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The Rising

Sultry girl
Crouching tiptoed on a chair
Watching as it rises
She fears and welcomes the flood
Shivers in anticipation
Will she meet the waters with equal force?
Or will she be swept away
by the depth of his desire?


For Forever Malta's Contest

Copyright © Richard Lamoureux | Year Posted 2016

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Damont Combs Date: 8/18/2016 8:30:00 AM This is dope simple yet powerful I appreciate good poetry and yes that poem was my first one I have made quite an impact it seems Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/18/2016 8:33:00 AM That's great Damont. If you have a chance check out my poem "Broken People" I have a feeling you might enjoy it. Take care Rick.

Michael Ainsley Date: 8/11/2016 10:24:00 AM Delightful Richard ! Login to Reply

Edlynn Nau Date: 4/16/2016 11:23:00 AM Love the surprise in this. Fantastic pictures ran in my head and I love the metaphor! Login to Reply

Suzanne Delaney Date: 3/21/2016 10:20:00 PM Congrats Richard: true to my prediction. Cheers SuZ Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 3/20/2016 12:56:00 AM Hello Richard, Congrats on your awesome win. XOX ~LINDA~ Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/20/2016 8:31:00 AM Thanks Linda. ;0)

Balveen Cheema Date: 3/17/2016 8:55:00 AM Aha! Will she meet the waters or swept away by ....his desire? What an imagination! Congrats Richard! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/20/2016 8:32:00 AM Thanks Balveen.

Teddy Kimathi Date: 3/17/2016 3:55:00 AM Beautiful imagery!!! Congrats for your top placement in the contest!!! ;-) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/20/2016 8:32:00 AM Thanks Teddy.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 3/16/2016 11:10:00 PM Wonderful write n win Richard.. big congrats! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/20/2016 8:32:00 AM Thanks Upma.

Sam Jameson Date: 3/16/2016 6:56:00 PM Congratulations on your placement, Richard-- I like the buildup in this piece leading to the open ending, well done. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:29:00 PM Thanks Sam.

Lin Lane Date: 3/16/2016 5:13:00 PM I now see your name on the list, Rick. Congrats to you. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:29:00 PM Thanks Lin.

Rob Carmack Date: 3/16/2016 5:04:00 PM Congrats Richard. You captured the photo in this poem. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:29:00 PM Thanks Rob

Beautiful Scars Date: 3/16/2016 4:42:00 PM Richard, congrats on your placement in the contest -luloo :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:29:00 PM Thanks Laura.;0)

Daniel Turner Date: 3/16/2016 3:28:00 PM Congratulations, Richard on your winning write. I was checking to see where everyone's muse went on this prompt. You my man went to sex. Sex sells!! Great job. Peace my friend:) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:30:00 PM Thanks Daniel.

Bl Devnath Date: 3/11/2016 6:29:00 PM Beautiful poem lovely friend drawn with a nice picture my lovely friend, bl Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:30:00 PM Thanks BL.

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis Date: 3/10/2016 7:57:00 AM I remember images; and you have gone far out, capturing scenes of rich possibilities. So thoughtful and witty. A winner already. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/10/2016 8:08:00 AM Thanks Iris, I would love to get your perspective on my "Shattering Rose Glasses. I wrote it for a diversity event at The University of British Columbia.

Suzanne Delaney Date: 3/10/2016 12:46:00 AM Nice metaphor.....passions rising. Should rate high in the contest. SuZ Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:27:00 PM Thanks Casarah! Hugs Rick. Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/10/2016 5:37:00 AM Thanks SuZ

Casarah Nance Date: 3/8/2016 8:28:00 AM You took the prompt picture to a different level. Great. ;) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:28:00 PM Oops, thanks Casarah, comment jumped up one.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/6/2016 9:40:00 AM Verrrrry interesting..... wonderfully metaphorical. I like it mucho. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:31:00 PM Thanks Andrea. I was a bit naughty.

Michael Tor Date: 3/2/2016 7:56:00 PM Great twist at the end Richard. Cleverly written. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:33:00 PM Thanks Michael.

Harry Horsman Date: 3/2/2016 4:28:00 PM Hi, Richard i'm thinking tsunami here. What ever wonderful poetry.. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/16/2016 7:34:00 PM Thanks Harry.

Red Fiery Date: 3/1/2016 6:48:00 PM I came here to read this work again....you have all created a sensational masterpiece..! ps I am back with a new work...;) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/1/2016 11:06:00 PM On my way to read it.

Timothy Hicks Date: 2/29/2016 11:51:00 PM Great passion, and very fitting for the image. Succinct and to the point. Well done! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/1/2016 7:23:00 PM Perhaps it is fear and desire for it is their first time. Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/1/2016 8:52:00 AM Thanks TJ! Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/1/2016 8:52:00 AM Thanks Timothy.

Nette Onclaud Date: 2/29/2016 1:49:00 PM ohh, the last two lines packed a punch, rich... lovely!..huggs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 3/1/2016 8:53:00 AM Thanks Nette, hugs Rick.

Constance La France Date: 2/29/2016 8:54:00 AM Richard, this is a great free verse, I had the same impression of the girl, that it was water she was fearing, wonderful write, I love it 7 ~ Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/29/2016 12:46:00 PM Perhaps it is fear and desire for it is their first time. Constance La France Date: 2/29/2016 9:17:00 AM oh, even better... but she looks so afraid.. Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/29/2016 8:58:00 AM In this case it was a lover who would come to her with the force of water.

Tim Smith Date: 2/28/2016 11:05:00 AM This is fabulous Richard. Hope she doesn't get eaten by any sharks ( watched Jaws last night)? Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 2/28/2016 12:24:00 PM Thanks Tim.

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