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This Lighthouse Is Blind

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A lighthouse essential unattended Seems only yesterday unaffected Stood crucial organized significant Now unkept completely inefficient. Vines climbing assuming occupation by onslaught internal saturation A beacon important enlightening Blind wanting forever agonizing. Maurice Yvonne 09/21/2014 Contest: The Lighthouse Sponsor: nette onclaud

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Reason A. Poteet

Date: 9/30/2014 11:51:00 AM

Nice, Maurice, you have turned the fascination with lighthouses inward to balance their beauty which outlives their use. Great personification of the lighthouse as blind, agonizing. Well-done on the form and the rhyme to boot. Congratulations.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/28/2014 4:13:00 PM

well, I checked the winners' list to see if you made it. BIG congratulations. Glad to see that she liked your poem. You were very smart to figure it out. This form was not up my alley and I already have lighthouse poems. Could not fathom what else to say about a lighthouse. Jan did a really cool one!! As did you, my friend.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/28/2014 4:44:00 PM

No, I didn't crack it, Seren had a beautiful flow to hers, Craig had a really good one and I really liked Jan's. Poetry is subjective.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/28/2014 2:32:00 PM

So happy to see this here Maurice, I knew it was a great poem.

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/28/2014 6:55:00 PM

Dido Maurice.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/28/2014 4:46:00 PM

You are so kind Brenda, I love your poems and I love your kind heart.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/28/2014 6:37:00 AM

dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/28/2014 6:27:00 AM

You have nicely interpreted the theme of the contest, Maurice. congrats

Tim Smith

Date: 9/28/2014 6:27:00 AM

Congrats little man....a fine fine win

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/24/2014 2:00:00 AM

It is sad to see those lonely lighthouses being ignored and uncared for. Their lights no longer shining with warmth and safety.... I loved your description of the scene. I felt like I was there.... A wonderful poem, Maurice! I wish you the best of luck in Nette's contest, as well!

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/26/2014 4:07:00 PM

Kelly your comments are always thoughtful, thank you.

M. L. Kiser

Date: 9/23/2014 11:34:00 PM

Good luck with the contest; I can see this lighthouse, with all of its vines and age.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/26/2014 4:08:00 PM

thank you for your well wishes and your encouraging remarks.

Seren Roberts

Date: 9/23/2014 10:29:00 PM

Maurice this is brilliant, such a good poet aren't you. No scribble out good and enter outstanding .....Seren

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/23/2014 10:38:00 PM

You are such a sweet person. Thank You.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/23/2014 7:07:00 PM

Brilliant Maurice, taking on the challenge and also rhyming it.Great work.

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/24/2014 1:46:00 PM

Thank you for advertising for me;-).

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/23/2014 7:39:00 PM

Thank you, I really like yours.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/22/2014 11:57:00 PM

Referring to what you said below. I always just say near rhyme. I've heard some say slant rhyme but don't really know if there is a difference between the two. IN reply to your question on the saddest Day, yes, it is true. I had to give up my Ollyver. somewhere in my first poems is the story of when I think he came back to see me on his way to heaven!! well, I sure hope it was true . I had the most vivid dream that he must have died that night and visited me on his way out!!

Brenda Meier-Hans
Date: 9/23/2014 7:05:00 PM

No we don't have to and I thought it would be almost impossible. Now seeing this I am amazed because it was hard enough without rhyme.

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/23/2014 12:10:00 AM

I am sorry Andrea. Thank you for taking the time to answer my questions.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/22/2014 7:47:00 PM

Pretty cool interpretation for the contest. You go guy! Light & Love

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/22/2014 8:00:00 PM

Thank you Debbie, do you feel like fixing it somewhat?

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/22/2014 7:26:00 PM

Maurice, wow.... You sure went there.... I like the vines, taking over, LOOK.....LINDA

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/22/2014 7:36:00 PM

Thank you Linda.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/22/2014 7:05:00 PM

gosh, do we have to rhyme every single line this way?? I don't know if I can even do one like this!!! I may have missed this contest completely too. DANG!!

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/22/2014 7:25:00 PM

No you don't have to rhyme. That's a choice. On this one the rhyme sort of just fell in place. Also line 3 and 4 are only a near rhyme. I know there is a term for that but the word escapes me at the moment.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/22/2014 4:14:00 AM

Well penned Maurice! It's blind I can feel! Gl in contest!

Jan Allison

Date: 9/22/2014 1:05:00 AM

very well done Maurice - you nailed it:-) Good luck in the contest. Hugs Jan xxx I've amended mine as I'd only done up to 3 syllables not the required 4

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/22/2014 12:06:00 PM

I will have to take a look.

Matthew Anish

Date: 9/21/2014 10:09:00 PM

Interesting metaphor here! Good luck in the contest. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Maurice Yvonne
Date: 9/22/2014 12:05:00 PM

Thank you for your visit and well wishes. It is appreciated.