” -------------------------------------------- Author: Paul Callus ~ 5th June, 2014 Contest: Create Your Own Pyramid Placing: 5th Sponsor: nette onclaud

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Reason A. Poteet

Date: 6/19/2014 10:30:00 PM

How like the hourglass is time...one moment at a time like the sand. Memories on the bottom; dreams on the top. Congratulations, Paul. I like this one especially.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/20/2014 2:09:00 PM

Thank you for the thoughtful comments...and the wishes! Glad you enjoyed! // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/18/2014 3:47:00 PM

Dear Paul, Congratulations on your win! I can't seem to find a recent poem of yours that I haven't read. That's probably because you are one of my favorite writers here. There is a Simon and Garfunkle song with lyrics: "Time it was and what a time it was, it was. Preserve your memories. They're all that's left you." I have always found their songs to be very poetic. Jason Mraz is like that too, but not many others. Love, Carolyn (Nice to see you active on Whispers!)

Paul Callus
Date: 6/19/2014 1:08:00 PM

Dear Carolyn, thank you for your faithful and 'loyal' comments:) I too try and follow your writings as much as time allows me to! At the moment I am up to my neck in work (proof-reading, song writing, social work, etc) so even my poetry writing is suffering! Still do my best to cope with everything.Not enough hrs in a day! Simon and Garfunkle will always be among my favs. Hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/16/2014 3:38:00 PM

cryptic yet the words about time flow in unison, paul.. belated congrats on your fine win in my challenge.. huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 6/16/2014 3:57:00 PM

Hi Nette! Thank you for the wishes and informative comments....and most of all for giving me the chance to take part in your contest! hugs // paul

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 6/15/2014 3:43:00 AM

Nice win Paul. Verlena

Paul Callus
Date: 6/15/2014 4:00:00 PM

Thank you for the wishes, Verlena! // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/14/2014 8:23:00 AM

I like the thoughts you put into this one.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/14/2014 3:13:00 PM

Thank you Richard; txs for stopping by. // paul

Len Gasun

Date: 6/13/2014 11:11:00 AM

Wow! This is also an excellent and brilliant write my dear friend Paul. I love it so much especially the great thought at the end. My hearty congratulations and cheers! Thank you so much as well for your precious time stopping by on my poems and your inspiring comments. More blessings! love lots and hugs, Leonora

Paul Callus
Date: 6/13/2014 12:33:00 PM

It is my pleasure, Leonora, to read your poems and comment on them:) Thank you for stopping by with beautiful comments....very encouraging! hugs /x/ paul

Frederic Parker

Date: 6/12/2014 2:46:00 PM

congratulations Paul on your win, it does hold memories and dreams and so much more

Paul Callus
Date: 6/12/2014 4:25:00 PM

Thank you Frederic! Yes, it does hold all that, including many surprises too! cu // paul

Frederic Parker

Date: 6/12/2014 2:46:00 PM

congratulations Paul on your win, it does hold memories and dreams and so much more

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 6/12/2014 11:49:00 AM

Hi Paul, congratulations on another well-deserved win! Excellent write!

Paul Callus
Date: 6/12/2014 12:51:00 PM

Many thanks Pandita! I love your comments...and your visit :) // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/12/2014 12:16:00 AM

another amazing last line. My favorite part of these kinds of poems. Congratulations. Your whole poem rocks!

Paul Callus
Date: 6/12/2014 11:23:00 AM

Thank you Andrea for coming back with wishes and lovely fresh comments! I do appreciate :) // paul

Skat A

Date: 6/11/2014 11:16:00 PM

Paul, :) CONGRATS in Nette's CREATE YOUR PYRAMID contest! Luv ~SKAT~

Paul Callus
Date: 6/12/2014 11:41:00 AM

Hi Skat! Always looking forward to your visits! Thank you :) // paul

Ana Espinola Collins

Date: 6/11/2014 5:44:00 PM

WOW! I just absolutely love this poem....Beautifully written and presented... And so very true! Wonderful write Paul :) Ana

Paul Callus
Date: 6/12/2014 11:38:00 AM

You flatter me Ana! Thank you so very much! With comments like these you are welcome on here anytime:) // paul

Carrie Richards

Date: 6/11/2014 3:33:00 PM

I truly love this one.......it would be high on my personal list !! Extremely well done!!

Paul Callus
Date: 6/11/2014 4:04:00 PM

Many thanks to you, Carrie! I am so glad it tickled your fancy! lovely comments:) /x/ paul

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/11/2014 3:24:00 PM

My personal fav. Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Paul Callus
Date: 6/11/2014 4:00:00 PM

Wow! thank you Debbie! Glad you found it to your liking; that's encouraging feedback:) Take care. // paul

Faye Gibson

Date: 6/11/2014 2:37:00 PM

Very good, Paul. One of my favs in the contest. Congratulations!

Paul Callus
Date: 6/11/2014 3:11:00 PM

Thank you Faye; I found that many of the entries were of a high standard, yours included. hugs / paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/11/2014 9:54:00 AM

Paul, breathtaking. Congratulations, with your sweet PYRAMID win.... Hugs ~LINDA~

Paul Callus
Date: 6/11/2014 10:40:00 AM

Thank you Linda! You take my breath away :) hugs // paul

M. L. Kiser

Date: 6/11/2014 8:49:00 AM

A well written image of time.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/11/2014 9:16:00 AM

Thank you M.L. for stopping by and appreciating. cu // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 6/10/2014 11:23:00 PM

Great write Paul ! Absolutely defined time ,,, congrats on a wonderful win // Upma //

Paul Callus
Date: 6/11/2014 6:26:00 AM

Thank you Upma! Glad you like it, and I appreciate your stopping by and commenting. // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/10/2014 3:21:00 PM

Dear Paul, Time is all the things you describe in your perfect pyramid, Paul. I especially enjoy the last line which carries a powerful message. When we waste time, we don't receive the blessings of "memories and dreams." Wishing you success in the contest! Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 6/10/2014 3:47:00 PM

You are right, Carolyn; when we grow old it would be awful were we to find that we wasted our time and we have nothing to show for it. I have loads of memories, and still can afford to dream!! Thank you for the lovely comments. Hugs......paul

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 6/10/2014 10:28:00 AM

Aha u did a splendid job with the pyramid scheme structure with yor word crafting. Yeah time's like that. So nice to read another of yor poem.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/10/2014 1:36:00 PM

Many thanks, especially for the lovely comments! [have just read your witchdoctor...fascinating write!] // paul

Shirley Gribble

Date: 6/10/2014 4:41:00 AM

How clever! I love the flow of the poem, best wishes for the contest. Shirley x

Paul Callus
Date: 6/10/2014 7:54:00 AM

Thank you Shirley, both for the lovely comments and wishes. You're a lassie who writes with style:) /x/ paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/9/2014 10:54:00 AM

Oh this is so good Paul,,yes time is everything you describe here,,,and i love time, because it is one of things on this planet we cannot control, not even by measuring it,,,,your poem, rides the waves the waves of time,,again just love this...

Paul Callus
Date: 6/9/2014 2:55:00 PM

Many thanks Harry! I am so glad you found this poem to your liking. Your comments are a source of encouragement! much appreciated. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/8/2014 1:32:00 PM

- Paul, time is life .... Good luck in the contest! - Thank you for your faithful reader of my poems - (Have not had time to "soup" this past week. - Have a nice Sunday :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 6/8/2014 2:59:00 PM

Hi Anne Lise! Lovely to have you stopping by. Soup is TIME consuming and sometimes we do need a break to see to other things. Had a lovely Sunday...took it easy:) Hope yours was good, too. cu /x/ paul

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/8/2014 9:47:00 AM

Paul , a truly fine write and fine pyramid! Both the message and smoothness are clearly evident!! Just this morning I wrote a new write on the subject of- Time - and now I see your fine write on that same topic. My write was inspired by a write on death I read this morning by Freddie... Your offering is superb... BBBRAVOOO!!!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 6/8/2014 3:22:00 PM

Hi Robert! thanks for the visit and lovely, positive comments. I read your latest poem and learnt more about you. Take care my friend. // paul

Sam Raj

Date: 6/8/2014 9:41:00 AM

Nicely done, shape poem. Very meaningful. Wishing you well. I should also try one. Keep writing and in touch.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/8/2014 3:19:00 PM

Thank you Sam. Yes, it is an interesting form, somewhat tricky at first, but a satisfying try. cu // paul