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Smiling sun scarpered, sad stormy sky, from east to west a veil of charcoal grey, we watched as flocks of nervous birds flew by, bird feeders idle, clients stayed away. The cat, now bored with toys, and time to kill, ears twitching, on alert surveyed the gloom and turned to climb down from the windowsill when heaven sparked, and lightning bleached the room. Fur stood on end, eyes lit up like twin suns, unsure what she had seen or what to do, a second flash clinched it- to cut and run, split-second silhouette shot out of view. The predator had now become the prey, creature and elemental paths had crossed, for one who thought she had things all her way now shown by angry sky who is the boss. Like skipping ropes above the distant trees the lightning danced, then began to fade wet leaves all now consoled by gentle breeze and rooftops washed in ever lighter shades. She sauntered out like nothing had occurred, sat on the sill and thought “Now, where's those birds?” For contest 'Describe a Thunder storm without sense of sound', sponsor Brenda Chiri 25th February 2018

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Date: 3/5/2018 4:20:00 AM
I loved your sweet entry Viv, being a cat lover. Your poem really made me miss my cat. You managed giving exactly what was asked of you with your clever entry! I am so happy to see this on the winner's list. Congratulations! : )
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Date: 3/4/2018 9:58:00 AM
Vivid descriptive words combined with form and rhyme, then added humour, make this a fine poem worthy of first place in this contest; particularly since it observes the requirements of ‘no sounds’, that others here have violated. Well done ,Viv.
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Date: 3/3/2018 10:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..nicely done, wonderful imagery made me feel every line...
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Date: 3/3/2018 7:42:00 PM
I loved the line" like skipping ropes above the distant trees"...! Wow, that is a good line, I wish I'd thought of it !!! Congrats on your wonderful poem !!
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Date: 3/3/2018 7:12:00 PM
Wonderful imagery of a thunderstorm without the sense of sound, Viv! The cat's actions really intensified the power of the storm. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest! Sandra
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Date: 3/3/2018 6:41:00 PM
Congrats, Viv!
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Date: 3/3/2018 6:23:00 PM
Love your poem. Well done, Viv, Congrats.
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Date: 2/27/2018 10:55:00 PM
Wow. I really felt that storm pass over. I could even smell the wet leaves and see the flashes. Wonderful descriptions. Enjoyed the narrative, as well. A winner with me.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 2/28/2018 1:48:00 AM
Thanks, Janece, tricky to think of something different, but I may have pulled it off. Viv x
Date: 2/27/2018 5:28:00 PM
A wonderful descriptive write Viv. Enoyed it . Hugs
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Date: 2/28/2018 1:48:00 AM
Thanks, Cecilia, appreciate your visit x
Date: 2/25/2018 5:43:00 PM
You did really well with this one, Viv. The description is fantastic! I kept looking for the two mentions of the word "lightening" Aren't those to be included in the poem? Other than that, this is a huge winner for me!!
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Date: 2/25/2018 9:52:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea, good point, I shall amend. Viv x
Date: 2/25/2018 9:12:00 AM
OK, as seen through the eyes of the cat...well done Viv. Wonderfully written with a bit of humor....
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Date: 2/25/2018 8:17:00 AM
Love this original take Viv! Mile wide smile :) my best to you in the contest! xomo
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Date: 2/25/2018 7:56:00 AM
- A wonderful poetic picture of thunderstorms, Viv - The natural forces decide, nothing we can do ... but we can feel fear - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/25/2018 3:17:00 AM
Thank you so much It’s people like you that keep me moving forward I read your comments thanks And you are an amazing writer
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Date: 2/25/2018 3:17:00 AM
Thank you so much It’s people like you that keep me moving forward I read your comments thanks And you are an amazing writer
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