The Sad Story of Annie

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Dusty Box Of Memories Poetry Contest

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The old cottage was in a dilapidated state. Fifteen years had passed
Since my sister died. The only thing of interest was a dusty old box.
I lifted the lid: a broken flute, a sort of diary
And a jar, dust covered the bottom.
                    A note on the jar read Amy and Angela.
The box belonged to my sister Annie, now long gone.
I took the box to my cottage and opened the notebook
                    I flipped the pages and read here and there.   
  *******************************************************

     Six years had passed since Jason and I got married.
     How things have changed since then.  Jason became violent.
     He’d kill me if he were not afraid of capital punishment.

     I passed the time away, accepting his rapes and playing the flute.
     He hated it when I learned the melodies on my instrument.
     He spent the time stealing money and getting drunk each night.
     I dared not complain as he would hit me in the bare face.

     Then, one day, he came early and heard me play the flute.
     He snatched it from my hand and broke it in two. How vicious!
     I always wanted to pass the time away.  In anger, I told him
     I’m pregnant. I must take my leisure time and rest peacefully.  
                          It was the wrong thing to say.

     Jason’s face turned purple.  He began to hit me savagely.
     He kicked me up the abdomen and my womb until I fell into a coma.
     Neighbours heard the noise and called the police and an ambulance.

     I came out of my coma after a week. They had operated on me,
     My womb was removed, and two foetuses were put in an air-tight jar.
     I found peace when I was told everything about my husband.
     Jason was arrested and received long-term imprisonment.
     His demeanour did not change, and he tried to bully everyone.
                           One day, he was found dead in the prison yard.

     Time passed, I recovered, found a job, ill-paid but with food provided, 
     Time passed until one day, a cancer developed in my abdomen.
                            Soon, I'll die, having left everything to my sister.


**************************************************************

I visited her tomb and dug a hole.  I buried her jar near her tomb.
Still, I kept her notes, a memory of her sorrowful demise.
                       I could not help but shed a tear.


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Copyright © | Year Posted 2025



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Date: 2/13/2025 10:19:00 AM
WOW!!! Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet very sad write. I hope it was just a write and Not true. It does happen in life. Have a blessed day with your win....................
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Date: 2/12/2025 11:03:00 AM
Back with congratulations
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Date: 2/12/2025 10:52:00 AM
- Back with a congratulation, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 2/11/2025 5:20:00 PM
Terribly sad Victor, I hope it isn’t true, no one deserves to be abused like that, yet it does happen sadly. Well written… Beryl
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Date: 2/7/2025 3:02:00 PM
Same here - I couldn't help but shed a tear. This got me, Victor ... CayCay
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Date: 2/6/2025 8:22:00 PM
I wonder if it is fiction or real. So heart wrenching! How abusive was that beast of a man! These days such manhandling and abuse are so very common, but in our youthful days, it wasn't that rampant. If it is a real story, no one can think of your sister without tears flowing down from the eyes. Such a touching narration. Surely this will be placed high. Be consoled, dear Victor, she is now in Heaven.
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Date: 2/6/2025 8:42:00 AM
Heartbreaking! Probably the story of many who fearfully remain silent. Well written. Maybe will give some so suffering the courage to seek help before worst hand.
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Date: 2/6/2025 12:13:00 AM
Hello Victor, this is a terribly sad story. Sadly I have seen this type of violence in reality.. Good luck with the contest, my friend.
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Date: 2/5/2025 1:08:00 PM
my goodness. Is this true??? I have heard of such things like this. I thought we were to write about our own feelings, but anyway, this is great storytelling!
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Date: 2/5/2025 9:51:00 AM
Heartfelt story, but it happens in many families. Well written verse Constance will love it.
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Date: 2/5/2025 4:29:00 AM
Victor, what a sad, tragic story! I just van't understand such hate and violence! Great writing!
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Date: 2/4/2025 11:22:00 PM
very sad story, this happens in reality, when a man don't care about nothing and is evil, thoughtful poem, good luck for contest
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Date: 2/4/2025 10:29:00 PM
Victor this one was sad but this world is sad sometimes. You had me wanting to kick Jason's a-s. A sad free verse from you. So real to read. Abuse at it's best. You sure can make it read real my friend. Best wishes for Constance Contest...
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Date: 2/4/2025 9:16:00 PM
A touching story.Such type of husbands often seen in our society also.
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Date: 2/4/2025 6:45:00 PM
Dear Victor, this left a weight in my chest, like standing in the wreckage of something sacred. The dust, the jar, the sorrow, it all lingers. There’s a quiet, aching power here, a grief that doesn’t fade. Well Written! Winter Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 2/4/2025 6:04:00 PM
So tragic! No one should have to suffer the nightmare of abuse. Great writing. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 2/4/2025 1:25:00 PM
wonderful storytelling my friend... such a tragedy though..
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Date: 2/4/2025 11:40:00 AM
Victor, your poem is tragic and abusive, but really powerful too. Unfortunately, abuse is all too frequent and often goes unnoticed. He received just punishment. Someone as gifted as your sister deserved more than what happened to her.
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Date: 2/4/2025 8:28:00 AM
A poem full of sadness and abuse, good luck in the contest Victor.
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Date: 2/4/2025 7:07:00 AM
A heart-jerker in this one. Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing. I am hoping it is fictional. Sara K
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Date: 2/4/2025 6:51:00 AM
Tragedy times two! Abusers are losers
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Date: 2/4/2025 5:54:00 AM
- A sad story in this box, Victor - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 2/4/2025 4:59:00 AM
Powerful poem and sad. Abuse is so common and to some degree hidden from view. He got what he deserved. Your sister deserved a much better fate, especially one so talented.
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Date: 2/4/2025 3:54:00 AM
Oh this is so sad :( but very well written Victor. Good luck in the contest. I'm no good at entering writing/poetry contests, but l love to read others work. Thank you for sharing. j.
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