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The Waltz of the Leaves

Elegant Goldie and handsome Leaf Red Brushed one another, thus happened to meet mid-air, where Goldie by Red then was led In one-two-three, one-two-three, one-two-three beat. Gliding and twirling, they waltzed all around, Up the hill, down the hill, over a stream. Sliding but never quite touching the ground, Like Fred with his Ginger, they danced like a dream. Goldie was glowing with sun’s going down. Red seemed like crimson against twilight sky. Rustling his suit while she whirled in her gown, They glittered while wafting first low and then high. Nature was humming the Falling Leaves song; Chill autumn breezes kept urging them on. Fluttering fluttering all the night long, With hoot owls hoo-hooing, they danced until dawn. Suddenly, all became still in day’s light. The couple was parted, for wind ceased to blow. There came drifting down something moist and white. Farewell, pretty leaves. Now is Dance of the Snow. Andrea Dietrich 10/2/11 For Francine Roberts' Nature Story Contest

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Date: 10/24/2011 11:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Francine's "A Nature Tale" contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/23/2011 3:07:00 PM
congrats on your win in the nature contest, this one is so cute, love the idea of the leaves waltzing :-)
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Date: 10/22/2011 2:27:00 PM
congrats on your win. cory
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Date: 10/22/2011 6:51:00 AM
nice personification, nice vision, nice allegory....havent been in touch for a while but always read your winning stuff...me likes.....Check my leaf personification in TOUCHED if you wish.....best regards
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Date: 10/22/2011 4:50:00 AM
You have portrayed a great picture from nature,Andrea.Congratulations on your win.With love FABIYAS
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Date: 10/22/2011 1:06:00 AM
so pretty, i wish mr leaf would dance with me-jess
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Date: 10/21/2011 11:05:00 PM
This is beautiful Andrea, especially the end. many congrats.
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Date: 10/21/2011 10:57:00 PM
congrats on your 7th place win Andrea, beautifully written , I can see them dancing
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Date: 10/8/2011 10:47:00 AM
wow Andrea this is nice how you have the leaves dancing. I like the last line now is dance of snow. It does dance too. Brilliant . love phyl
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Date: 10/7/2011 3:44:00 AM
Nicely written Andrea. Goodluck on your entry. I believe it is a winning piece. My poems are combination of reality and imagination. I hope to live in the best of both worlds! However, I know we live in an imperfect world. Thank you for following my work. Dalila
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Date: 10/6/2011 4:34:00 PM
And when winters over and ice starts to melt. We'll not soon remember how Autumn had felt. For those silent trumpets with beautiful glare. Will capture our hearts with a spring time affair.
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Date: 10/3/2011 5:49:00 PM
Wow, I just love this clever one - and the ending with the dance of the snow is just perfect
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Date: 10/3/2011 1:37:00 PM
lovely story, andie... fred and ginger make me dance.. whoot! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 10/3/2011 11:56:00 AM
this is stunningly beautiful and this rhyme scheme is terrific.. this would make a great entry for Carol's new Leaves Contest too Andrea.. good luck in Francine's .. another mesmerizing waltz of poetry ..u are a gem..of creativity my friend..luv..
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Date: 10/3/2011 11:24:00 AM
Sad about the leaves - for me, autumn is a sad time. I have trouble with the vision of bare trees. Luck in the contest. Love, daver
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Date: 10/2/2011 9:20:00 PM
'In one-two-three, one-two-three, one-two-three beat.' - That one line alone so cleverly creates the imagery and timing of those waltzing leaves. The rustling of his suit is almost tangible. Great imagery throughout. Loved it x
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Date: 10/2/2011 8:04:00 PM
Lovely Andrea. Great Poem for fall. Wayne
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Date: 10/2/2011 7:22:00 PM
Very good idea that you have betrayed very well..You have brought those leaves to life..Reads like a winner to me..Sara
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Date: 10/2/2011 5:48:00 PM
This is great Andrea. What beautiful imagery and I love the metaphores here. Truly great verse my friend. God Bless, JB
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Date: 10/2/2011 5:30:00 PM
Applause, applause! Will waltz on outside for an autumn stroll with that one. Beauty write, Happy eve, Andrea. ~N
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Date: 10/2/2011 4:20:00 PM
Such a beautiful poem, perfectly captures the dance of the leaves.
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Date: 10/2/2011 4:05:00 PM
best 4 contest:) see said i was tired...
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Date: 10/2/2011 4:02:00 PM
well told today Andrea, most enjoyed..
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Date: 10/2/2011 3:43:00 PM
What an imaginative and delightful story told in verse, Andrea. Love the use of personification and the comparison of Goldie and Red to Fred and Ginger. Sure to be a big winner! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/2/2011 3:24:00 PM
I somehow feel that I want to read more Andrea, just love the imagery you share with the reader.. love Wilma
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