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This Is Mortality

The dreadful day is coming. It is fate. No one can escape it or will ever! For some it may come soon, for others - late. The body from the soul death shall sever. Gold moments; shattered dreams. Chasing after moonbeams! How fragile it all seems. We laugh; we cry. Eyes to the sky, we whisper "why?" This is mortality; it is our state. Hoping our souls will go on forever, we flow to one sea - billions of blue streams - before we die. June 8, 2018 for Broken Wings' The Puzzle Of My Rhyme - Poetry Contest Theme chosen: This is Mortality

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Susan Gentry

Date: 6/25/2018 6:06:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this profound poem on mortality. Well done! Your imagery is taken right from our thoughts.

Constance La France

Date: 6/24/2018 7:01:00 AM

Andrea, congratulations on your win in my contest with this impressive write, well done ~

Line Gauthier

Date: 6/23/2018 2:18:00 PM

Congrats on your top win, Andrea.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/14/2018 5:48:00 PM

A thought-provoking write, Andrea. Our mortality and faith help keep us on the right track, but many long to live forever. Best wishes in the contest! Hugs, Carolyn

Robert Johnson

Date: 6/13/2018 9:39:00 PM

We dwell within a passion's moment. No time to heed the warning sent. For soon enough we learn the lesson. Of dying's sweet dark sad lament. I thought I better come and visit after that little comment about copy cat. :)

Faraz Ajmal

Date: 6/13/2018 2:32:00 PM

So true you are while describing all this, everyone has to swallow the bitter taste of desth and every soul will return, I notice your comment on afterlife, you see talking scientifically there s a theory of post materialistic that our brain is not the creator but the reciever of consciousness, that it lives even without our brain on it own, many people who have revived from death explain a feeling of peace and a light, the real mystery will only be unock when we ll die, good luck in the contest

Pashang Salehi

Date: 6/12/2018 7:07:00 PM

Indeed, universe recycles everything... it's called the fundamental law of nature.

Marc Acrich

Date: 6/12/2018 12:44:00 PM

Death gives us inspiration

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/11/2018 6:54:00 AM

Thoughtful words... well crafted and executed message on life..best for a win, Andrea.

Joseph May

Date: 6/11/2018 5:50:00 AM

Life is fleeting and fragile..Nicely penned Andrea

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/10/2018 10:44:00 PM

I loved this but dont come over to my dark side!!!! Better where you are!!! Hugs!!!

Paul Callus

Date: 6/10/2018 3:43:00 PM

Your words mirror the thoughts of many of us, Andrea. We ride on destiny's chariot, and eventually cross the intended finishing line. Believing in an afterlife makes it all worth living for! Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/9/2018 7:42:00 PM

Your poem is beautiful in its form and in its thought provoking appeal, Andrea. A deep and meaningful write so gloriously expressed. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/9/2018 5:36:00 PM

Oh to be on mount Olympus, Andrea, i've never read anything as truthful as your poem,,,i've just come from Carolyn's poetry, and was blown away there, and then here to be blown away again..neither of you two have never lost the ability or the element of surprise, thank God you both are still here!!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/9/2018 2:28:00 PM

Very effective. I think it is our mortality that offers significance to our days. That’s why youth is wasted on the young, because they feel like they have all the time in the world. As a result it is so easy to waste their time.

Ralph Sergi

Date: 6/9/2018 11:21:00 AM

Dear Andrea: I believe in time, miracles will become normal and the future society will dictate a supernatural technology. That is why I believe in an afterlife after death

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 6/9/2018 7:02:00 PM

I believe in an afterlife too and not necessarily the one viewed in the standard way. Nothingness just makes no sense to me.

Fauxcroft Wade

Date: 6/9/2018 8:53:00 AM

Beautiful yet poignant reminder of our impermanence.

Arturo Michael

Date: 6/9/2018 4:53:00 AM

It's life...a little borrowed time on earth... will it happy sad or worse...A conscious write my friend...All the best Andrea

Frederic Parker

Date: 6/8/2018 9:43:00 PM

you were right when you replied to my poem you have been thinking about life and death lately...I think it's our age, the older we get the more people we know who are no longer here...you expressed it well in this poem...good luck in the contest

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/8/2018 8:41:00 PM

Very thought-provoking--well done, Andrea! Janice