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Through the Mist

I grope through forest misted by my pain Unearthly feel of gloom enshrouding me Like wispy ghosts the memories a bane Their hazy fingers keep from breaking free Beclouded are my thoughts with foggy stain Obscured is reason; gone is sanity Unclear my way, for mist is laden thick Your insubstantial love has left me sick Eileen Manassian For Nette’s Through the Mist Contest August 24, 2014

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/24/2014 6:33:00 PM

So much despair in that mist laden forest! I hope you don't stay there too long. I did enjoy the allegorical theme to this... obscured is reason; gone is sanity... sounds like the dying words of Edgar Allan Poe!

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 10/24/2014 12:55:00 AM

"The moon smiles" and "Through the Mist" I have kept them in my favourite list for occasional reading. The latter poem TTM is soo good. It's always a pleasure for ever to read such a poem. By the way, 'moon' and 'mist ' are my favourite words. Bless...))) rajat

Charles Reese

Date: 9/3/2014 8:43:00 AM

All I can say is WOW! I entered this contest too but you've done so much better in my opinion.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/3/2014 8:52:00 AM

Thanks, Charles. I'm glad you liked this piece. Very lovely comment. I didn't read your piece. I'll be there for a visit soon.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/31/2014 11:14:00 PM

bitterly wonderful in its presentation and emotional appeal, eileen.. thank you for gracing my contest and congrats!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/3/2014 8:51:00 AM

Thanks for your visit, Nette. It was an interesting contest to write for. Hugs

James Fraser

Date: 8/25/2014 2:48:00 PM

Ouch! I'm glad I'm not the guy who's allowed such words to flare. There's certainly no mists in the reading for I could see clearly what this terrific piece was telling me. Good luck in the contest Eileen - James.....

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 3:24:00 PM

Hi James. Good to meet you. I read with interest your comments on the COMMENT blog! Found it interesting. Glad you are here to visit my work. Thanks for wishing me luck. This is a tough one, and I don't have much hope of getting anywhere, but....hope I'm wrong! :)

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 8/25/2014 12:10:00 PM

Eileen....love this misty metaphor . Will place well in Nette's contest,love,s SuZ

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 3:25:00 PM

Thanks for the visit, SuZ...Here's hoping! ;) Hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/25/2014 8:35:00 AM

Pain is inevitable for all of us. How we process that pain will determine the level of misery we experience.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 8:37:00 AM

Spoken truly. Thank you for this wisdom.

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 8/25/2014 6:18:00 AM

Excellent. Lovely write. enjoyed reading it. Tfs

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 8:37:00 AM

Thanks, Ravi. I'm glad to have this visit from you.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/25/2014 5:52:00 AM

Way to go with this one for the contest..Mysterious overtones draws one in and keeps them reading..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 8/25/2014 3:33:00 AM

As a poem it is fantastic: powerful and majestic! The pain that expresses though is, almost, unbearable! Your heart deserves better! Wonderfully done! a seven!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 4:27:00 AM

Thank you, my dear, for considering me deserving. Sweet of you, and thanks for the seven.

Justin Bordner

Date: 8/25/2014 1:09:00 AM

Love insubstantial makes a heart so fragile, the medicine you need shall make you bleed, the love will come true with speed. Sometimes the love we need does recede only to return happily Eileen. Your sorrow and confusion appear so clear in this poem of sharp feeling Eileen. Your voice remains so beautiful. J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 4:30:00 AM

Thanks ever so much, Justin. What can I say about love? It is capricious and at times fickle. Or perhaps that is infatuation and lust. Love is sometimes not a feeling, but a decision to see things through. That is what is termed sacrificial love. Few have it for it is divinely granted when asked for. I appreciate your visits...as always!

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 8/24/2014 7:32:00 PM

"Beclouded are my thoughts with foggy stain" Such an intriguing and original line. I much like this verse you wrote. I can feel the sickness, the pain and the overwhelming gloom enshrouding in a dark blanket of mist. Awesome work. Always, Laura

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 4:32:00 AM

I'm glad you picked out a line that resonates with you, Laura. I actually an enthralled by mist and fog. I attended a wedding up in the mountains this summer and the mist and fog gave it this fairytale touch. For the contest, I chose to go with dark. Thanks for your insights. I appreciate it!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/24/2014 4:57:00 PM

con't- poem,Well deserved sweety.Now,re this poem,it transmits a deep sentiment .a deep feeling of pain,to be misted by that pain..and how I wish that mist of pain transmits into a glistening dew of joy.A powerful take on Eileen,I think Nette is going to love it dear,Charma

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 4:33:00 AM

:) Joy comes with visits of those whom I love. :) Thanks, my sweet. There are some awfully great entries for this contest. I'm not too hopeful. We shall see. The phone thing can be SO frustrating. I know exactly what you mean. Hope it gets fixed soon! Hugs

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 8/24/2014 4:53:00 PM

Hi sweetie..I'm leaving my comment from laptop,cause I can't seem to view the site in the same way it used to be,I emailed tps who said nothing was changed ,so Im thinking Christina pressed something on my phone,Till I get it fixed,I ll use laptop which is somehow less comfy for me to use in the dark whilst everyone is asleep,that s the reason for lack of comment yesterday,but here I am ,I read your thanks re a sonnet written for you and re having the poem of the day,I loved that mistress moon

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 8/24/2014 11:32:00 AM

really good. an intelligent take on the topic. good luck with this contest.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 4:34:00 AM

Thanks, Maurice. Intelligent is nice. Love that adjective! :)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/24/2014 11:09:00 AM

Oh that's a brilliant take on this theme Eileen! Real creative pen u hv!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 4:34:00 AM

Thanks, my sweet caring Dr Upma. You are as sweet as honey!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/24/2014 8:14:00 AM

This is a very effective metophor for pain. There have been times when my emotions have left me feeling like I am wading through deep water and I am unable to swim. The other thing that came to mind was becoming an emotional anorexic due to an insubstantial love.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 4:36:00 AM

I hope you never face pain, Richard. You don't deserve it. I wish you sunny days and calm waters, my dear. Hugs

Jan Allison

Date: 8/24/2014 7:54:00 AM

oh I love the take on the theme Eileen:-) Good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian
Date: 8/25/2014 4:26:00 AM

Thanks, Hon. Glad you dropped by. Hugs to ya!