The Visitor

Once upon a night so bleak,
frozen silent laid the creek --
air of death, pushed, swore
and swore...as if were fists
pounded the frail, wood door;

shutters noised, bolting and
banging; metal hinges oddly
clanging – cupboard glasses
adding more tumultuous tang, 
as they, in vile unison, vibrantly rang…

suddenly, through frosted pane
I spied, crossing the blanketed 
plane, a spirit like figure -- 

it crept upon sod’s snowy cover,
in rock’s shadow, paused, more 
hovered! – of superstition I had
little fright...yet, a morbid stench
abscessed the night…

silence ensued more vociferous
than shout; I sat at the table,
candlelight flicker -- thoughts 
wildly racing, quicker—aflicker!
of superstition had I little fright…
yet, a morbid stench abscessed
the night -- 

Then, the wind, first torment, now breeze,
began to whisper...my racing heart slowing
to near freeze. ‘This demon you did provoke and 
invoke” ~ alas, no more it spoke. From hiding
again it sprung! Side to side, snow was flung.
For my cabin it plowed a path: with 
haste I shuttered, in awe of this wrath! 

Thus, moments passed...ones of dismay,
proceeded a knocking, some Thing seeking entree: 
Who is it? (I inquired, door-bolt still fast)~ Hurry, state your 
stand! What monster has this God forsaken night sired, trembling
a peaceful land -- fearless predators a-shrink in lairs -- evil
chill permeating the air -- what still-born agonies
have you come to bare? To which there was no reply --
Nor further from I. Followed another brief silence,
seething with violence. This silence continued but
fleeting moment more, ended by fury, the Devil
alone could spore: for on my door, it began to pound -- 
pounded and pounded, such tumult, how it sounded, and bounded 
from wall to wall, from all to all! “Let me in!” it shouted, with fury, 
with rage, “I would not be here, if not for your page” -- Let me in,
it continued to urge, door shackles weakening with each 
new surge.  Finally came one mighty thrust. Door-bolt 
springing, flinging as it bust. Left in the doorway
midst whirling dust stood a figure, clad in black shroud,
puffing, snorting, animally bowed.  Of no man had I this
depth of fear, nor sense of jeer. But this was not man,
in fact, ghoul! Restricted naught, by any flesh-rule. It eyed
my every move, as a fiend in stalk or taunt of
prey -- thus, I sensed my life, to be at bay. 
But before I could stir a defense, slur my disdain
this grotesque courier of bane had lifted its shroud 
and mockingly bowed. To my surprise,
although bereft of human form, conceived in some ogressly
norm...its face...absent of all but the slightest human trace,
yet...that face, that face!~ clearly shown...resemblance to my 
own….

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Date: 9/28/2023 2:24:00 PM
Oooh. This reminds me of a poem I wrote long ago called the Loon upon the Lake. Great dark imagery. Very Poe like!
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Joe Dimino
Date: 9/29/2023 5:41:00 AM
Just a little bit of psychological mystery. Please post the Loon of the Lake. Would very much love to read it. Blessings.
Date: 9/28/2023 4:31:00 AM
Such a soul stirring and haunting write this is, held me captivated throughout with its beguiling wordplay and intriguing descriptions that flowed so evocatively in an eerie ambience.. Many poignant emotions have been woven here whilst maintaining a storytelling flow.. Dark and gloomy yet so artistically done!
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Joe Dimino
Date: 9/28/2023 10:09:00 AM
Hi Hiya; just reliving my childhood Trick Or Treat days, and early infatuation with Poe Poetry: "How they tinkle, tinkle, tinkle, In the icy air of night! While the stars that oversprinkle All the heavens, seem to twinkle With a crystalline delight;" -- love it!
Date: 9/27/2023 11:29:00 PM
Well scribed Joe.' Self and awareness And some vaugeries there-too.'
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Joe Dimino
Date: 9/28/2023 10:15:00 AM
I have two ears, often hearing diametrically opposed voices -- were I to battle evil by myself, I would always lose, the lesser ego far too vulnerable to deceit -- Christ is my only source of victory.... I am not fool enough to challenge the devil...and wise enough to use Christ as my fortress.
Date: 9/27/2023 6:13:00 AM
A haunting ride on the wings of your imagination, my friend. Aptly done for the season. A symphony of emotions invoke throughout. Creatively delivered, Joe.
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Joe Dimino
Date: 9/27/2023 8:48:00 AM
Hi Vijay; thank you for the support. Blessings my friend!
Date: 9/26/2023 8:34:00 AM
Brrrr..A great Halloween poem that sent some shivers down my spine. Great attempt at dark poem, so long as it is all in fun and remember the only One who loves you. Blessings.
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Joe Dimino
Date: 9/26/2023 1:08:00 PM
Thank you, Victor. Absolutely for fun! But there are many spiritual truths presented here also worth serious consideration. life and spirituality are far more complex than most of us can even begin to fathom -- to my way of thinking anyway. Blessings my friend.
Date: 9/25/2023 11:34:00 PM
What an intriguing story. I held my breath till the end ! So scary and spooky. UNLIKE your usual style, this was waxing eloquent, but never tedious, so very captivating. The suspense till the end was gripping and the anti climax at the end was even more puzzling. In each of us, there is an angel and a demon. Excellent narration dear friend.
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Joe Dimino
Date: 9/26/2023 7:06:00 AM
Thank you, Valsa. Ah! -- Yes! -- and which voice will one listen to?... Which ear will be open?... Which of the double-mind will respond? The spirit joust an ongoing competition, between good and evil. We are the contestants, the audience, judges and juries...but Heaven and Hell bear witness, and reap the outcome. So much for my poetic Halloween, I'm through:)
Date: 9/25/2023 7:05:00 PM
Wow! A complete suspenseful poem and a significant message at the end. Well written for sure Joe. The flow,, the lines, powerful, all of it. :)
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Date: 9/25/2023 7:25:00 PM
Hi Heidi; so pleased you enjoyed the read! Blessings my friend!
Date: 9/25/2023 10:04:00 AM
- WoooW ... Joe ... what a description ... access to our own emotions - recognize that they live in our bodies ... often we want to avoid unpleasantness ... and divert them, until we lose touch with who we really are - hugs
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Date: 9/25/2023 11:38:00 AM
Just a little Halloween fun. There is no devil that we do not first give power to...and no God that does not already dwell within us, as eternal, unconditional love. Happy Trick Or Treating! Blessings my friend.
Date: 9/25/2023 9:49:00 AM
Sounds like the protagonist is losing his mind! Love the Poe-like thrill!
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Date: 9/25/2023 11:40:00 AM
Hi Kim; why should Poe have all the Halloween fun? -- inspired this tale one dank night by a Dream Raven, who sat at the foot of my bed, eyes redly gleaming...seeming seeming seeming. Love it!
Date: 9/25/2023 8:48:00 AM
The Dweller AT The Threshold Or Gate, is the self we have created, the one we shrink from viewing, for it takes stout heart and honesty to openly face. It is why we reincarnate, the diary of all past journeys we have taken, and must repeat till we admit our faults, hideous as they are, to eventually prostrate ourselves at the feet of God. Most of us are so repelled by this image, we run from inevitable destiny. There is no avoiding, only delaying and prolonging pain and revelation. The beast blocking, the world the universe from higher, far brighter experience, is our own illusion, The Guardian at the gate.
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