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The Raven, the Crow and Sherlock

Smoke filled the little river lounge The ceiling fans twirling to jazzy notes of the band Music weaved its way amongst the crowd Whiskey warmed my soul As my I laid my eyes on what I surely would lay A fine bird she seemed all dressed in black My eyes had already stripped this one naked and bare I smiled her way, her sultry gaze back said, let’s fly away Sherlock was sitting next to me, pipe in hand He looked me in the eye, and said never dance with a Raven young man Your love will be clawed and a bloody mess in no time In hindsight, this Sherlock was some detective He sure had a good read of the situation that night I being full of bravado and whiskey took me chances Her perfume seduced my loins I fell into her charms, this lady in black Well I must confess I took her back To my boudoir of desire I should have headed Sherlock’s dire warnings For indeed I had bedded the Raven, no doubt at all Raving mad she was Nostrils flared and claws ready to pounce On my oh so romantic heart I now have only one eye In which to read the tales of Inspector Holmes I have no ladies in waiting any more No more raving mad love affairs As I stare out my window At the old black crow

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 10/14/2014 8:32:00 AM
Haha... very original, my friend! There's something so enticing about literary characters from different author's universes meeting up with each other... especially since I'm a HUGE Sherlock fan. A mix of superstition and logic... Arthur Conan Doyle would be proud :)
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Date: 10/7/2014 6:29:00 AM
This is terrific Sugar, the story has so much meaning, so poetically matter of fact, it was cool to read. :)
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Date: 10/5/2014 8:09:00 AM
Wow, Arthur. This one is full images and lessons. Seems as though some lessons are very hard learned indeed. I enjoyed the way you wove this web of unbelievable darkness that that was so easily seen by Sherlock. Great poem, my friend.... Robert
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/11/2014 7:39:00 PM
Thanks Robert!!!
Date: 10/4/2014 8:19:00 PM
Interesting tale here. I love the ending with the one eye. Wonderful imagination.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/11/2014 7:38:00 PM
Thank you so much Brenda
Date: 10/4/2014 8:15:00 PM
Be forewarned ....birds of a feather stick together....cheers Tim
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/11/2014 7:38:00 PM
Its birds of a feather hire divorce lawyers together!!
Date: 10/4/2014 8:03:00 PM
Love the story you wove and the great imagery. 'Eye' would watch out for old crows in the future Arthur:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/11/2014 7:37:00 PM
LOL thanks Jan Hugs
Date: 10/4/2014 7:52:00 PM
Is this for the Raven poetry contest Arthur, it is really jazzy. I love it
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Jan Allison
Date: 10/4/2014 8:01:00 PM
oh heck I'm a bird of the female variety:-( Hugs jan xxx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/4/2014 7:54:00 PM
No this was just to warn you all of the looney birds out there!!!!

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