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The Winds of Change In Chamber of the Dead

Herod put John the Baptist in prison. He was having an adulterous affair with Herodias, his brother Phillip’s wife, and John was saying, “It is not lawful for you to have her.” On Herod’s birthday, Herodias’ daughter danced for Herod, causing the beheading of John. (From Bible, Matthew 14:1-11)
THE WINDS OF CHANGE IN CHAMBER OF THE DEAD The trouble’s root, the torn meniscus court. Entertainment unashamedly crass. The grape is richly poured — white, red import. A schism scheme, girl’s hips are made of brass.* She danced so lightning fast, the strikes betwixt King Herod’s eyes. The drums, the sound of lust. A pulse needs transfusion, breath-bait transfixed. His greedy face excoriates a bust — John’s dripping tongue no further screams — its ink ‘tis wet with appreciation and dread. ** She-paws and dangly skirt — the shark, her wink — the winds of change in chamber of the dead. Fermented pheromones, a teasing breeze. A tantamount twister forced veins to freeze. 11/20/2020 Contest: WINDS OF CHANGE Sponsor: John Hamilton
Used how many syllables and Merriam-Webster Dictionary Two places where howmanysyllables.com differed: *Schism 2 syllables in dictionary **Gave this line 9 syllables but when I broke line up, it was 10

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Date: 11/30/2020 9:20:00 AM
Love the imagery Kim. Congratulations on the win! :) Linda
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/30/2020 3:27:00 PM
Thank you, Linda!
Date: 11/28/2020 10:21:00 PM
Hi Kim, Congratulations on your win:-) Alexis
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/29/2020 5:20:00 AM
Thank you, Alexis,
Date: 11/28/2020 7:47:00 PM
An interesting write Kim, I was a little surprised it was you, don't know why, enjoyed congrats on a nice win!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/29/2020 5:20:00 AM
Thank you, John! :)
Date: 11/22/2020 2:25:00 PM
There is many a good story in the bible, but coming from your creative pen, it means so much more. You definitely brought it to life, as you always do with your great verses, and thank you for stopping by, you scented my home, and my heart, love and friendship dear heart.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 11/22/2020 2:35:00 PM
Thank you so much!
Date: 11/21/2020 1:23:00 AM
Brass is one syllable. You could add "pure" or something similar. And "foul" in front of appreciation might solve things. Otherwise a lovely sonnet. ~~
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