The Rush...

Through the opened orifice
of humanities consciousness,
the whirling, whirring, rush of rain;
tumults round the asphalts plane.

Spritzing, spreading, shrieking, zing…
the staccato sounds of wet spring;
the tinkling chimes, the brass banter
the clop of clogs, children canter.

All the sizzle of an oiled pan.	
All the sparkle of dew on land.
All pummeled, a peonies pain,
the soundless swirl petals, drain.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Brown Avatar
April 19, 2010 at 7:22 AM
Congratulations on your win in Brian's (Any Which Way) contest Deb. Love, Carol
Fisher Avatar
April 14, 2010 at 11:40 AM
Many congrats on your win. Rgds Janette
James Avatar
April 5, 2010 at 2:18 AM
Congratulations on your win!
Villarosa Avatar
April 3, 2010 at 2:28 AM
I love the way you moved things in choreography that the readers will be swayed. You have perfectly put words in rhyming without losing the essence. Congratulations on your being second place on this contest, Deborah. (^_^) Noel.
Dietrich Avatar
April 2, 2010 at 10:00 AM
Congratulations, Deb. Lots of alliteration going on this little goodie! Luv, Andrea
Haick Avatar
April 2, 2010 at 8:08 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest, Deborah! Thanks for reading mine and leaving comments for me...Peace, Audrey
Richards Avatar
April 1, 2010 at 1:09 PM
Outstanding as always...you have a talent that exceeds most! Congratulations on this winning poem...glad I didn't miss this one!! :)
Crisci Avatar
March 31, 2010 at 11:57 PM
Congratulations on your second win, Deborah! I love the imagery and the sounds of a spring rainy day.Enjoy your glory!Have a Happy Easter/Happy Passover. Love and hugs, Andrew.
Mehta Avatar
March 31, 2010 at 7:58 PM
Congrats for the second place. Good rhyming
White Avatar
March 31, 2010 at 6:44 PM
Congrats on a fine poem Deborah
Johnson Avatar
March 31, 2010 at 9:49 AM
Congratulations on the great poem and your win. Love, joyce
Gorelick Avatar
March 31, 2010 at 8:51 AM
Congrats on this piece ..written on a rainy day? Another win for you..well deserved. BG
Murphy Avatar
March 31, 2010 at 8:42 AM
very nice write and congrats on your win faleshia
Strand Avatar
March 31, 2010 at 7:32 AM
Congrats on your success in my contest Debbie.Rgds Brian.My latest contest 'APRIL FOOTLE' is now open.
Strand Avatar
March 28, 2010 at 1:06 AM
Thank you for supporting my contest Debbie.Rgds Brian
Culverhouse Avatar
February 17, 2010 at 5:41 PM
enjoyed, congrats on the win!
Freeman Avatar
February 17, 2010 at 11:22 AM
A belated"Congratulations" Deborah. Sincere Agape, Moses
Winter Avatar
February 7, 2010 at 4:27 AM
wow, this should have come before mine - love your poetry! no, cannot say I am back, I am more limbo right now - in between everything going wrong and waiting for it to straighten out and go right : )) Congrats - I do love this poem!!! and you. hugs, shar xoxo
Sweetheart Avatar
February 6, 2010 at 1:02 PM
Congrats Debbie on your winning poem in Mac's contest ... your words are exquisite.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
Brown Avatar
February 6, 2010 at 11:41 AM
Congratulations on your win in Mac's contest Deborah. Love, Carol
Kern Avatar
July 6, 2009 at 7:37 AM
I almost see it raining nice work thanks for your comments
Tugaff Avatar
June 26, 2009 at 9:56 PM
This is an excellent use of imagery. Wonderful. I enjoyed reading it Ernilando
Cantu Avatar
June 25, 2009 at 2:12 PM
@.@ I needed that, the sun is sporing my skin; wow, so fresh!!! Longig for rain right now =( and for some sleep jojojo thanks a lot for the experience!!!=D
Loving Iii Avatar
June 24, 2009 at 4:08 PM
read very fast this is a very good piece! the words you come up with are amazing, great work. John Henry Loving III
Dvorkis Avatar
June 23, 2009 at 9:27 AM
yeah nevermind my break, I couldn't stay off the site for more than a few hours...temptation's too strong. Oh well:)
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