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Their Last Dance

THEIR LAST DANCE Said the lion to the spring-bok Let’s do a turn around the veldt I won’t laugh at your figure svelte If my big hairy head you don’t mock. So they danced there in unison - Him feeling she was good enough to eat Her not want wanting to be his meat - Not stopping till day was done. At the river they were hot and run down And stopped to drink for a while. There she was snatched by a crocodile And the lion fell in and did drown.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 2/24/2011 6:11:00 AM
Congratulations Sydney on your well deserved win for your poem in Barbara Gorelick's contest "May I Have This Dance?". Love, Carol
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Date: 2/14/2011 6:29:00 PM
Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest, Sydney
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Date: 2/13/2011 8:04:00 PM
Smashing write. Many congrats for this gem.
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Date: 2/13/2011 4:34:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
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Date: 2/13/2011 12:52:00 PM
how sad , this was such an interesting piece, congrats on your win in the contest
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Date: 2/13/2011 10:59:00 AM
LOL you funny man! I know a song with a similiar outcome a FROG, a RAT & a MOUSIE [the cat & kittens eat the rat & mouse, the frog runs for it and while crossing the brook gets eaten by a DUCK!] Let me know if you want the liricks LOL congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 2/13/2011 6:36:00 AM
Congrats Sydney on your wonderful win in the Dance contest with this exciting entry .. enjoy a super win with luv..
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Date: 2/12/2011 10:18:00 PM
oh, my goodness, a DARK dance poem. HOw highly original. I love it. High rank for this one, and congratulations!
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Date: 2/12/2011 9:45:00 PM
This is a rather sad writing, but apparently Barbara liked it enough to chooose it to be among the winners in her contest. Congratulations.
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Date: 2/12/2011 9:08:00 PM
Well this one was different and just charming. Congrats on your 8th place in my contest. BG ps..my grandson loved it.
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Date: 2/5/2011 1:19:00 PM
Very humorous write!Completely different from other entries--enjoyed---kashinath
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Date: 2/5/2011 12:48:00 PM
Very enjoyable and humorous write for an unusual Last dance with great imagery particularly the metaphors you have used. Sydney
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Date: 2/5/2011 12:00:00 PM
LOL What a funny story told in verse, Sydney. You definitely got the internal rhyme form down perfectly and I think this will make Barbara laugh too. Best wishes in the contest. Love, Carolyn
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