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The Rush...

Through the opened orifice of humanities consciousness, the whirling, whirring, rush of rain; tumults round the asphalts plane. Spritzing, spreading, shrieking, zing… the staccato sounds of wet spring; the tinkling chimes, the brass banter the clop of clogs, children canter. All the sizzle of an oiled pan. All the sparkle of dew on land. All pummeled, a peonies pain, the soundless swirl petals, drain.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 4/19/2010 7:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Brian's (Any Which Way) contest Deb. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/14/2010 11:40:00 AM
Many congrats on your win. Rgds Janette
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Date: 4/5/2010 2:18:00 AM
Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 4/3/2010 2:28:00 AM
I love the way you moved things in choreography that the readers will be swayed. You have perfectly put words in rhyming without losing the essence. Congratulations on your being second place on this contest, Deborah. (^_^) Noel.
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Date: 4/2/2010 10:00:00 AM
Congratulations, Deb. Lots of alliteration going on this little goodie! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 4/2/2010 8:08:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest, Deborah! Thanks for reading mine and leaving comments for me...Peace, Audrey
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Date: 4/1/2010 1:09:00 PM
Outstanding as always...you have a talent that exceeds most! Congratulations on this winning poem...glad I didn't miss this one!! :)
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Date: 3/31/2010 11:57:00 PM
Congratulations on your second win, Deborah! I love the imagery and the sounds of a spring rainy day.Enjoy your glory!Have a Happy Easter/Happy Passover. Love and hugs, Andrew.
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Date: 3/31/2010 7:58:00 PM
Congrats for the second place. Good rhyming
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Date: 3/31/2010 6:44:00 PM
Congrats on a fine poem Deborah
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Date: 3/31/2010 9:49:00 AM
Congratulations on the great poem and your win. Love, joyce
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Date: 3/31/2010 8:51:00 AM
Congrats on this piece ..written on a rainy day? Another win for you..well deserved. BG
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Date: 3/31/2010 8:42:00 AM
very nice write and congrats on your win faleshia
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Date: 3/31/2010 7:32:00 AM
Congrats on your success in my contest Debbie.Rgds Brian.My latest contest 'APRIL FOOTLE' is now open.
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Date: 3/28/2010 1:06:00 AM
Thank you for supporting my contest Debbie.Rgds Brian
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Date: 2/17/2010 5:41:00 PM
enjoyed, congrats on the win!
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Date: 2/17/2010 11:22:00 AM
A belated"Congratulations" Deborah. Sincere Agape, Moses
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Date: 2/7/2010 4:27:00 AM
wow, this should have come before mine - love your poetry! no, cannot say I am back, I am more limbo right now - in between everything going wrong and waiting for it to straighten out and go right : )) Congrats - I do love this poem!!! and you. hugs, shar xoxo
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Date: 2/6/2010 1:02:00 PM
Congrats Debbie on your winning poem in Mac's contest ... your words are exquisite.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
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Date: 2/6/2010 11:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Mac's contest Deborah. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/6/2009 7:37:00 AM
I almost see it raining nice work thanks for your comments
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Date: 6/26/2009 9:56:00 PM
This is an excellent use of imagery. Wonderful. I enjoyed reading it Ernilando
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Date: 6/25/2009 2:12:00 PM
@.@ I needed that, the sun is sporing my skin; wow, so fresh!!! Longig for rain right now =( and for some sleep jojojo thanks a lot for the experience!!!=D
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Date: 6/24/2009 4:08:00 PM
read very fast this is a very good piece! the words you come up with are amazing, great work. John Henry Loving III
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Date: 6/23/2009 9:27:00 AM
yeah nevermind my break, I couldn't stay off the site for more than a few hours...temptation's too strong. Oh well:)
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