Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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Through the Keyhole

Peeking through the hotel keyhole
I start seething, I begin to see red
There’s a strange man taking MY role
I can see them both romping in bed

I decide I must act really speedily
Don’t have a moment to spare
Activating my plastic room key
I see his white bottom, it’s bare!

Aiming my gun, I shoot both in the head
Blood stains the rug, it splatters the wall
It ends their affair, that love rat is dead ...
I’ll plead guilty when the local cops call

The gunshots draw lawmen to the door
Cops soon arrest me, they take me outside
My wife’s out there, she’d been at the store -
She’d let our room to a groom and his bride!

SLAP THE MUSE AND TURN IT LOOSE CONTEST Judged 2/13/19 - poem got n/a

12/31/18

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John Hamilton June 27, 2019 at 9:17 AM Well done Jan, congrats on a fine win!

Old Buck January 3, 2019 at 2:01 PM Jan: Well done. My kind of writing at it's best. Thanks for sharing with all of us on the soup. oldbuck Jan Allison January 3, 2019 at 2:14 PM Hi Old Buck, long time no see hope you are well and had a wonderful time over the festive period:-) very best wishes for 2019:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong January 3, 2019 at 1:21 AM This is awesome Jan! ....now I rarely ever use that word it has become so common but I mean it in the highest complimentary way! I know this one just has to impress! I loved it, and I disagree, you can write in any form, and well! : ) xxoo PS thanks to Arthur I didn't miss this gem! Jan Allison January 3, 2019 at 3:20 AM Thanks Connie and Art too:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich January 1, 2019 at 6:20 PM oh wow, a huge twist at the end. Very very clever. Just had to see what you would do with this one. I hope I can come off with such a clever one! Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 6:24 PM Thanks Andrea there is a little more to me than just a humourist but I much prefer writing humour to any other style whereas you excel in whatever form you choose:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith January 1, 2019 at 5:13 PM Oops lol Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 5:14 PM ha ha ha thanks Tim:-) i can write a serious non poopy poem from time to time lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud January 1, 2019 at 9:52 AM what a thriller , jan...alfred hitchcock would love this; i do!... talk soon!...huggs and happy new year! Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 1:30 PM Thanks Nette, hope you had a great Christmas and have a happy New year:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel January 1, 2019 at 7:16 AM Wow, that was a really good twist, Jan:) have a wonderful and a blessed New Year:) Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 9:50 AM Thanks so much Jo, sending my best wishes for 2019:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May January 1, 2019 at 6:56 AM The twist at the end of wedded bliss..A dark tale Jan...Happy New Year! Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 7:08 AM Thanks Joseph:-) Happy New year to you and your loved ones:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso January 1, 2019 at 12:20 AM and yes you knew I would love this one!! Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 2:20 AM lol Art:-) Guess I'm a little twisted with that ending lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso January 1, 2019 at 12:20 AM Your killing me girl, I mean your killing me stop!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LOL loved this! Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 2:21 AM lol Art, I hope John likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose December 31, 2018 at 8:15 PM Your killing me girl, Happy New Year. xo Jan Allison January 1, 2019 at 2:19 AM thanks Pixie, happy new year:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham December 31, 2018 at 3:15 PM Ahh well at least they died happy, way to go.Brilliant Jan. Tom Jan Allison December 31, 2018 at 3:25 PM lol Tom that's one way of looking at it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta December 31, 2018 at 2:00 PM It is better when you slay them with flatulence . . . .but good luck with this gruesome scene!~ Aloha! Rico Jan Allison December 31, 2018 at 2:12 PM lol someone might have got wind of the situation lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger December 31, 2018 at 10:43 AM Oh, my gosh, I cannot stop picturing his white bottom in the air! Hilarious my friend! I think this one is straight to the number one spot. Jan Allison December 31, 2018 at 12:35 PM lol Caren I had such fun writing the poem, a little humour but also darkness and a twist at the end too lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman December 31, 2018 at 10:29 AM Oh, typical you, Jan...you had me there, really into this wonderful dark story..then wham.... love your poetry...Happy New Year.. Jan Allison December 31, 2018 at 12:30 PM Thanks for the lovely comment and your continued support Harry:-) I worked out the ending first and worked the poem around it lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. December 31, 2018 at 10:22 AM WoW! Jan, You let your muse loose to write this piece. I enjoyed the drama, suspense and build up. It was like I watching a good movie or reading a good book. Was not expecting that twist at end. I think you've penned yourself a winner. I wish you the best of luck in the contest-Alexis Jan Allison December 31, 2018 at 12:29 PM Thanks Alexis I thought of the ending first and wove the poem around it lol:-) hugs Jan xx