James Peranteau Poet Free verse

The Slow Screech

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How fortuitous that I should be
            'pon this train
                  alone
                 behind 
               one alone

      suddenly there was the
              slow screech
                    hiss
                 the jerk

                 Her eyes

             Her slow turn
                  Past I

             Her blue eyes

                her brush
                 ‘gainst I

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Amy Green April 15, 2010 at 7:18 AM Another really good one. I like the your style you write it, suspenseful.

Christi Kopp April 14, 2010 at 9:10 PM Truly Inspiring. Silent empty train, Lush warm body presses mine, Slow down or derail, Eyelashes flutter, Blue eyes flash intense passion, Too late now, no brakes

Daver Austin April 12, 2010 at 1:53 PM Oh, you are such a dreamer, Sir James. I saw that same woman with another man on the same train. Great write! Love, daver

Daver Austin March 29, 2010 at 1:32 PM Honestly I didn't write my latest post before I read this of yours. If I had, my piece might have been done better. Love, daver

Charmaine Chircop March 29, 2010 at 6:18 AM I Feel you in love,with those blue eyes James,glad ur happy-Charma

Andrea Dietrich March 26, 2010 at 9:27 AM Yes, like Buda said, this is a case of two ships passing in the night. Fun read!! Luv, andrea, oh by the way, you never gave me your birthdate. I need it so I can figure your numbers for you (my last blog explains how to do it, but if you want, I'll do it for you myself. I really would love to include you in my next blog recap of numerology)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart March 25, 2010 at 9:15 AM Hi James... I posted the link on my blog for u to check out the poetry pub website.. sorry it took so long but been so busy with too many things... hope u will like it once u check it out..luv.. "Sweetheart"

Carolyn Devonshire March 25, 2010 at 7:38 AM Great reflection on an immediate attraction to a stranger, James! Love, Carolyn

Barbara Gorelick March 25, 2010 at 7:21 AM Im headed for the shower..cold. A Beauty. BG

Bathsheba Bathsheba March 25, 2010 at 7:11 AM Passion intense or what !!! Fab write James - Great share for all -:)