Jan Allison Poet Monorhyme

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Till Death Do Us Part

You had finally agreed to be my bride,
pale rose pink lipstick had been applied.
You looked so radiant, I beamed with pride,
as we joined hands I sat at your bedside.
When we exchanged rings both of us cried,
was a bitter sweet moment, it can’t be denied.
An hour after our marriage had been certified,
my tears cascaded, sadly my wife just died


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1/9/20

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William Kelii Kekaula January 15, 2020 at 3:03 PM Thanks for this sad heartfelt poem Jan and your participation, and my compliments on your 1st place win~@wk

Jennifer Proxenos January 12, 2020 at 12:27 AM A sad but brilliant write. You have captured every moment of these bitter/sweet moments, well penned and good luck in the contest Jan. Blessings, Jennifer.

Connie Marcum Wong January 11, 2020 at 10:56 PM I knew someone this happened to. She was a dear friend and neighbor and only 19 years old. So sad for everyone but she died very happy. Your poem is moving and beautiful Jan. I think William will like it a lot, I know I do. xxoo

Gordon Mcconnell January 11, 2020 at 10:07 AM Lovely but sad piece Jan, Hope you're having a lovely weekend!

Besma Riabi Dziri January 11, 2020 at 2:26 AM "bitter sweet moments"! The joys of Life.. the bites of fate! That's our destiny.. the wisdom and harmony of life dualities.. the core of our existence! You have just thrilled and surprised your reader as life and fate do! So sweet and heartfelt a work of fine poetry and an immense pleasure to read! My best regards and blessings, Jan.

Sandra Adams January 10, 2020 at 5:05 AM Wow. This is as beautiful as it is sad ...well penned Jan ... best wishes in the contest :). Hugs

Panagiota Romios January 9, 2020 at 6:25 PM You will be a winner in this one, Jan I love it. A FAV! Panagiota

Gershon Wolf January 9, 2020 at 5:15 PM What was that man's ring made of anyway?! Perhaps it was a 'ring of fire.' (Johnny Cash song, 1960's). Smiles, Gershon

Christopher Flaherty January 9, 2020 at 4:11 PM Awesome Jan A great work already so early in 2020.

Rico Leffanta January 9, 2020 at 1:16 PM Not so sad! Think of all the spats they missed by not discovering the other did not meet their expectations! ("Everything happens for the best!") Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico

Carolyn Devonshire January 9, 2020 at 11:30 AM How sad, Jan. A couple starts out on a new life together and it's cut short. Very beautiful monorhyme, my friend. Winning wishes coming your way! Hugs, Carolyn

Kim Rodrigues January 9, 2020 at 8:27 AM Wow! Bittersweet and nicely done!

Tom Cunningham January 9, 2020 at 7:55 AM A sad verse Jan, but you're right to point out that life is not all sunshine and roses. Good luck. Tom. Re, your comment to Lin, count me in.

Caren Krutsinger January 9, 2020 at 7:51 AM You have proved there is beauty in sadness, Jan

Lin Lane January 9, 2020 at 7:10 AM What an awful circumstance, but your expressions are so tenderly written that it's only the beauty of the moment that I read. Nicely done, Jan. Lin Lane January 9, 2020 at 7:44 AM I'm always up for a limmie collaboration. Let's do it! Jan Allison January 9, 2020 at 7:16 AM Thanks for your lovely comment and advice too Lin, I find writing sad much easier than romance which you write so well, Need to start a limerick collaboration to lighten the mood a little, are you up for it?:-) hugs jan xx