The Veranda Floor

Once I sat on our veranda with my sister,  sweet Miranda
And the forbidden goodies we had purchased at the store.
While I nibble, neatly snapping, suddenly there comes a flapping
Of an apron at the door.  My dear mother is once more
Catching us in our misdoing while her favor we are losing 
Standing at veranda door.

Frowning, pointing at the floor at the shells we had been dropping,
Cracking peanuts without stopping, we had purchased at the store.
"Pick them up,"  our mother uttered. ""You are lucky they're not buttered.
They would be forever more staining my veranda floor.
We could see she was revolted so my sister and I bolted
To our mama at the door.

Neither of us dared to amble, bump each other as we scramble
To pick up the shells from off the floor, for our mom who we adore.
Vowing not to buy them anymore, unshelled peanuts from the store.
Ready to be reprimanded, though we've done what she commanded,
We stand still to be admonished, knowing well we should be punished
For the shells upon the floor.

Written: Oct. 4, 14
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Mehta Avatar
October 13, 2014 at 10:00 PM
Very interesting write on Raven, Joyce, congrats
Deschler Avatar
October 13, 2014 at 6:58 PM
I love that you kept the same rhythm and rhyming pattern as "The Raven". Your unique take on the theme was very enjoyable! Congrats on your win, Joyce!
Yvonne Avatar
October 8, 2014 at 6:43 PM
Just amazing, I love your poetry.
Dietrich Avatar
October 5, 2014 at 12:25 PM
aha, I think I see what you have done. sAme thing as I did, copying the RAven poem's beat? Is it for the Raven contest? If so, you and I thought alike by doing a parody.
Gorelick Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 6:33 PM
This is adorable.. You caught the flow of Poe's poem perfectly. BG
Allison Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 4:18 PM
Oh what a charming write and I love the rhyme - really enjoyed this poem Joyce:-) hugs Jan xxx
Roper Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 3:55 PM
Nice rhyme Joyce, the things we did when growing up that we should have been punished for but did not get caught. :) eve
Mcdaid Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 3:30 PM
smiling such a delight and very beautifully penned piece joyce
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