Thunderstorm

Smiling sun scarpered, sad stormy sky,
from east to west a veil of charcoal grey,
we watched as flocks of nervous birds flew by,
bird feeders idle, clients stayed away.
The cat, now bored with toys, and time to kill,
ears twitching, on alert surveyed the gloom
and turned to climb down from the windowsill
when heaven sparked, and lightning bleached the room.
Fur stood on end, eyes lit up like twin suns,
unsure what she had seen or what to do,
a second flash clinched it- to cut and run,
split-second silhouette shot out of view.
The predator had now become the prey,
creature and elemental paths had crossed,
for one who thought she had things all her way
now shown by angry sky who is the boss.
Like skipping ropes above the distant trees
the lightning danced, then began to fade
wet leaves all now consoled by gentle breeze
and rooftops washed in ever lighter shades.
She sauntered out like nothing had occurred,
sat on the sill and thought “Now, where's those birds?”

For contest 'Describe a Thunder storm without sense of sound', sponsor Brenda Chiri
25th February 2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Marcum Wong Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 4:20 AM
I loved your sweet entry Viv, being a cat lover. Your poem really made me miss my cat. You managed giving exactly what was asked of you with your clever entry! I am so happy to see this on the winner's list. Congratulations! : )
Brewer Avatar
March 4, 2018 at 9:58 AM
Vivid descriptive words combined with form and rhyme, then added humour, make this a fine poem worthy of first place in this contest; particularly since it observes the requirements of ‘no sounds’, that others here have violated. Well done ,Viv.
Roper Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 10:14 PM
Congratulations on your win..nicely done, wonderful imagery made me feel every line...
Richards Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 7:42 PM
I loved the line" like skipping ropes above the distant trees"...! Wow, that is a good line, I wish I'd thought of it !!! Congrats on your wonderful poem !!
Haight Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 7:12 PM
Wonderful imagery of a thunderstorm without the sense of sound, Viv! The cat's actions really intensified the power of the storm. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest! Sandra
Tripp Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 6:41 PM
Congrats, Viv!
Gauthier Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 6:23 PM
Love your poem. Well done, Viv, Congrats.
Terry Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 10:55 PM
Wow. I really felt that storm pass over. I could even smell the wet leaves and see the flashes. Wonderful descriptions. Enjoyed the narrative, as well. A winner with me.
Wigley Avatar
February 28, 2018 at 1:48 AM
Thanks, Janece, tricky to think of something different, but I may have pulled it off. Viv x
Macfarlane Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 5:28 PM
A wonderful descriptive write Viv. Enoyed it . Hugs
Wigley Avatar
February 28, 2018 at 1:48 AM
Thanks, Cecilia, appreciate your visit x
Dietrich Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 5:43 PM
You did really well with this one, Viv. The description is fantastic! I kept looking for the two mentions of the word "lightening" Aren't those to be included in the poem? Other than that, this is a huge winner for me!!
Wigley Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 9:52 PM
Thanks, Andrea, good point, I shall amend. Viv x
Lawless Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 9:12 AM
OK, as seen through the eyes of the cat...well done Viv. Wonderfully written with a bit of humor....
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 8:17 AM
Love this original take Viv! Mile wide smile :) my best to you in the contest! xomo
Andresen Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 7:56 AM
- A wonderful poetic picture of thunderstorms, Viv - The natural forces decide, nothing we can do ... but we can feel fear - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Mbalamana  Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 3:17 AM
Thank you so much It’s people like you that keep me moving forward I read your comments thanks And you are an amazing writer
Mbalamana  Avatar
February 25, 2018 at 3:17 AM
Thank you so much It’s people like you that keep me moving forward I read your comments thanks And you are an amazing writer
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace