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The Seeking Ship

A solitary sail of contrasting 
     White in a salty sea of blue.
From its own land, to disconnect,
     Why seek a land that's new?

In a friendly sea where the mast bends
     From soothing winds it takes heart.
However; it seeks not happiness
     Nor from happiness does it depart.

The sea glistens much brighter
     Than the warm sun filled sky,
Yet rebellious, it seeks a storm,
     As if to find peace within its eye.

Translation by Connie Marcum Wong

Note: A melancholic soul often feels more at home
surrounded by chaos when one has been raised in 
constant chaos on the edge. 

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Original poem
The Sail
By Mikhail Lermontov

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Literal translation
A lonely sail shows white / against the sea's blue mist. / What does it seek in a distant region? / What has it abandoned in its own land?
The waves play, the wind whistles, / and the mast bends and screeches… / Alas, it does not seek happiness / and is not running away from happiness.
Beneath it the current is brighter than the azure, / above it is the sun's golden ray… / But it, rebellious, asks for a storm, / as if there were peace in storms.
(Literal tr. Donald Rayfield, with Jeremy Hicks, Olga Makarova and Anna Pilkington)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 9/22/2015 1:43:00 AM
Very insightful and true sentiments I feel in this Connie..'
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Date: 5/29/2015 2:12:00 PM
Such a beautiful short piece Connie, and the image you've used is breathtaking, James :)
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Date: 4/4/2015 2:09:00 PM
Wow! This is amazing! Especially the last stanza. Such insight here. How often do many of us churn the waters just so we can really feel the peace in the calm?
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Date: 4/3/2015 9:54:00 AM
Amazing how you stayed true to the poet to put into English not his Russian words but the magic of his intent. A Fav!
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Date: 3/31/2015 1:23:00 PM
Connie, I love the message within your words and lines, A7, and thanks for visiting my poem, thinking in. . .
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Date: 3/30/2015 3:09:00 PM
You describe an emotional state and graphically make us feel it's effects. Emile.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/30/2015 5:11:00 PM
That is what I was striving for Emile. Thank you for your thoughtful comment. I appreciate your feedback. Hugs, Connie
Date: 3/29/2015 11:09:00 AM
YOUR TRANSLATION IS GREAT. A7 and the poem is a gem...
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/30/2015 5:09:00 PM
Thank you very much Robert. I am happy you enjoyed my translation. This is the first time I have written a translation, and it does take some time and thought. Blessings, Connie
Date: 3/24/2015 3:28:00 PM
- Really great that you translated ..... hard to understand Russian text - A wonderful poem, Connie - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/25/2015 2:20:00 AM
Thank you A-L. The poem is a favorite Russian poem I have read and many have translated it into English and other languages, so I thought I would have a go at it. It was based on what the writer was going though at a certain period in his life. Very intriguing. I appreciate your nice comment. Hugs, Connie
Date: 3/24/2015 2:06:00 PM
You did a really good job in your translating , connie. BEAUTIFULLY done.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/25/2015 2:22:00 AM
Thank you Andrea. I wish I could post more often, but I need to be inspired to write and then I usually don't have time with my little Granddaughter here most of the time. Hugs, Connie
Date: 3/24/2015 2:02:00 PM
You have done a great job here, Connie! Just beautiful! Also want to comment on the awesome picture...very fitting! Hugs // paul
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/25/2015 2:17:00 AM
Thank you Paul. I really had to search to find a ship on a sea which was brighter than the sun. I was so happy to find this photo on the web. I appreciate your encouragement Paul. Hugs, Connie
Date: 3/24/2015 10:43:00 AM
Wow! This is so beautiful my very dear friend, Connie. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Thank you so much. More blessings! love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/25/2015 2:23:00 AM
I appreciate you stopping by with this lovely comment Leonora. Thank you so much. I hope you are well. Blessings, Connie
Date: 3/24/2015 8:27:00 AM
You have painted quite a piece with these words. I do love it when a poem is well written enough to present me with a visual. Well done.
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/25/2015 2:24:00 AM
Why thank you very much M.L. I appreciate your comment. I am a fan of your poetry. Hugs, Connie
Date: 3/24/2015 6:21:00 AM
Love, your poem Connie. #7
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/25/2015 2:27:00 AM
Thank you very much Deborah. I appreciate you stopping by to comment and for the #7. Blessings, Connie
Date: 3/24/2015 12:05:00 AM
gosh this is so cool. I was thinking you wrote it, connie!! Then realized you translated it. good for you!!
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/24/2015 1:09:00 AM
It is my version of what I think his poem means Andrea. It is not an exact translation as I certainly don't speak Russian. LOL. So I did write it in my own words, but I changed everything to suit myself. Thanks Andrea. hugs, Connie
Date: 3/23/2015 6:05:00 PM
fantastic pen Connie you bring it to life hugs 7
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/25/2015 2:28:00 AM
I am happy you think so Shadow. Thanks so much for your comment and for the 7. Hugs, Connie
Date: 3/23/2015 4:36:00 PM
I like your version better, Connie. The mysterious sea and its many moods. it is very much a part of me. bfn Your freind, Elaine
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/25/2015 2:30:00 AM
Your comment made my day Elaine. Thanks so much for such a wonderful compliment! Hugs, Connie
Date: 3/23/2015 2:41:00 PM
This remarkable little poem truly is deserving of great merit - absolutely lovely! Beautifully done, Connie! My very best regards!! :) john. P.s A seven for both of you!
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 3/25/2015 2:33:00 AM
John, I understand that this Russian poem is very popular and the author was going through some challenges when he wrote it. I believe it has been translated by many into many different languages. I found the poem enchanting and I had to try my hand at it. Thank you very much for your lovely comment and the 7. Blessings, Connie
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