Through the Alley

my senses alarm heightened morbid awareness shortcut to my home written March 2, 2022

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/3/2022 8:52:00 AM

"morbid awareness"- I adore this term!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/3/2022 9:31:00 AM

I think "dread" might have worked, but I needed syllables!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/2/2022 8:42:00 PM

yes, certain alleys do indeed bring that kind of feeling!!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/2/2022 9:56:00 PM

I try to avoid them like the plague!

I Am Anaya

Date: 3/2/2022 2:26:00 PM

Just watch out for the man with the straw hat you know the trespasser--I've been having so much trouble with Villanelle's. I'm with Jeff, I too learn every single day. Thank you for your visit, Milton...I Am Anaya

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/2/2022 7:24:00 PM

Aw, thanks so much, I Am Anaya. Every time I see your name, I think it should be a palindrome or an anagram. It is quite unique. I, too, learn every single day. I don't think anyone ever completely arrives!

Jeff Kyser

Date: 3/2/2022 1:21:00 PM

I learn something every day here at the soup. I did not know what the difference between a haiku and a Senryu was. This one certainly fits that definition better, and a bunch of what I have posted as haiku are more likely categorized better as these. Thanks for the didactic Senryu!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/2/2022 1:45:00 PM

You are very welcome, Jeff. Haiku are always about nature, while Senryu are about human feelings, emotions, etc. Both follow the 5-7-5 syllable pattern. Tanka is about both and add two 7-syllable lines, so you have 5-7-5-7-7. They can be tricky.