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The Veranda Floor

Once I sat on our veranda with my sister, sweet Miranda And the forbidden goodies we had purchased at the store. While I nibble, neatly snapping, suddenly there comes a flapping Of an apron at the door. My dear mother is once more Catching us in our misdoing while her favor we are losing Standing at veranda door. Frowning, pointing at the floor at the shells we had been dropping, Cracking peanuts without stopping, we had purchased at the store. "Pick them up," our mother uttered. ""You are lucky they're not buttered. They would be forever more staining my veranda floor. We could see she was revolted so my sister and I bolted To our mama at the door. Neither of us dared to amble, bump each other as we scramble To pick up the shells from off the floor, for our mom who we adore. Vowing not to buy them anymore, unshelled peanuts from the store. Ready to be reprimanded, though we've done what she commanded, We stand still to be admonished, knowing well we should be punished For the shells upon the floor. Written: Oct. 4, 14

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 10/13/2014 10:00:00 PM
Very interesting write on Raven, Joyce, congrats
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Date: 10/13/2014 6:58:00 PM
I love that you kept the same rhythm and rhyming pattern as "The Raven". Your unique take on the theme was very enjoyable! Congrats on your win, Joyce!
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Date: 10/8/2014 6:43:00 PM
Just amazing, I love your poetry.
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Date: 10/5/2014 12:25:00 PM
aha, I think I see what you have done. sAme thing as I did, copying the RAven poem's beat? Is it for the Raven contest? If so, you and I thought alike by doing a parody.
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Date: 10/4/2014 6:33:00 PM
This is adorable.. You caught the flow of Poe's poem perfectly. BG
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Date: 10/4/2014 4:18:00 PM
Oh what a charming write and I love the rhyme - really enjoyed this poem Joyce:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 10/4/2014 3:55:00 PM
Nice rhyme Joyce, the things we did when growing up that we should have been punished for but did not get caught. :) eve
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Date: 10/4/2014 3:30:00 PM
smiling such a delight and very beautifully penned piece joyce
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