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The Slow Screech

. How fortuitous that I should be 'pon this train alone behind one alone suddenly there was the slow screech hiss the jerk Her eyes Her slow turn Past I Her blue eyes her brush ‘gainst I

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Amy Green

Date: 4/15/2010 7:18:00 AM

Another really good one. I like the your style you write it, suspenseful.

Christi Kopp

Date: 4/14/2010 9:10:00 PM

Truly Inspiring. Silent empty train, Lush warm body presses mine, Slow down or derail, Eyelashes flutter, Blue eyes flash intense passion, Too late now, no brakes

Daver Austin

Date: 4/12/2010 1:53:00 PM

Oh, you are such a dreamer, Sir James. I saw that same woman with another man on the same train. Great write! Love, daver

Daver Austin

Date: 3/29/2010 1:32:00 PM

Honestly I didn't write my latest post before I read this of yours. If I had, my piece might have been done better. Love, daver

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/29/2010 6:18:00 AM

I Feel you in love,with those blue eyes James,glad ur happy-Charma

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/26/2010 9:27:00 AM

Yes, like Buda said, this is a case of two ships passing in the night. Fun read!! Luv, andrea, oh by the way, you never gave me your birthdate. I need it so I can figure your numbers for you (my last blog explains how to do it, but if you want, I'll do it for you myself. I really would love to include you in my next blog recap of numerology)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/25/2010 9:15:00 AM

Hi James... I posted the link on my blog for u to check out the poetry pub website.. sorry it took so long but been so busy with too many things... hope u will like it once u check it out..luv.. "Sweetheart"

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/25/2010 7:38:00 AM

Great reflection on an immediate attraction to a stranger, James! Love, Carolyn

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/25/2010 7:21:00 AM

Im headed for the shower..cold. A Beauty. BG

Bathsheba Bathsheba

Date: 3/25/2010 7:11:00 AM

Passion intense or what !!! Fab write James - Great share for all -:)